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Table of Contents

Introduction ... .xiii
1 Writing From Scratch ... ...1
Four Considerations of a Business Letter ... ..2
Organization ... ..3
The Seven "Cs" of Style ... ...6
In a Nutl ... ..8
2 Parts of a Business Letter... .9
Letterhead ... ...10
Date... ..10
File Number ... ...10
Confidential ... ...10
Inside Address ... ...10
Attention Line ... ...11
Salutation ... .11
Subject Line ... ...12
Body of the Letter ... ...12
Complimentary Close ... ...12
Signature ... ..13
Additional Information ... .13
Postscript ... ..13
Mailing Instructions ... ...13
3 Format of a Business Letter... .15
Block ... ..17
Modified Block ... .18
Modified Semi-Block ... ...19
Simplified ... .20
Hanging Indented ... .21
Memo ... .22
4 Collection Letters... ...23
Step-by-Step Guide ... .24
Notification ... .25
Reminder ... ..26
Inquiry ... ...27
Urgency ... .28
Final Notice/Ultimatum ... ...29
Insufficient Funds ... ...30





Thank You for Payment ... ...31
Lost Payment/Apology ... .32
Checklist ... ..33
5 Sales and Promotional Letters... ...35
Step-by-Step Guide ... .36
Request for Appointment ... .37
Prospective Lead ... ..38
Sales Letter to Client ... ..39
Sales Letter to Current Client ... ...40
Letter of Introduction ... .41
Follow-Up on Letter Sent ... ...42
Delinquent Reply ... .43
Extremely Delinquent Reply ... .44
Requesting Customers Assistance ... .45
Sales Follow-Up ... ..46
Confirming Sales Order ... ...47
Reminder That a Sale Is About to End ... .49
Announcing a Sales Campaign, Promotion or Incentive Program ... .50
Announcing a Sales Campaign to Preferred Customers ... ..51
Announcing New Products to a Select Group of Customers ... .52
Announcing a Price Increase ... .53
Transmittal With Instructions ... ...54
Transmittal With Request ... ...55
Transmittal With Suggestion ... .56
Transmittal With Information ... ...57
Transmittal With Sales Information ... ...58
Transmittal to Current Client ... .60
Checklist ... ..61
6 Goodwill Letters... ..63
Step-by-Step Guide ... .64
Recognizing a Suggestion ... ...65
Appreciation ... ...66
Official Anniversary ... ..67
Speech ... ...68
Invitation Formal ... ..69
Invitation Informal ... ...70
Congratulations ... .71
Thanks for Good Work: Outside Vendor ... .74
Acknowledging Accomplishments ... .75
Follow-Up After a Sale ... .79
Explaining Policy and Position ... .80





Encouragement ... .81
Announcing New Fringe Benefits ... ..82
Adjustment ... ..83
Checklist ... ..84
7 Community Activities Letters... .85
Step-by-Step Guide ... .86
Solicitation of Funds ... ..87
Acknowledgment and Request for Funds ... ...89
Appreciation and Fund-Raising Event ... ..90
Acknowledgment of Contribution ... ..91
Acknowledgment of Accomplishment ... .92
Thank You ... ...93
Grant Request ... ...94
Invitation to Serve ... ...95
Membership Invitation ... ..96
Refusal of a Request ... ..97
Expression of Appreciation ... ...98
Appointment to Office ... ..99
Appointment to a Committee ... ..100
Compliment ... .101
Invitation to Speak ... ...102
Complimenting a Speaker ... .103
Letter to Legislator Showing Support ... .104
Letter to Legislator Showing Concern ... ...105
Checklist ... ...106
8 Personal Business Letters... ...107
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..108
Congratulations ... ..109
Congratulations Social ... .110
Birthday Wishes ... .111
Holiday Greetings ... .112
Birth of a Child ... ..113
Marriage ... .114
Illness Hospital ... .115
Thank You ... .116
Apology ... ..117
Inquiry ... .118
Request ... ...119
Refusal ... ...120
Checklist ... ...121





9 Letters of Condolence... ...123
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..124
On the Death of a Business Associate ... ...125
On the Death of a Mother ... .126
On the Death of a Father ... ...127
On the Death of a Wife ... ..128
On the Death of a Husband ... ..129
On the Death of a Child ... .130
On the Death of a Brother ... .131
On the Death of a Sister ... .132
Checklist ... ...133
10 Letters About Employment Changes... ..135
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..137
Reference Request ... ...138
Waiver of Confidentiality ... .139
Request for Meeting ... .140
Job Hunter Seeking an Interview ... ..141
Interview Confirmation ... ..142
Thanks for Interview ... ...143
Unsolicited Application ... .144
Cover Letters for Resums ... ..145
Requesting Appointment ... ..147
Reply to Unsolicited Application ... .148
Job Application ... ..149
Job Hunter Seeking Job With Contact ... ...150
Solicited Application ... ..151
Job Acceptance ... ..152
Job Rejection ... ...153
Not Accepting Possible Job Offer ... ...154
Positive Resignation ... ...155
Negative Resignation ... ..156
Response to Job Offer: Covers Terms ... ...157
Request for Employment Reference ... ...158
Reference for Former Employee ... ...159
Letters of Recommendation ... .160
Character Reference ... .162
Letter of Introduction ... ..163
Progress Report ... ..164
Rejection of Application ... ...165
Responses to Rejected Job Application ... .166
Follow-Up After Not Getting the Job... ..167
Rejection of an In-House Job Applicant ... ...168





Rejection of an Unsolicited Application ... ...169
Rejection of a Solicited Application ... ...170
Invitation for an Interview ... ...171
Job Offers ... ..172
New Employee ... ...175
Promotion Congratulations ... ...176
Announcing a Promotion Personal ... ...177
Announcing a Promotion Internal ... ..178
Acceptance of Resignation ... ..179
Recommending a Raise ... .180
Rejection of Unsolicited Business ... ...181
Request for Material ... ...182
Request for Information ... .183
Confirmation to Speaker ... ...184
Giving Information ... ..185
Discontinuing Business Relationships ... ...186
Rejecting a Request ... .188
Introducing a New Employee ... .189
Checklist ... ...190
11 Customer Relations Letters ... ..191
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..192
General Appreciation ... ..193
Acknowledging a Complaint ... ..194
Following Up on a Complaint ... ...195
Regaining a Customers Confidence ... ..196
Acknowledging a Complaint Disclaiming Responsibility ... .197
Acknowledging a Complaint Explaining a Misunderstanding ... ...198
Correcting an Error ... ..199
General Apology ... ...200
Acknowledging an Order Back Order ... .201
Acknowledging an Order Explaining Shipment Procedures ... ...202
Apologizing for an Employees Action ... .203
Notifying Customers of a Move ... ...204
Holiday Greetings ... .205
Notification of Complaints ... ..206
Checklist ... ...212
12 Media Letters ... .213
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..214
Media Event Letter Sales Campaign Kickoff ... ..215
Media Event Letter Recently Published Book ... .216
Media Event Letter Anniversary ... .217





Press Release Anniversary ... .218
Press Release Speaking Engagement ... ...219
Press Release Promotion ... .220
Press Release New Employee ... ..221
Response to Editorial Positive ... .222
Response to Editorial Negative ... ...223
Letter Asking to Make a Speech ... ...224
Letter Asking for a Correction ... ...225
Checklist ... ...226
13 Electronic Mail... ..227
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..228
Announcement of Meeting ... ..230
Change in Client Status Announcement ... ...231
Request for Assistance ... ...232
Request for Materials Ordered ... ...233
Project Offer ... ...234
Follow-Up on Project ... ..235
Compliment to Employee for Work ... .236
Checklist ... ...237
14 Postcard Correspondence ... ..239
Step-by-Step Guide ... ..240
Seasonal Promotion ... .241
Acknowledging a Customer for a Special Occasion ... ..242
Invitation ... ...243
Reminder ... ...244
Checklist ... ...245
Appendix ... ...247
Professional Ranks and Titles ... .248
Federal, State and Local Government Officials ... .249
Military Ranks ... ...252
Military Abbreviations ... ...254
Diplomats ... ..255
British Nobility ... ..256
Clerical and Religious Orders ... .258
College and University Officials ... ..261
Index ... .263








NTRODUCTION













Business Letters for Busy People is designed to be used, not just read. You not only get the easy-to-read impact of chapter-by-
chapter how to information, but each section is also filled with checklists, ready-to-use letters and guidelines to help you do your job better, more effectively, more easily right now! Its literally a users manual for the business professional.
Business Letters for Busy People is packed with the most
concrete information, useful techniques and practical tips possible
in the smallest space. So you dont have to wade through endless
pages of fluff searching for that elusive kernel of wisdom.
Business Letters for Busy People gives you concise, easy-to-
use learning resources that get results. Check out the format and
dont be surprised if you find yourself leafing through the pages
for tidbits of fact and business trivia. The margins deliberately
focus your attention, acting like a thumbnail index. And, each
chapter is tabbed on the margins so you can turn right to the
chapter you need to see. Read the chapters that are immediately
important to you. Although there is a logic and order to the design of the book, you can read it in the order that best suits you. Each chapter stands alone.



Business Letters for Busy People


We know youll find this book helpful. Read it, copy it and act
on its advice. Reading a good book awakens our minds, but too
often never gets carried into action; we close the book unchanged.
With this book, your reading becomes action and action is the
key to success.




Gary Weinberg
Vice President
National Press Publications


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HAPTER 1


Writing From Scratch









You are busy no matter what your position. Since you are
busy, you want to use your time as effectively as possible. The business letter takes time but can be written more quickly if you follow a few basic principles. (If youre in a hurry, skip to Chapters 4-13 for samples of the kinds of letters you need to write.) This chapter assumes you have a little free time to brush up on business letter writing.
Keep in mind these three points when you write a letter:
1. Business letters serve one purpose.
2. Business letters are expensive.
3. Business letters serve as a record.
Business letters serve one purpose: They communicate
information. Countless hours are spent, and too many letters
are sent that say little or nothing. Thats a waste of time for
the sender and the receiver. Also, when the wages of the
writer and the typist along with the prorated cost of equipment and postage are figured in, business letters are expensive. It is important that they be cost-effective. Why write a business letter? Because business letters serve as a record. Letters are long-lasting, tangible evidence of
information you communicate to others.










In a study of 800
letters written by the
top chief executive
officers in the U.S.,
all 800 letters were
found to be short,
clear and personal.
By the time these
people became
CEOs, they had
learned never to
send out a letter that
didnt reflect those
three basic
principles of good writing.










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Four Considerations of a Business Letter
The four areas you must take into consideration for each
business letter are listed below. If you do not consider each one of them, your letter will be ineffective.
1. Subject
2. Audience
3. Purpose
4. Style/Organization
Subject
Every piece of writing from the business letter to the novel
revolves around a subject. Luckily, in the business world the
subject is usually specific. Quite often it is supplied for you by
someone else, such as a boss or colleague, or demanded by a
situation such as hiring or congratulating an employee.
Its a fact: The more specific your subject, the easier it is to
write your letter. For example, lets say that you need to request
information about an order that did not arrive when it should have.
If you are in charge of the account, writing the letter is easy. If you
are not in charge of the account, it is harder for you to write the
letter than it is for the person who knows all the particulars.
Regardless of the situation, stick to one or two subjects in your
letter. Including more than two subjects clouds your message.
Write another letter if you have more than two subjects.
Audience
This area is tricky because you may not know your audience.
If you do, you can tailor your letter to that audience. Many times,
however, your audience is larger than you expect. Your letter may
be addressed to Terry Smith but may be read by several other
people in Terrys firm to receive the action you wish. If you are
unsure of your audience, assume they are educated, reasonable
people until you find out otherwise. Dont assume they have as
much knowledge of the subject of your letter as you do, or you
may overgeneralize or forget to include important details.

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Writing From Scratch


Purpose
Many letters are sent with a specific subject and audience in mind but are not clear in their purpose.
Know why you are sending the letter. Is the letter to inform? Is it to request information? Is it to offer congratulations?
Condolences? Is it to get the recipient to act on a request? All of these are very different purposes. You have probably received a letter that, after reading it, left you confused because you didnt know exactly what it said. The purpose was not clear.
Style/Organization
The first three areas dictate the content, direction and emphasis of the letter.
1. Know WHAT youre writing about SUBJECT.
2. Know WHO youre writing for AUDIENCE.
3. Know WHY youre writing PURPOSE.
Now you are ready to be concerned with HOW you are going to write the letter. The first three areas can be determined in a
matter of minutes if you are familiar with the ideas that need to be communicated. The fourth area style and organization takes more time. (If youre pressed for time, refer to the sample letters in Chapters 4-13.)
Organization
Most of this book is devoted to the way different types of letters are organized. However, the basic organization for the body of a business letter follows.
Part 1 of Body: State your purpose.
Part 2 of Body: Explain what you want to happen or
explain the information you have.
Part 3 of Body: Request a dated action, conclude or thank
the reader for his response.
Notice that these are parts or sections rather than paragraphs. In some cases, particularly Part 2, the parts may consist of more than one paragraph. Lets take a look at each of these parts.

1



The So What?
Test
When you have
finished a draft of
your letter, read
each paragraph and
ask yourself, So
what? in the same
way a new reader
might. If you cant
answer that from
the paragraph,
consider leaving it
out.















Brevity is the soul of wit.
William
Shakespeare






3



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Tell em what youre
going to say, say it,
and tell em what
you said.













State your purpose.
Explain what you
want to happen or
explain the
information you
have.
Request a dated
action, conclude,
thank the reader.



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Part 1 of the Body
Get right to the point in the first sentence of the letter. When
you read a novel, you expect to have background information
before the story ever starts. When you read a business letter, you
expect to be told immediately what will happen. Remember, your
reader doesnt have any more time to wade through a long letter
than you do.
This part is usually a short paragraph. Anything too long will cause the reader to lose patience.
Part 2 of the Body
This is the bread and butter of the letter. It explains the
information you are giving, or it explains what you want the
recipient to do. It doesnt need to be elaborate, but it does need to include all of the information the recipient needs.
If you have a lot of information, break it into short paragraphs,
make a list or refer to an attachment. Underlining essential
information is one way to highlight key points for your reader.
Your letter should be organized to help the recipient
understand what to know or what to do.
Part 3 of the Body
This, like the first part, is usually a short paragraph. In writing classes, its called the clincher not a bad way to remember its function. Depending on the purpose of your letter, it will do one of three things.
1. Conclude. In an informational letter, this allows you to point out the most important item or draw all your key points into one statement.
2. Request action. In letters that require a response, such as collection letters, you define the action you want the recipient to take. In this part, you tell the reader what to do and when to do it. Being vague gets vague results. Be specific.
3. Thank the reader. In some letters, this part is simply a thank you for the recipients attention, response or concern.



Writing From Scratch 1


In many ways, the method of writing a business letter is like
the rule of thumb for giving a speech: Tell them what youre going
to talk about. Talk about it. Then tell them what you talked about.
The following sample letter shows how each of the three parts
work.

Capital Supplies
8995 Camden Rd. Williamsburg, WI 63094

October 2, 20XX

Lance Smith, Director
Terrance Trucking
P.O. Box 4440
Houston, TX 34598-4440

Dear Mr. Smith:

Thank you for your conscientious service. All 15 of your last shipments State Your Purpose
have arrived undamaged. We have never contracted with a supplier with
as fine a record as yours. We appreciate the extra effort it takes to ship our
order intact and on time.
Ted McCracken and Bob Smiley have delivered these shipments to our Explain What You
loading dock supervisor. I have attached copies of logs for your review. Want to Happen or
Note that the unloading time is approximately half of that from other Explain the
shippers for a similar load. Ted and Bob frequently help our crew unload Information You
the crates. This additional service always comes with an exchange of Have
jokes. Our crew collects laughs to compete with your drivers!

Doing business with your organization is a pleasure. You save us money Request a Dated
by eliminating shipping waste and time by providing efficient drivers. Action, Conclude,
Please accept the enclosed certificates of merit to Terrance Trucking, Ted Thank the Reader
and Bob, with our appreciation. We are confident in referring our
customers and vendors to Terrance Trucking for their shipping needs.

Sincerely,

Cala Reginald
CLR:mjk
Enc. (10)

5



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Writing, when
properly managed,
is but a different
name for
conversation.
Laurence Sterne























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Style is how you write the letter. Business letters used to be
written in what might be called businessese, a formal, stiff
language. That is no longer true. The predominant style is matter-
of-fact and conversational. Gone are such phrases as the
aforementioned and due to the fact that. Our high-tech,
impersonal society requires business professionals to be more
personable in their written communication in order to be more
effective. The Seven Cs of Style will help you become more
effective.
The Seven Cs of Style
1. Conversational. Write the way you speak. Get rid of
stilted phrases. Why say due to the fact that when you
can say because? Would you normally say the
aforementioned information? Why not the information
or, if you need to refer to a point, the previous
information?
2. Clear. The goal of clarity is that the reader understands
precisely what you are saying. The language of your letter
should be adapted to the recipient. This means that you
write in a matter-of-fact, conversational tone. Use specific
examples the reader can relate to. Dont assume that your
reader understands the jargon of your trade. Remember,
most letters will be read by people other than the recipient
of the letter. These people may be unfamiliar with the
technical language or jargon you use. Clarity also means
organizing your letter so each paragraph deals with only
one main idea and presenting your ideas in a logical order.
Your letter should not be a collection of random ideas. It
should be single-minded in its purpose.
3. Concise. A concise letter eliminates all unnecessary
words. Why use four words, in as much as, when you
can use one word, because? This is not to say that you
cant write long letters, but the longer the letter, the more
ineffective it becomes. It is better to write a short letter
with attachments than a long, detailed one. Short letters
are read and remembered; long letters are skimmed and
filed.



Writing From Scratch 1


4. Complete. Make sure you have included all the
information the reader needs to know. (Dont include Proper words in
details that are interesting but not relevant.) The biggest proper places make
problem with leaving out information is that the reader has the true definition of
to make assumptions. For example, dont say, When we style.
last spoke about the situation, when you can say, When Jonathan Swift
we spoke on June 8 about hiring a new administrative assistant.
Remember that the reader cant read your mind. The reader can only guess at what you left out.
5. Concrete. Use specific terms that cannot be
misunderstood. Dont say, The large order that we
requested has not arrived. Say, The order for 10,000
basins that we requested on May 3, 20XX, has not arrived as of June 20. Identify names and numbers.
Write about what people can count or do. Include what
people can see, touch, smell, taste or hear. In other words, make your language tangible. Make it concrete.
6. Constructive. Use words and phrases that set a positive
tone. Constructive words are like smiling when you greet
someone. They leave a good impression. Words such as
failure, you neglected and error tend to distance the
recipient from the writer. Words such as agreeable,
proud and success help create a positive tone.
7. Correct. The last step in writing any business letter is to
proofread it. You automatically check your image in a
mirror before going out or meeting someone. The letter
you send is your image on paper. If it is riddled with
spelling, grammatical and typographical errors, it will
detract from what you are trying to get across. The
reaction will be, He cant spell, or She doesnt know
how to type.
If you have a secretary, dont assume your secretary
knows how to spell or punctuate. Luckily, most do, but
proof your own letters. Why? Because it is your name that is signed at the bottom of the page, not your secretarys. You will be the one who looks bad.

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In a Nutl
Writing a business letter need not be difficult as long as you
remember that you are communicating with another business
person just like yourself. If you incorporate Subject, Audience,
Purpose and Style/Organization into your correspondence, you
will be on the road to better business letter writing.






































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HAPTER 2



2


Parts of a Business Letter








There are many parts to the business letter some
required, some optional. This chapter will review those parts and their order. The parts of the business letter follow:
1. Letterhead or Heading
2. Date
3. File Number (optional)
4. Confidential (optional)
5. Inside Address
6. Attention Line (optional)
7. Salutation (optional)
8. Subject Line (optional)
9. Body of the Letter
10. Complimentary Close (optional)
11. Signature
12. Added Information (optional)
13. Postscript (optional)
14. Mailing Instructions (optional)




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Business Letters for Busy People
2
Letterhead
Most business letters originating from a firm are written on the
firms letterhead. If you are writing a personal business letter or
your firm does not use letterhead, then you need to include your
firms address in the heading (see Chapter 3 for the various
formats).
Date
When you are using a heading instead of letterhead, place the
date on the first line and the address on the subsequent lines as
follows:

The standard
dateline in the U.S.
is month/day/year:
(March 15, 20XX).
In Europe, however, the most widely used format is
day/month/year:
(15 March 20XX).




















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September 9, 20XX

359 Longview Road
Mt. Vernon, IL 65676
This should be the date the letter is written (see Chapter 3 for placement in the various formats). Be sure to write out the month and to include both the date and year for adequate reference.
File Number
On occasion, you may wish to include the file number of the
project, case or order that the letter refers to. The file number
should be physically separated from the date by two spaces and
from the part that follows (Confidential or Inside Address) by two
spaces.
Confidential
Use this word when the person to whom the letter is addressed is the only one who should read the letter. Physically separate the word from the rest of the letter by two lines. To assure
confidentiality, include the word Confidential on the envelope.
Inside Address
This should include the name of the person you are writing to,
the persons title (if available), the name of the firm and the firms
address.



Parts of a Business Letter
2
Attention Line
This is used when you do not know the name of the person
you are writing to and the letter is addressed to the firm. For
example, the attention line may say, Attention: Head of
Accounting. It may also be used when you know the name of the
person you are writing to but are unsure of the title. The attention
line may say, Attention: Customer Service, thus indicating to the
person receiving the letter that the letter also needs to be routed to
the customer service department. Another way of doing this is to
use the attention line and send copies of the letter to the
appropriate department.

Salutation
The salutation is used in all formats (see Chapter 3) except the Simplified Letter and the Memo. The following are salutations used in American business letters.
Dear Sir
Dear Madam (May be followed by title, such as Dear
Madam Chairperson.)
Gentlemen
Ladies
Dear Mr. Bryan
Dear Ms. Gray
Ladies and Gentlemen
Dear Personnel Director (a gender-free title)
To Whom It May Concern or TO WHOM IT MAY
CONCERN (Use this form as a last resort.)
Caution: You must determine the appropriate choice, given
your reader and the situation. If you are uncertain
about your readers gender, avoid assuming gender
in the salutation. Use your readers name whenever
you know it. Researchers discovered that people are
more likely to read a letter with their names in the
salutation.


People dont usually
get upset if you
dont address them
with the proper
salutation, but they
notice and
appreciate it when you do.





















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2
One of the problems you may run into is writing to a person
with a name that is not gender specific; for example, the name
Terry. The simplest solution in the salutation is to say, Dear Terry
Lucas. If you are addressing a group of people in general, such as
the shipping department, do not assume they are all male. The old
Gentlemen is not acceptable. Shipping Agents is preferred.
The way around having to use a salutation when you are unsure of
whom you are writing is to use the Simplified Letter (see
Chapter 3).
Subject Line
The subject line is most commonly used in the Simplified Letter. It announces the subject of the letter and provides a summary of your intent.


Unless youre
aiming for the
Nobel prize, you
shouldnt worry
about your writing
talent. Writing good
business s
is a craft, not an art.
It requires skill, not
talent, and you can
learn skills.















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Body of the Letter
This is where you make requests, provide information or reasons, or reply to someone. It is the main part of the business letter (see Chapter 3 for the various body formats).
Complimentary Close
This varies in formality and is found in all business letters with the exception of the Simplified Letter and the Memo (see Chapter 3 for its placement). The following complimentary closes are in order of decreasing formality:
Very truly yours,
Respectfully,
Sincerely yours,
Cordially,
Sincerely,
The most appropriate, in general situations, is the last.



Parts of a Business Letter
2
Signature
There should be four lines between the complimentary close (or the body in the Simplified Letter) and your typed name so there is room for your signature.
Additional Information
If needed, this consists of the senders initials in capital letters
followed by a colon, followed by the typists initials in small
letters. You may also find the abbreviations Enc. for enclosure
and cc: or xc: for copies sent, followed by names of persons
receiving the copies.
Postscript
The P.S. highlights additional information that might have
been placed in the letter but for some reason was not. Often used
in sales, promotional or personal letters, the postscript can
emphasize a request for action or consideration. It is often the first
thing the recipient reads. Use it to entice or motivate your reader.
Postscripts are especially effective in sales or form letters.
Mailing Instructions
Use these to give the reader deadlines or pertinent information on mailing a reply.
As you look through the major formats in Chapter 3, its
obvious that many of the parts listed above are not necessarily
used in routine business correspondence. However, it helps to be
aware of all of them in case you need to use any of them.











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HAPTER 3 3


Format of a Business Letter








Business letter formats have changed over the years. If
you went to school prior to the 1970s, you probably learned
one basic form of business letter now called the Modified
Semi-Block. It was the bane of every beginning typist
because of its strict rules concerning spacing. Luckily, the
movement in business has been to simplify and provide
choices. Now you have a choice of six different forms, some
extremely simple, others more complex. This chapter will
review the various forms. The six forms of business letters
most commonly used are:
Block Simplified
Modified Block Hanging Indented
Modified Semi-Block Memo
It is likely that your organization may prefer one form
over another. In the following explanations, the assumption is
that you will be using letterhead stationery. If you are writing
a personal business letter without letterhead, place your
address one line above or below the date as in the following
examples:
August 3, 20XX 2578 Tarrymore Lane
or Chicago, IL 66557-1234
2578 Tarrymore Lane
Chicago, IL 66557-1234 August 3, 20XX

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The state in the senders address and the inside address may be
3 written out in a formal letter or abbreviated with the two-letter
postal service code in an informal letter. As the postal services
recommendation to use the new format for envelope addresses
gains momentum, we will see another change in the business
letter: The inside address may match the envelope address to
eliminate the need for two separate databases for address styles.
Both can look like this:
2578 TARRYMORE LANE
CHICAGO IL 66557-1234
All letters are capitalized, and no line punctuation is used,
which allows the electronic scanners to sort the mail more quickly. The nine-digit ZIP code is also gaining popularity to process and deliver mail more quickly.





























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Format of a Business Letter

Block

The Block format is by far the simplest. Every part of the
letter starts at the left margin, with spaces between each part. It has a professional look to it. The order for the parts of the letter are date, file number, inside address, attention line, salutation, subject line, body, complimentary close, signature, typed name and
additional information.
Italics Unlimited
231 W. 40th Street Camden, NJ 08618 (623) 555-2678
August 10, 20XX
XXX
Terry Lancaster
Capital Supply
657 Minden Ct.
Des Moines, Iowa 54687
Attention: President of Capital Supply
Dear Mr. Lancaster:
Subject: XXXXXXXX
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXXXX
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXX
Sincerely,
Signature
Joan McAllister
JFM:eer
P.S.XXXXXXXXX
XXXXXXXXX

3






Letterhead
Date (2-3 spaces)
File Number
Inside Address
(2-3 spaces)



Attention Line
(2-3 spaces)
Salutation
(2-3 spaces)
Subject Line
Body
(2 spaces between
paragraphs)


Complimentary
Close (4 spaces for signature)
Signature
Typed Name
(2-3 spaces)
Additional
Information
Postscript
Mailing Instructions


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3



Modified Block
Like the Block, the Modified Block has the advantage of
separating paragraphs so that each one stands out. The spacing
between sections remains the same as in the Block. The date,
signature and closing are placed to the right, thus allowing them to
stand out. The complimentary close and the signature are aligned
and placed near the center of the letter, two spaces below the last
paragraph.

Italics Unlimited Letterhead
231 W. 40th Street Camden, NJ 08618 (623) 555-2678


August 10, 20XX Date (right of center)

Terry Lancaster Inside Address
Capital Supply (left margin)
657 Minden Ct.
Des Moines, Iowa 54687

Dear Mr. Lancaster: Salutation (2-3 spaces)

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Body
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX (left margin with 2
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX spaces between
paragraphs)
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXXXXX

Sincerely, Complimentary Close
(right of center)
Signature Signature
(right of center)

Joan McAllister

JFM:eer

Typed Name
Additional
Information
(left margin)


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Format of a Business Letter


Modified Semi-Block 3
You will recognize the Modified Semi-Block as the format most commonly taught as the business letter. It is the same as the Modified Block except that the paragraphs are indented five spaces. All spacing remains the same.

Italics Unlimited Letterhead
231 W. 40th Street Camden, NJ 08618 (623) 555-2678

August 10, 20XX Date (right of center)

Terry Lancaster Inside Address
Capital Supply (left margin)
657 Minden Ct.
Des Moines, Iowa 54687

Dear Mr. Lancaster: Salutation

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Body
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX (indent paragraphs 5
XXXXXXXXXXXXXX spaces and separate
paragraphs with 2
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX spaces)
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXXX

Sincerely, Complimentary Close
(right of center)
Signature Signature
(right of center)
Joan McAllister Typed Name
(right of center)
JFM:eer Additional Information
(left margin)






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Business Letters for Busy People


3 Simplified
This is useful when you do not know the title of the person you are writing to or when you are writing to a company,
government agency or organization. It eliminates the courtesy titles (Mr., Mrs., Ms., Dr.), the salutations and the complimentary close. The focus of the letter is on the body and what is to be said. The spacing is the same as the Block format.
Italics Unlimited Letterhead
231 W. 40th Street Camden, NJ 08618 (623) 555-2678


August 10, 20XX Date
Terry Lancaster Inside Address
Capital Supply
657 Minden Ct.
Des Moines, Iowa 54687
SUBJECT: PRINTING SUPPLIES Subject of Letter
(highlight this
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX summary line with
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX capitalization,
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX bold face or
underlining)
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Body
XXXXXXXXXXXXXX (2 spaces between
paragraphs)

Signature Signature

Joan McAllister Typed Name
Additional
JFM:eer Information





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Format of a Business Letter


Hanging Indented 3
On occasion you will see this form but, for all practical
purposes, it is seldom used. Its main advantage is that it calls
attention to the body and each of the paragraphs. Spacing between the lines and sections is the same as in previous examples.

Italics Unlimited Letterhead
231 W. 40th Street Camden, NJ 08618 (623) 555-2678


August 10, 20XX Date (right of center)
Terry Lancaster Inside Address
Capital Supply (2-3 spaces)
657 Minden Ct.
Des Moines, Iowa 54687
Dear Mr. Lancaster: Salutation

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Body
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX (indent second and
XXXXXX subsequent lines in
each paragraph)
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Sincerely, Complimentary Close
(right of center)
Signature Signature
(right of center)
Joan McAllister Typed Name
(right of center)
JFM:eer Additional Information
(left margin)






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3 Memo
A sixth form of letter is the Memo. Though used primarily as
an interoffice communication, it is occasionally used as a business
letter format. The top of the Memo indicates the date, the name(s)
of the recipient(s), the name(s) of the sender(s) and the subject.
The abbreviation RE is sometimes used instead of Subject.
This information is placed at the left margin. The body of the
Memo is in Block form. A signature and additional information are optional. The signature is often placed near the center with the additional information at the left margin.
MEMORANDUM Memo Information
(2-3 spaces)
Date: August 10, 20XX
To: Terry Lancaster
From: Joan McAllister
Subject: Printing Supplies

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Body
XXXX (single-spaced lines,
2 spaces between
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX paragraphs)
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX XXXXXXXXXX

Signature Signature (2-3 spaces)

Joan McAllister Typed Name

JFM:eer Additional
cc: Ted Kapstein, Marsha Little Information
(left margin)



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HAPTER 4







4

Collection Letters








This chapter has sample collection letters you may have

to write. The types of collection letters included are:
Notification
Reminder
Inquiry
Urgency
Final Notice/Ultimatum
Insufficient Funds
Thank You for Payment
Lost Payment/Apology
In this section, at the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section of the letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the basic format.

Creditors have
better memories
than debtors.
Ben Franklin
























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Step-by-Step Guide
The purpose of the collection letter is to get the customer to
4 pay an overdue bill.
Step 1: Check the spelling of the recipients name. Use a
gender-specific courtesy title only if you are certain of
the recipients gender. There is nothing more
embarrassing or irritating than getting a collection
letter, except getting one that is addressed improperly.
Step 2: The first part of the letter should state the concern and
the situation (date purchased, amount owed and date
due).
Step 3: The next part of the letter should indicate the deadline
for paying the bill and any penalties that may result.
You may also wish to indicate your companys policy
concerning late payments, grace periods, penalties or
alternative payment plans.
Step 4: The third part of the letter should indicate the
consequences of not paying the bill. Initially, these
may be penalties but, as the bill becomes more
delinquent, it may include warnings of ruined credit
ratings or involvement of a collection agency.
Step 5: The final part of the letter should encourage the
recipient to send full payment or contact you to
arrange a payment schedule. End with goodwill and a
positive attitude that this situation will be resolved
satisfactorily.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write collection letters.










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Collection Letters


Notification
This letter is to notify the recipient that the bill is overdue.
4
Western Wear Letterhead
2212 Boot Hill Rd. Cheyenne, WY 82001
July 5, 20XX Date (2-3 spaces)
Ted Wilson Inside Address
515 Ramey Ct. (2-3 spaces)
Laramie, WY 82063
Dear Mr. Wilson: Salutation
Thank you for shopping with us. You are a valued customer. State the Concern
We appreciate your business and know that you want to keep your account current with us.
On May 15, 20XX, you purchased merchandise worth State the Situation
$319.04 from our store in Laramie. Your payment of $100 is now overdue.
In the credit agreement you signed, you agreed to pay off Indicate Deadline
your bill in three payments. The first payment of $100 was due June 15, 20XX. Please send this amount now.
Failure to pay on time may affect your ability to charge Indicate Consequences
merchandise at our store. Thank you for your prompt
attention.
You may call me at 800-555-9875 if you have any questions Indicate Contact
or concerns. Your continued patronage is important to us. Indicate Goodwill
Sincerely, Complimentary Close
Signature Signature
Mary West Typed Name
Credit Manager
MJW:cjl Additional Information


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Reminder
This letter reminds the reader that the bill is overdue and the
4 payment still hasnt been received. Be careful to focus on
observable behaviors and to avoid assumptions. Saying, We have not received payment, is an observable behavior. Saying, You have not sent payment, is an assumption. Stay positive.

Western Wear
2212 Boot Hill Rd. Cheyenne, WY 82001
August 5, 20XX
Ted Wilson
515 Ramey Ct.
Laramie, WY 82063
Dear Mr. Wilson:
We have not yet received your payments. This is to remind Remind Recipient of
you that both your first and second payments of $100 are the Situation
now overdue. This $200 plus the balance of $119.04 is due
on August 15.
In the credit agreement you signed, you agreed to pay off Request Payment
your bill in three payments. The first payment of $100 was and Indicate Deadline
due June 15, 20XX, the second payment of $100 was due
July 15, 20XX, and the final payment of $119.04 is due
August 15, 20XX. Please send the full amount in 10 days.
Failure to pay on time will affect your ability to charge Indicate
merchandise at our store. If you want to discuss your Consequences,
account, call me at 800-555-9875. Perhaps we can arrange a Alternative and
more comfortable payment plan. Contact
Thank you for your immediate attention. Indicate Goodwill
Sincerely,
Signature
Mary West
Credit Manager


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Collection Letters


Inquiry
This letter inquires why the bill isnt being paid. It assumes
that the bill is overdue. Its a good idea to follow this letter with a 4
personal phone call inquiring about the payment delay. Often an
alternative plan can be arranged to suit the recipients current
budget constraints. If another agreement is reached, send a copy of
the new payment plan to the recipient. Continue to follow up
letters with phone calls to maintain open communication. Keep a
log of all calls.
Western Wear
2212 Boot Hill Rd. Cheyenne, WY 82001
September 5, 20XX
Ted Wilson
515 Ramey Ct.
Laramie, WY 82063
Dear Mr. Wilson:
Is there some reason you have not paid your bill of $319.04? Inquire
In the credit agreement you signed, you agreed to pay off Indicate Deadline
your bill in three payments. Your total bill is now overdue.
Please send $319.04 within 10 days. If you have any
questions or concerns regarding this bill, please contact me Indicate Contact
at 800-555-9875 by September 10.
Failure to send the full amount by September 15 may mean Indicate Consequences
that your bill is turned over to a collection agency. Your
prompt attention is urgent to protect your credit.
Sincerely,
Signature
Mary West
Credit Manager
MJW:cjl

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Urgency
This letter stresses the urgency of the need for the customer to
4 take some kind of action on the bill. It is a continuing progress
report on the recipients account. If an alternative payment plan
has been reached previously, indicate the details of the agreement
and the telephone contact dates to keep an accurate record of
communications.
Western Wear
2212 Boot Hill Rd. Cheyenne, WY 82001



November 5, 20XX

Ted Wilson
515 Ramey Ct.
Laramie, WY 82063

Dear Mr. Wilson:

Your bill of $319.04 is now overdue 60 days. Send $319.04 State the Situation
within 10 days. If you cannot send the total, please call me at Indicate Grace Period
800-555-9875. (indicate alternative, if
agreed)
Failure to respond may mean that your bill is turned over to Indicate Probable
a collection agency. Thank you for your prompt attention. Consequences

Sincerely,

Signature

Mary West
Credit Manager

MJW:cjl




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Collection Letters


Final Notice/Ultimatum
This letter is the final notice the customer receives. It gives the
customer an ultimatum: If you do not respond, this will happen. 4
After this letter, there are no more chances.

Western Wear
2212 Boot Hill Rd. Cheyenne, WY 82001


December 1, 20XX

Ted Wilson
515 Ramey Ct.
Laramie, WY 82063

Dear Mr. Wilson:

Your bill of $319.04 is now 90 days overdue. State the Situation

The total amount is due now. Indicate Deadline
If your payment in full is not received by December 10, your Indicate Consequences
file will be turned over to a collection agency.

Sincerely,

Signature

Mary West
Credit Manager

MJW:cjl








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Business Letters for Busy People


Insufficient Funds
Sometimes a good customer sends a bad check.
4
Zenith Building Supplies Senders Address
678 Central Parkway
Durham, NC 27715

August 13, 20XX

Tim Blackwell, President
Blackwell Builders
98 Diego Dr.
Durham, NC 27713

Dear Mr. Blackwell:

Thank you for your July 28 payment, check #1429 for $200. Thank You
Unfortunately, it was returned by your bank because of State Problem
insufficient funds.
Im returning the check to you for your review. Please send a Action Plan
payment this week after you reconcile this matter with your bank. If we receive your payment by August 31, you will avoid accruing additional interest charges on your
outstanding balance with us.

Your continued patronage is important to us. We appreciate Goodwill
your good payment record in the past year. We know that you, too, will be happy when this situation is resolved. If I can help, just call me at 800-555-1234.

Sincerely,

Signature
Jackie Quentin
Enc.

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Collection Letters


Thank You for Payment
A collection letter that is often neglected is the thank-you
note. It can provide a reminder of both the account status and the 4
customers importance.
Word Trade, Inc.
5698 Adie Road St. Ann, MO 63074

April 19, 20XX

Vern Mueller
13245 Greenwood Lane
Overland Park, KS 66213

Dear Mr. Mueller:

Thank you for your payment of $563.89. Your current Thank You
balance is $3,000 your credit limit. A payment of $500 is Caution/Reminder
due May 1.

We appreciate your attention to your account status with us. Appreciation
Your patronage is important to our company.

If we can assist you, please contact us at 800-555-9000. Contact Information

Sincerely,

Signature

Anita Collins
Account Executive

AC:etr







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Business Letters for Busy People


Lost Payment/Apology
Sometimes a bill adjustment and an apology are necessary.
4
Deems Department Store
2030 Aquamarine Road
Silver Spring, MD 20904
August 4, 20XX

Mrs. Franklin
5930 E. 46th St.
Colesville, MD 20901
Dear Mrs. Franklin:
Your patience has been bountiful. When we last spoke on Acknowledgment
Friday, I had not yet located your payment. I have credited Adjustment
$45.89 to your account today.
Our policy states that one percent interest (APR) is accrued Policy
on the last workday of the month on any account balance.
However, we are withdrawing this policy for you for Adjustment
August 1 through October 31, during which time your account will reflect a zero-interest adjustment.
We found your check (#984, dated June 20, 20XX) on our Reason
mailroom floor this morning. The envelope was torn away and the check was crumpled. We are still speculating about how it disappeared.
To offset any inconvenience the interim bills have caused Benefit
you, we are enclosing a 20 percent discount coupon for your
next order. Just attach the coupon to your order and Ill
personally assist you.
Thank you for your patience, Mrs. Franklin. Please accept Thank You
our warmest apology. Apology
Sincerely,
Signature
Sybil Paxton
Customer Service Manager
SP:smm

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Collection Letters



Checklist
Did you verify the name of the recipient?
Was the tone of the letter firm but understanding?
Did you state the amount owed?
Did you state when the bill was originally due?
Did you state the penalties, if any?
Did you suggest an alternative payment plan?
Did you state the grace period, if any?
Did you state the new deadline?
Did you summarize telephone contacts?
Did you indicate the consequences of not paying the bill?











































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4


















HAPTER 5


Sales and Promotional Letters 5








Actually, all letters are sales letters in business. You are selling a service or product as well as your image as a
business. These letters intend to initiate or close a sale. The broad categories follow:
Request for Appointment
Prospective Lead
Sales Letters to Clients
Letter of Introduction
Follow-Up on Letter Sent
Delinquent Reply
Extremely Delinquent Reply
Requesting Customers Assistance
Sales Follow-Up
Confirming Sales Order
Reminder That a Sale Is About to End
Announcing a Sales Campaign, Promotion or
Incentive Program
Announcing a Sales Campaign to Preferred
Customers
Announcing New Products to a Select Group
of Customers
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Business Letters for Busy People



Announcing a Price Increase
Transmittal Letters
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of
each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section of the
5 letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the basic format.
Step-by-Step Guide
Sales and promotional letters are used by salespeople to set up
or confirm appointments, announce sales promotions, congratulate
salespeople on their successes and introduce new salespeople to
their clients. The letter itself is a sales tool. These letters are often
more creative in content and composition than other kinds of
letters.
Step 1: The first part of the letter states your purpose.
Depending on the reason for writing the letter, this
may vary from requesting an appointment to
introducing a new salesperson. Your purpose is to
stimulate the readers interest. Identify the benefit to
your recipient.
Step 2: The second part of the letter gives details or
background information. This is the persuasive part of
the letter. If you are making a request, then this part
would give the reason for the request. For example, in
a request for an appointment, the second part would
set up the time for the appointment, provide the
telephone number where you can be reached and state
the location of the appointment. If you are introducing
a new salesperson, this part would give his
background.
Step 3: The last part of the letter acts as a statement of desired
action and as a summary reminding the recipient of
the letters general nature. In many sales and
promotional letters, this is a thank you; in others, it is
a restatement of what has been said previously. It may
also be used to summarize the details of an
appointment. Many sales letters include a handwritten
postscript to emphasize urgency or a benefit.
36 Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write a sales and promotional letter.



Sales and Promotional Letters


Request for Appointment
This letter is used by the salesperson to set up appointments and to announce his schedule. Include an added service or an extra effort to encourage the recipient to see you later. It is an

introductory letter and should be followed up with another letter or
phone call.
Carringtons Letterhead

5

38 E. 91st St. Chicago, IL 60614

January 25, 20XX Date

Linda Montgomery, Manager Inside Address

A-1 Cleaners

2903 Burresh St.

Lincoln, NE 68506

Dear Ms. Montgomery: Salutation

I will be in Lincoln on February 3 and would like to meet with Request for

you at your office to discuss cleaning supplies you may need in Appointment

the second half of the year.

I have enclosed our latest catalog. Please note the items in Added Service

yellow highlight. They are special values or new products that

A-1 Cleaners will want to take advantage of now. Benefit

I will contact you later this week to schedule an appointment. Confirmation

If you need to get in touch with me, call me at 800-555-9047. I Contact Information

look forward to talking with you. Thank you for your Thank You

continued business.

Sincerely yours, Complimentary Close

Signature Signature

Douglas James Typed Name

Sales Representative Title

DNJ:llr Additional Information
Enc.
P.S.See page 68 of our catalog for a great value on our Postscript
most-ordered product choice!

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Business Letters for Busy People


Prospective Lead
This letter is a follow-up from a lead given to the salesperson. It introduces the salesperson to the prospective lead.

5

Toms Sport Supply
665 Spinning Wheel Ct. Bilmont, UT 84106


December 4, 20XX

Terrance OToole
Golfers Teed Off
870 C. Street
Walla Walla, WA 98661

Dear Mr. OToole:

You and your firm have been recommended by Cal
Gonzonles of Fore, Inc. Cal indicated that you may be
interested in the line of products that we have, particularly
our new Golflite line. I have enclosed our latest catalog.

I will be in the Walla Walla area the week of December 16. I would like to meet with you to discuss how our Golflite line can help your business. I will contact you within the next 10 days to schedule an appointment. In the meantime, if you have any questions, call me at 800-555-1125. I look forward to meeting you.

Sincerely yours,

Signature

Chip Ashcroft
Sales Representative

CNAam
Enc.















Purpose

Reference
Added Service

Request for
Appointment


Contact Information


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Sales and Promotional Letters


Sales Letter to Client
A sales letter is used to introduce the contact and generate
interest.
WAVERLEY HOTEL
360 South Dearborn Chicago, IL 60604 5
August 15, 20XX
Fred E. Sherman, Secretary
The Paramount Institute
P.O. Box 323
Orlando, FL 32822
Dear Mr. Sherman:
Just a note to introduce myself and to let you know of the Reason for Letter
Waverley Hotels interest in the 20XX meeting plans of the
Paramount Institute.
The Waverley Hotel contains 674 newly redecorated guest Details
rooms; this includes 12 double room suites. The hotel is
located in the heart of Chicago, only 30 minutes from
Midway airport. Our three four-star restaurants offer our
guests variety in menu selection and atmosphere. Our 36,000
square feet of meeting and banquet space include the citys
largest ballroom and the largest on-site exhibition hall. I
have enclosed a complete schedule of our function space Enclosure
dimensions and capacities.
Please stop by and see us if you are in our area we would States Follow-up Plans
like the opportunity to show off our hotel. In the meantime,
however, I will call your office next week to answer any Contact Information
questions you may have on the Waverleys facilities and to
discuss how we may be of service to the Paramount Institute.
Sincerely,
Signature
Carol Brawn
Director, Convention Services
JS:drb
Enc.
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Business Letters for Busy People


Sales Letter to Current Client
This letter asks an existing client for more business.
GERSON ACCOUNTING SERVICES

5

P.O. Box 514
San Francisco, CA 94133
September 10, 20XX
John L. Hoffman
United Services Bank
P.O. Box 8976
San Francisco, CA 94133
Dear Mr. Hoffman:
This afternoon I spoke with Don Smith at the United Services Bank in Berkeley. During our conversation, Don mentioned that the bank uses a local CPA firm to maintain its book depreciation records.
Since we prepare the tax return for United Services Bank, it
would seem to make sense for us to maintain both systems.
We would incur some set-up cost; however, this would be
recouped over a relatively short period through efficiencies
in running both depreciation systems through one software
package.
If you are interested in this idea, I will put together an
estimate of the set-up cost for you. For your information,
since the banks book depreciation system is in very good
shape, I would anticipate our set-up time on this account to
be less than what we have encountered in setting up other
clients.
Sincerely,
Signature
Steve Brooks
Vice President
JFS: dkf

Senders Address











Statement of the Situation


Reason
Benefit



Service
Benefit


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Sales and Promotional Letters


Letter of Introduction
This letter is used to introduce one person to another such
as a new salesperson to an established client. If you address the
recipient by first name, you can do likewise with the person being

introduced. If a courtesy title and a last name are more
appropriate, be consistent with all the names that are mentioned in
the salutation, body and closing signature.
Sea Lanes
8945 N. Shore Dr. Boston, MA 01611 1-800-555-3456

November 22, 20XX
Carl N. White
Lobster Trappers Ltd.
Box 65
Kepaquadick Cove, ME 04103

Dear Carl:
I am happy to introduce our new sales representative, Terry King, Introduction
to you. Terry will be in charge of servicing your account. Reason

5

Terry is a graduate of the University of Maine and holds a degree
in Sales and Marketing. For the last five years he has worked as a salesman for Boston Fisheries and Equipment. We are proud to have him on our staff and are sure he will be able to give you the kind of service you have come to expect from Sea Lanes.

Please call us if there is anything we can do for you. Terry will be
contacting you within the next two weeks to personally introduce
himself, discuss his monthly schedule and answer any questions
you might have. Ask Terry about his familys secret recipe for
lobster!

Sincerely yours,
Signature
T.K. (Tip) Walton
Director of Sales

TKW:joi


Background Information
Support


Request
Contact Information Personal Note

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Business Letters for Busy People


Follow-Up on Letter Sent
This letter asks the customer if he has received a letter.

Three Ws
5 Box 231 Medford, MO 64506
December 1, 20XX

Richard Patterson
789 Winterwood Lane
St. Joseph, MO 64503

Dear Mr. Patterson:

On November 10, I sent you a letter describing our newest Reference
product. Did you receive the letter?

I will be happy to answer any questions you may have and Purpose
explain the unique features of Vu-More and its benefits to
you.

You are a valued customer. If there is any way that Compliment
I can help you in making a decision, please call me at Assistance Offer and
800-555-1309. Contact Information

Sincerely,

Signature

Kay Lynne Overmeyer
Sales Director

KLOst







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Sales and Promotional Letters


Delinquent Reply
This letter is used to remind a customer who has not responded to a recent letter.
Lakeland Insurance 5
7779 23rd St. E. Camden, NJ 08610
October 2, 20XX

Barry Wu
Wus Gardens
558 Magnolia
Garden City, NJ 08638

Dear Mr. Wu:

Just a reminder: I recently sent you a computer printout of a Reminder
proposal of health insurance for your employees.

I have attached another printout for your convenience and Review
hope that you will take the time to review it. As you can see,
we offer a competitive package. Plans A and B are especially Emphasis
responsive to your needs.

I will call you next Friday after you have had time to review Assistance Offer
the proposal. I am eager to do business with you. In the
meantime, if you have any questions or concerns, I can be Contact Information
reached at 308-555-9847.

Sincerely,

Signature

Terry Laforge
Sales Manager

TML:wie
Enc.

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Business Letters for Busy People


Extremely Delinquent Reply
This letter is used when a customer has not responded after a long period of time.

5

Cattlemans
3567 Hereford Lane Tulsa, OK 73072
July 15, 20XX
J.M. Chesterman
900 Oilman Highway
Tinderbox, CO 80215
Dear Mr. Chesterman:
Yesterday I was going through our files and realized that we Statement of the
had neglected to contact you concerning our proposal to Situation
replace your cattle feeders.
I realize that four months have passed since I sent you the Reference
information, so I have attached our original proposal. I hope
you will take time to look it over. We feel our prices are very Benefits
competitive and the quality and durability of our feeders will actually save you money in the long term.
I will call you next Monday after you have had time to Contact Information
review the proposal. I am looking forward to doing business with you. If you have any questions or concerns, I can be
reached at 308-555-9847.
Sincerely,
Signature
Theodore Tex Miller
President
TJM:ssm
Enc.
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Sales and Promotional Letters


Requesting Customers Assistance
This letter is used as a foot in the door and to request that a potential customer help the salesperson.

Martin Medical
3445 Medford Ave. Charleston, SC 29624
March 17, 20XX
Terrance Reilly
Box 557
Camden Creek, SC 29625
Dear Mr. Reilly:
I would like your help in solving a problem that people in Assistance
businesses such as yours have. Request
Each year, businesses that sell medical supplies are faced Background
with hundreds of new products. We would like your Information
assistance in answering the enclosed survey. By doing so,
you will let us know how we can best serve you. Also
enclosed is a 10- Added Service


Thank You












Postscript

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Business Letters for Busy People


Sales Follow-Up
This letter is used to follow up on a sale that has been made. It may be a thank you for the business, a clarification of the sale or a pitch for future sales.

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Unlimited View
1854 Vision Lane Arlington, TX 76016

February 15, 20XX

Marlene T. Thompson
Director of Sales
Omni-Optical Co.
334 S. 114th Avenue
Dallas, TX 75218

Dear Ms. Thompson:

Congratulations on your outstanding sales during our recent winter campaign. Omni-Optical sold 23 percent of our total volume during this program. Please commend your sales staff for their impressive efforts.

Because of your success, you now qualify for our quantity discount. Thanks again for your efforts. We look forward to sharing future sales successes with Omni-Optical.

Sincerely,

Signature

J. Kelly Bandman
Sales Representative

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Request


Added Service Thank You
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Sales and Promotional Letters


Confirming Sales Order
The following two letters confirm sales taken over the
telephone. They offer another opportunity to mention the qualities of the product and make contact with the customer.

Moms Magic
1121 Elm Avenue
Joplin, MO 64804
June 18, 20XX
Ellen Rhymer
Make Believe Catalog Company
P.O. Box 5217
Amity, OR 97101
Dear Ms. Rhymer:
Thank you for your order of 200 Treasure Trunks from Thank You
Moms Magic. I believe you will be very satisfied with the Benefit
quality of costume pieces included in each. It is this quality
which makes my imaginative play apparel so unique.
As we discussed, I will be shipping 125 storybook trunks Confirmation
and 75 professional trunks to be received no later than
August 1. I will be contacting you the week of October 1 to Contact Information
determine if additional trunks are needed. If you need to
place an order before then, please call me at 913-555-6215.
Thank you again.
Sincerely,
Signature
Jennifer Lewis

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Maximum Sales, Inc.
5 555 West Access Road
Columbia, MO 65217

March 14, 20XX

Andrew Roberts, President
University Sports
468 Baltimore
Kansas City, MO 64105

Dear Mr. Roberts:

This is to confirm your phone order made March 14 for 10, Confirmation
50-count cases of mini-flying disks in fluorescent colors
(green, yellow and pink) to be delivered no later than May 1, Details
20XX. Your logo, a copy of which is enclosed, will be printed on each disk in black ink.

Thank you for placing an order with Maximum Sales. I Goodwill
understand that these flying disks will be included in the
registration packets of all participants at the Mid-America Benefit
Soccerama scheduled for Memorial Day weekend. I believe
you will be pleased with the increase in sales and name
recognition that will result due to this marketing promotion.

We look forward to being of service to you in the future. Complimentary Close

Sincerely,

Signature

Lisa Nixon
Sales Consultant
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Sales and Promotional Letters


Reminder That a Sale Is About to End
Remind a customer that a sale or sales campaign is about
to end.

Myrnas Furniture Mart
709 Downey Road Wiltonshire, NH 03068
April 25, 20XX
Grant W. Werner
Rural Habitats
R.R. 3
Wiltonshire, NH 03104
Dear Mr. Werner:
It hardly seems possible, but there is only one week left in First Reminder
our annual Eastertide Sale. Our letter announcing the sale
arrived four weeks ago. It seems like yesterday.
Its still not too late to take advantage of this gigantic sale. Review
The prices this last week are being slashed in half. Come in
and take a look at what we have to offer. Our entire sales Added Service
staff is ready to work with you and Rural Habitats.
Attached is our Eastertide Sale flyer. Please take time to look Second Reminder
it over and then come see us. You will be glad you did.
Sincerely,
Signature
Myrna L. Meyerhoff
Sales Manager
MLM:kwn
Enc.
P.S.See the special offer on Page 2 of the flyer!

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Business Letters for Busy People


Announcing a Sales Campaign,
Promotion or Incentive Program
This type of letter informs clients of upcoming sales

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promotions, incentive programs or special sales packages that are
available. It is followed by a personal call from the salesperson.
Unlimited View
1854 Vision Lane Arlington, TX 76016
September 15, 20XX
Marlene T. Thompson
Director of Sales
Omni-Optical Co.
334 S. 114th Ave.
Dallas, TX 75218
Dear Ms. Thompson:
Unlimited View will start its winter sales campaign on Announcement
November 1.
In the past, this campaign has enabled Omni-Optical to offer Explanation
its customers a wide selection of products at very
competitive prices. It is an outstanding way to attract new Benefits
customers and build traffic for your business. I have
enclosed a sheet explaining all of the particulars along with Added Service
our latest catalog.
I will call you within the next 10 days to answer any Deadline
questions you have about the program and take your order.
All orders have to be in by October 15. As always, it is a Thank You
pleasure working with Omni-Optical.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
J. Kelly Bandman
Sales Representative
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Sales and Promotional Letters


Announcing a Sales Campaign to Preferred Customers
Announce a sales campaign to preferred customers, thus
giving them a head start in purchasing, or offer them further
reduced prices. 5

Green Mountain Antiques Wholesale
Stapleton, VT 05020

January 19, 20XX
Max Castle
Heavenly Daze Antiques
Wiloughby, NH 03308
Dear Mr. Castle:

Green Mountain Antiques Wholesale will hold its Winter Announcement
Sale February 12-16.
As a preferred customer, you are invited to attend a pre-sale Elaboration
showing on February 11, with discounts up to 50 percent on
specially marked items. We feel this is just one small way Effective Date
that we can repay you for all your business over the years.
Our enclosed flyer shows you some of the outstanding Benefit
values available.

Thank you for your business. I hope we will see you on Thank You
February 11.
Sincerely,

Signature
Madeline OShea

MAO:ser
Enc.


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Business Letters for Busy People


Announcing New Products to a Select Group of Customers
Announce new products to a select group of regular

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customers. It may be seen as a sales pitch.
Ft. Dodge Appliances
563 Grand Ave. Ft. Dodge, IA 50569
October 30, 20XX
Caroline M. Ness
R.R. 3
Gowrie, IA 50337
Dear Ms. Ness:
Ft. Dodge Appliances is pleased to announce our new line of Wonder Work Appliances. We are now the authorized Wonder Work dealer for Ft. Dodge.
Wonder Work Appliances, established for three decades in
the East, is now expanding to the Midwest, and we are
excited to be part of its expanding network. It specializes in
small appliances that are known throughout the industry for
their quality and durability. So that you may have a chance
to see the appliances at work, we have arranged to
demonstrate them this Saturday, November 3, at our store
from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m. Special discounts are available if you
bring this letter.
Thank you for your continued business. We look forward to seeing you this Saturday.
Sincerely,
Signature
Barney Carlson
BAC:eeo













Announcement

Elaboration
Added Service
Benefits




Thank You


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Sales and Promotional Letters


Announcing a Price Increase
Announce a price increase and soften the blow to the customer.
Grand Greetings, Inc.
330 Big Bend St. Charleston, SC 29410 5

February 22, 20XX

Harry C. Marker
Card Distributors, Ltd.
11 Fillmore
Atlanta, GA 30325

Dear Mr. Marker:

Your satisfaction is important to us. In order to continue to Goal of Customer
produce a high-quality product, we have recently installed Satisfaction
new high-speed, high-definition printing presses. This, along
with the increased price of paper, has forced us to increase Announcement
our prices by 10 percent effective March 15. I have enclosed
a brochure with the new prices in it for your benefit. Orders Incentive
received before March 15 will be filled at current prices.

Thank you for your understanding in this matter. We feel that Thank You
these increases will still allow you to sell these superb cards
at competitive prices. We hope you will let us know Goodwill
immediately if there is any way we can serve you better.

Sincerely,

Signature

K. Charles Grand
President

KCG:lpw
Enc.


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Business Letters for Busy People


Transmittal With Instructions
Complicated instructions can be handled in a cover letter such
as this one. Part of each sale is to get the reader/buyer to perform
an action that brings him closer to the close of the sale or resale.

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Zarcon Laser Systems
80000 Orange Blossom Dr.
Boston, MA 02174
March 15, 20XX
Tony Blumenthal, Realtor
The Winstead Building, Suite 400
P.O. Box 46758
Boston, MA 02180
Dear Tony:
Two copies of the revised six-month leasing agreement for Purpose
the Zarcon Laser Copier II are enclosed. Im pleased you are Enclosures
happy with its performance.
The yellow highlights on one copy reflect the changes that Instruction
we addressed in our March 14 conversation. Please indicate
any additions or omissions in the margins and initial and date
each correction. I will review the copy and get back to you
by April 5.
If the current changes meet with your approval, please sign Alternate Instruction
at the X on page 3 of the unmarked copy and return it in
the SASE by March 29.
If I may clarify or help in any other way, Tony, please call Contact Information
me at 555-3993.
Sincerely,
Signature
Lee Webster
Senior Account Executive
Enc.


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Sales and Promotional Letters


Transmittal With Request
When you must send material and make a request for other
material, use a cover letter such as this. Each exchange of
information is part of the sales strategy. Keep all technical
discussions brief in the letter, with further explanation in the 5
enclosures.
Rocky Flats Physics Facility
2367 Central Avenue
Albuquerque, NM 87106

February 16, 20XX

Joseph P. Harlow, Ph.D.
Defense Engineering
784 Trinity Dr.
Los Alamos, NM 87544

Dear Dr. Harlow:

Your inquiry regarding our services is welcome. I am Response to Inquiry
enclosing a brochure that will summarize our optics program
for infrared conductors and the surface lab work we do.

If you will send us similar literature from your agency, I can Request
be more specific about what we can do for you. Benefit

I will call you later this week to answer any questions. Contact Information
Thank you for your interest.

Sincerely,

Signature
Zack A. Bromley, Ph.D.
Enc.


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Business Letters for Busy People


Transmittal With Suggestion
This letter covers technical information briefly and refers to
additional service possibilities. Again, allow the enclosures to
handle the details of technical material. Use the cover letter to
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William Hennings Accountants
Drawer NN
Burlington, NC 27216

December 10, 20XX

Linda Maple
77 Cherry Brook Terr.
Burlington, NC 27218
Dear Linda:

Your projection for the possible Grantor-Retained Income Response to Request
Trust (GRIT) is included with this letter.

You may also want to investigate Grantor-Retained Annuity Added Service
Trusts (GRATs) and Grantor-Retained Unitrusts (GRUTs). I have taken the liberty of including a pamphlet describing these options in more detail.

Please let me know if I may clarify anything for you. We Assistance Offer
could meet anytime next Thursday at your convenience to
discuss which trusts best suit your assets and family
situation.

Sincerely,

Signature
Davis C. Cernicek
Enc.

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Sales and Promotional Letters


Transmittal With Information
A thank-you/sales letter to a client that includes requested information provides ongoing client contact.

Roger Publications Inc.
8560 College Blvd.
Overland Park, KS 66210
September 21, 20XX
Janet Kirby
Alvarez Advertising
10253 W. Higgins Road, Suite 600
Rosemont, IL 60018
Dear Janet:
You made a wise decision by including Working Womens Goodwill
Guide in your marketing plans for Mor-PEP! Thank you for
your order.
Working Womens Guide provides the most effective way to Benefit
reach this big-volume market. Readership is unexcelled, as
shown by the recent Starch WOMENS Study.
Regarding your question on a preprinted insert card: The Information
investment involved is $3,000. If you would like for us to
print a card, the card would be a net cost of $1,575. There
would be no real cost advantage to using a card attached to
our reader service coupon. The cost for the coupon space is Benefit
$5,000 and includes the printing. Having your message on
the card next to the reader service coupon could be a big
advantage, however, for readership.
Ill call your office next week to answer any questions on Contact Information
this and thanks again for your order.
Rebecca Ruddy
Account Supervisor

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Business Letters for Busy People


Transmittals With Sales Information
This is a sales letter to a client enclosing promised information.
FITZ ADVERTISING, INC.
5 7592 Front Street
Phoenix, AZ 99065

August 10, 20XX

Robert J. Lee
Powell Glove Company
P.O. Box 5846
Phoenix, AZ 99065

Dear Rob:

How many distributors of work gloves are there? The charts Reason
I promised are enclosed.

Along with the charts, I have included information on the Added Service
availability of the top-distributor summaries and the work glove management study. These are hot off the press as of yesterday and deserve a close look.

Please select the information you want. I can either send it or Contact Information
go over it with you.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Best regards,
Signature
Richard A. Parker
RP/lm
Enc.

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Sales and Promotional Letters



This sales letter also serves as a cover letter for enclosed brochures.

United Commercial Bank
P.O. Box 5700
Ukiah, CA 95482 5
September 14, 20XX
Steven R. Bishop, President
SRB Consulting
P.O. Box 135
Ukiah, CA 95482
Dear Mr. Bishop:
Thank you for your interest in our banks Small Business Goodwill
Banking Service (SBBS). I certainly enjoyed the opportunity to visit with you Tuesday afternoon.
As I mentioned, SBBS is designed to meet the special Purpose
banking needs of the small-business owner. We have
packaged a number of popular services under the SBBS Benefit
umbrella including free regular checking account,
complimentary personalized checks and a standard safe deposit box.
Enclosed is an SBBS brochure listing our services; I have Enclosures
highlighted in yellow those you inquired about. And with
this brochure, I have also included several others on the bank and its offerings.
I will call your office next week to answer any questions you Contact Information
may have and to discuss how United Commercial Bank can
best serve you and your consulting company.
Sincerely,
Signature
Michael Warren
MW:kr
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Business Letters for Busy People


Transmittal to Current Client
A cover/sales letter to an existing client, this letter instills a sense of client support from the writer.

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Roger Publications Inc.
8560 College Blvd.
Overland Park, KS 66210
September 21, 20XX
Joan Morris
NWTC Advertising
P.O. Box 27308
Madison, WI 53707
Dear Joan:
As you mentioned Tuesday, identifying the exact number of
working women single, married, with children and those
without children in todays market is not an easy task.
Thats why Roger Publications is constantly working to keep you informed about projected industry trends and changes when U.S. Census data becomes outdated.

Finding a unique approach that will influence these key customers is a challenge, also. The Working Womens Guide figures (attached) are designed to give you insight and information to make your job easier.

I hope this information continues to help you make key marketing decisions for both AMC and Verasweet.
Best regards,
Signature
Rebecca Ruddy
Account Supervisor

P.S. Thank you for AMC and Verasweets continued support for Roger Publications.














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Purpose
Support

Emphasis on Benefit








Thank You
Goodwill


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Checklist
Did you use a positive tone?
Does the letter sell itself?
Did you introduce the topic of the letter in the first part?
Did you mention the recipients accomplishment or
benefit early?
Did you include all of the necessary details for the client
such as date, time and place of appointment?
Did you include a telephone number so the client can
reach you?
Did you take the initiative in the letter for the action
you desire?
Did you include all background information, added
service or details necessary in the second part of the letter
so the client understands the letter?
Did you summarize, thank or recongratulate in the last
part of the letter?
If you received the letter, would you do what you are
asking the recipient to do?


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HAPTER 6


Goodwill Letters
6






This chapter has sample letters to help you write goodwill letters. The broad categories are Professional Recognition and Company Position. These letters identify special events,
achievements and issues.
Professional Recognition includes:
Recognizing a Suggestion
Appreciation
Official Anniversary
Speech
Invitations
Congratulations
Thanks for Good Work: Outside Vendor
Acknowledging an Accomplishment
Follow-Up After a Sale
Company Position includes:
Explaining Policy and Position
Encouragement
Announcing New Fringe Benefits
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Other goodwill letters follow in Chapters 7 and 8.
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of
each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section of the
letter. Subsequent letters will identify only changes to the basic
format.
6 Step-by-Step Guide
These letters are designed to promote goodwill among clients and employees.
Step 1: The first part of the letter states your purpose.
Depending on the reason for writing the letter, this may vary from complimenting an employee on an accomplishment to apologizing for being unable to attend a social event.
Step 2: The second part of the letter gives the details or
background information for the first part. This may be
anything from explaining to a client the action
required to correct a problem to giving details about a
social event.
Step 3: The last part of the letter acts as a summary,
reminding the recipient of the general nature of the letter. It may be a thank you, or it may restate what has been said in the first part of the letter. For
example, if the letter is congratulatory, the last part recongratulates the recipient.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
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Goodwill Letters


Recognizing a Suggestion
This letter recognizes an employee or business associate for
suggestions she has made. Recognition fulfills one of your
employees or associates greatest personal needs. Use these
letters often.
Zimmermans Resort Letterhead 6
Highway 131 Moose Lake, MN 55438

June 30, 20XX Date

Maxine Moehlmann Inside Address
Box 25
Moose Lake, MN 55438

Dear Maxine: Salutation

Thank you for your great suggestion on how to organize the First Thanks
annual fish fry at Zimmermans. Your idea means we can
serve 100 more people than we did last year. Without a
doubt, it is the single best idea that Ive seen in a long time.

As you know, Zimmermans motto is Fun for All, and as a General Statement
reward for your suggestion, we are giving you a daylong About Company
pass to Valley Faire in Shakopee, Minnesota, for you and (optional)
your family. We hope you all can live up to Zimmermans Benefit
motto.

Thank you once again for your great idea. With employees Second Thanks
like you, Zimmermans will only get better. (optional)

Sincerely, Complimentary Close

Signature Signature

Sally Zimmerman Typed Name
President
Additional Information
SJZ:dft

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Business Letters for Busy People


Appreciation
This letter expresses appreciation for something that was
done. Quite often these letters are to employees of a company.
Thank-you notes are meaningful rewards. The written word has
power.

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Seven Sisters
709 Starry Way Council Bluffs, IA 50574
April 13, 20XX
R.K. Kirkman
4590 N. Iowa Avenue
Omaha, NE 68164
Dear Mr. Kirkman:
On behalf of the staff at Seven Sisters, I want to express my Reason for
appreciation for your help in our recent ad campaign. Your Appreciation
tireless efforts made the campaign one of the most successful we have ever had.
Seven Sisters success relies heavily on the commitment of General Statement
its employees. Devotion such as yours allows us to be About the Company
leaders in the field of fashion merchandising in the
Omaha/Council Bluffs area. Your efforts contribute to higher Specific Recognition
sales, and that, as you know, means increased profit-sharing for our employees.
Thank you for all of your hard work. Seven Sisters is Thank You
successful because of employees like you.
Sincerely,
Signature
Laney Moore
President
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Goodwill Letters


Official Anniversary
This letter recognizes an official anniversary, such as the
ordination of a priest or minister, an elected official taking office or an employees work anniversary. It elevates morale.
Wood Hollow Cranberries
850 Random Rd. New London, CT 06320 6
April 8, 20XX

Edward Brown
8879 Kirksville Ct.
New London, CT 06320

Dear Ed:

All of us at Wood Hollow Cranberries wish to extend our Congratulations
sincerest congratulations on your 10th anniversary here at
Wood Hollow. Your work, first as assistant plant manager Specific Positions
and now as plant manager, has been exemplary. We are most
pleased to have you on our management team and look Goodwill
forward to many more years of working with you.

Sincerely yours,

Signature

Grace Kleissman
President

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Business Letters for Busy People


Speech
This letter acknowledges a speech the recipient gave and comments on it.
Calvin Coolidge High School
3222 25th St., N.E. Minot, ND 58504
6 May 23, 20XX

Barbara Rundle, Principal
Lake of the Woods High School
Box 66
Lake of the Woods, MN 20902
Dear Ms. Rundle:
I recently attended the North Central States Principals Acknowledgment
Convention in Fargo and heard your speech on problems in of Speech
the rural high school. I was most impressed and came away
with many new ideas and insights.
I was particularly interested in your discussion of college Comments About
preparation in the rural school. Although Calvin Coolidge the Speech
High School does not qualify as a rural school, it has many
of the same problems. An author Ive found most Additional Service
enlightening who deals with rural schools is Garret Randolf.
His works, Rural America: Whos Educating You? and One
Room Schools Grown Up, are both excellent. Are you aware
of these titles? They werent on your bibliography.
I shall look forward to your speech in Pierre, as I see you are Expectation
on the program.
Sincerely,
Signature
C. Max Hanks
Principal
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Goodwill Letters


Invitation Formal
This letters formal language reflects the formality of the event. It requires a formal reply.

Erskins and Co.
985 Washington Boise, ID 83805
555-8800 6
October 1, 20XX
Carmen and Ted Schmitt
800 Lander Lane
Meridian, ID 83642
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Schmitt:

You are cordially invited to a formal dinner in honor of Time, Date and Place
Samuel Whitters on October 21, 20XX, at 8 p.m. at the of Event
Boise Hilton.
Mrs. Schmitt, as you are an associate of Mr. Whitters, we Request
would like you to speak briefly about his work in the lumber
industry. If this is possible, please let me know within the Deadline
next week.
Please note that this is a black-tie event. RSVP with the Requirements
names of those attending by October 14.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
John Randall III
Chairman, Social Committee
JKR:sat





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Invitation Informal
This letter is more informal and conversational in style. It may
require a reply, but the reply may be oral or informally written.
TeleWorld
1810 Ohio Ave. Little Rock, AR 72293
6
June 13, 20XX

Ramona Jenkins
55 Tremont
Little Rock, AR 72291

Dear Ramona:

The marketing department is having a surprise get-together Time, Date and Place
next Thursday afternoon after work for the retirement of of Event
J.J. Small.

Please bring a gag gift to send J.J. on her way to a happy Requests
retirement. Were asking each person to contribute $5 for a
legitimate retirement gift. Wanda Templeman is collecting.

Let Wanda (ext. 233) know by Monday if you can make it, Requirements
so she can order enough ments. Deadline

Sincerely,

Signature

Chuck Meyers
Chairman, Social Committee

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Congratulations
This is a goodwill letter on the part of the company or the salesperson to a client. It congratulates an internal client on an accomplishment.
Capital Life Insurance Co.

369 Wilmington Blvd. Camden, NJ 07102
May 7, 20XX
Seth Tinkerton Jr.
District Manager
839 Littleton Ct.
Morningside, NJ 07112
Dear Mr. Tinkerton:
Congratulations on being the top district manager for Acknowledgment of
March and April. You can be proud of your hard work, and Accomplishment
were glad you work with us.
Capital Life honors its high achievers with our Call to General Statement
Excellence Award. Your achievement in sales will be About Achievement
recognized at the June Convention in Philadelphia. We
would like you and your agents to be our guests at a special Specific Details
banquet on June 5, 20XX, at 7:30 p.m. in the Cameo Room
of the Hotel International, during which you will receive
the award.
Once again, congratulations! It is because of managers like Restatement
you that Capital Life has achieved the success it enjoys.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
John R. Liu
Vice President
JRL:cco

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This congratulates a good worker and encourages success for the next task.
FRANKLIN & FRANKLIN ADVERTISING
14 South Fremont St. Senders Address
Suite 1310
Grand Terrace, CA 92313
6
October 11, 20XX

Karen Winters
11850 Mount Vernon Ave.
Grand Terrace, CA 92313

Dear Karen:

Congratulations on being awarded the Blanding Foods Specifics
account. You did an excellent job convincing their
management that Franklin & Franklin should be the agency to represent their new frozen-food line.

The creativity and determination you demonstrated in Future Benefit
presenting our company to Blanding Foods will be equally
helpful in designing an advertising campaign suited to their
needs. Their goal of becoming a leading supplier of frozen
desserts to school cafeterias will require an imaginative sales
approach.

I look forward to seeing your continued success in dealing Encouragement
with this important new account.

Sincerely,

Signature
Alan G. Franklin
President



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Goodwill Letters


This letter congratulates a friend or business associate on a recent promotion.


West and Associates
11 East 8th St.
Boston, MA 02116 6
March 13, 20XX

Richard A. Peters
9032 Thompson
Boston, MA 02116

Dear Richard:

Congratulations on your promotion to general manager at Purpose
Ryan Corporation. You have excellent business skills and the drive to go far keep up the good work!

Im pleased the management at Ryan recognizes your Personal Comment
abilities.

Best wishes for many future successes. Goodwill

Sincerely,

Signature

Pat Monroe










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Thanks for Good Work: Outside Vendor
This letter expresses appreciation for good work. It serves as a cover letter for workshop material.


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Addison Manufacturing
P.O. Box 5310
Boulder, CO 80322

June 1, 20XX

Sharon Young
Right On! Writing
P.O. Box 6864
Boulder, CO 80322

Dear Sharon:

Enclosed is a summary of the evaluations from the
accelerated reading course. We are very pleased with the results and feel you met our expectations with a difficult topic quite well.

It has been a pleasure working with you. Sorry that I missed the last meeting of the group.

Thank you for tailoring the course and using our own materials so that company objectives were met.

Sincerely,

Signature

Elizabeth Davis
Supervisor, Purchasing Services

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Reason
Appreciation



Goodwill


Thank You
Specific Details



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Acknowledging Accomplishments
In this letter, an employer recognizes a good idea of an
employee and mentions the positive comments of others as well.
Bakers Department Store
432 Washington Ave.
Independence, MO 64052 6
December 12, 20XX

Sharon Rash
2508 East Elm
Independence, MO 64053

Dear Sharon:

You are doing a super job and it shows! Because of your Appreciation
efforts in coordinating the seasonal decorations around one theme, each department looks better and that has the entire store looking better. And, of course, this makes it a more pleasant place to work for all of us.

Your efforts have been noticed not only by staff but also by Specifics
our customers. Several have mentioned the new look. The
extra time you spent on this project is greatly appreciated;
the enclosed is our Thank you for a good idea and a job Enclosure
well done.

Sincerely,

Signature

Steven Baker
President

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This letter thanks a staff member for a job done well.


Schwartz Manufacturing Company
P.O. Box 3732
Secaucus, NJ 07096
6
April 7, 20XX

Jennifer Matthews
819 Brookline Ave.
Secaucus, NJ 07096

Dear Jennifer:

Thank you for the excellent job you did in preparing and Thank You
presenting the quarterly report! It was evident to me and to
the group that you had put a lot of time and thought into its
preparation. The handouts especially contained very useful Specific Details
information, and you covered in your presentation all the points you and I had discussed beforehand.

Your contribution to the success of Schwartz Manufacturing Goodwill
is greatly appreciated!

Sincerely,

Signature

Robert Gramlich
President

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This thank-you letter to an employee is specific. The letter
gives details as to why the bonus and the recognition were earned.


A Better Bookstore
499 West Eighth Street
Aurora, CO 80010 6
November 12, 20XX

Sheila Martin
1422 Cramer Ave.
Denver, CO 80121

Dear Sheila:

Thank you for the extra amount of time and effort you spent Specific Situation
to ensure that A Better Bookstore was successfully
represented at this years Mountain State Professional
Reading Teachers Conference. A check is enclosed as Reward
recognition of your superior work.

The sales of reading materials for elementary-age students Specific Details
was 20 percent higher than we anticipated. More
importantly, I am confident that A Better Bookstore has
gained new customers, due to your knowledge of the
materials for sale and your emphasis on individualized
attention to each conference participant you assisted.

Congratulations on a job well done. Goodwill

Sincerely,

Signature

Harry Tellman
Manager



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This letter acknowledges an accomplishment of a client,
employee, relative of a client or employee, or friend of the
company.


Pampered Prints
6 282 Kefauver Dr. Mt. Vernon, KY 42040
March 30, 20XX

Maria Fernandez
3333 Trenton Way
Mt. Vernon, KY 42049

Dear Maria:

Your design for our Kute Kids line is outstanding! Pampered Acknowledgment of
Prints is proud that you are one of our employees. Accomplishment

Because of your design, Kute Kids is breaking all records in General Statement
sales. During the first quarter, Kute Kids outsold all other About Achievement
lines in the Size 6-12 category.

Keep up the good work. We need people like you, Maria, at Encouragement
Pampered Prints.

Sincerely yours,

Signature

Lily Marret
Director of Sales

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Follow-up After a Sale
This letter is a follow-up to an event. It maintains positive contact and encourages repeat business from the client.

WAVERLEY HOTEL
360 South Dearborn Chicago, IL 60604
6
October 31, 20XX

Cynthia Brown
The First Management Group
110 First Ave.
Clayton, MO 63105

Dear Cynthia:

It was such a pleasure to have a group like yours as our Compliment
guest! Not only did we enjoy having The First Management
Group in our hotel, but also getting to work with you was an Goodwill
added benefit! You are so professional and organized that you make us look good.

Cynthia, if theres anything I can ever do to help you, give Personal Note
me a call. Please stay in touch; the next time youre in
Chicago, well take some time and see the city!

Sincerely,

Signature

Carol Brawn
Director, Convention Services








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Explaining Policy and Position
This memo clarifies a companys policy and position for its employees. Normally a memo would suffice, but a formal letter may also be appropriate in certain circumstances.


6


MEMORANDUM

Date: December 23, 20XX
To: All Employees
From: Manuel Gonzales
Re: Policy Concerning Sick Leave

There seems to be some misunderstanding concerning Swithams sick-leave policy.

Each employee is allowed 10 sick days per year during the first five years of employment. For five to 10 years of
employment, each employee is allowed 15 days of sick
leave. Any employee of 10 or more years is granted 20 days of sick leave. Sick leave may be accumulated up to one full year (365 days). After an absence of two days, an employee must seek medical advice and present a doctors excuse upon return to work. Failure to do so may result in docking of pay for any sick leave after two consecutive days. For further
information, refer to the employee manual, page 23, or
contact our benefits officer, Barbara Wieland.

I hope this clears up any misunderstanding, particularly concerning the doctors excuse.









Statement of the
Situation

Clarification






Consequence




Specific Issue Goodwill












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Encouragement
This letter offers encouragement to the employees of a firm.
RM Trucking
8092 Las Noches Santa Fe, NM 87538
505-555-0050
December 12, 20XX 6
Cappy Kappmeier
Wind Willow 13
Santa Fe, NM 87538
Dear Cappy:
Every year I take time to look ahead to what the next year Purpose
has in store for our employees. Next years outlook is
exciting.
In the past year, RM Trucking has experienced phenomenal Explanation of
growth, moving from the tenth-largest trucking firm in New the Purpose
Mexico to the second-largest. We project that in the coming
year we will become number one in New Mexico and
number two in the combined states of New Mexico and
Arizona. It is because of our farsighted staff that we have
been able to achieve this kind of success. Naturally, this Benefits
success affects everyone who works for RM Trucking.
Because of our unique profit-sharing plan, each employee
benefits.
Next year will be exciting at RM for all of us involved. I Restatement
hope you will make the most of these opportunities. Encouragement
Sincerely,
Signature

Ronald Martin
President
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Announcing New Fringe Benefits
This letter announces new fringe benefits to employees of a company.
Warwick Manufacturing
1500 Burnside Parkway Warwick, RI 02891
6
August 24, 20XX
Glenn Golden
90 Wuthering Heights Dr.
Kingston, RI 02881

Dear Mr. Golden:

It is my pleasure to announce that Warwick Manufacturing is Announcement
offering a new employee benefit plan starting January 1.

After much discussion with management and labor, we have Explanation
settled on a plan that allows you to choose those benefits you
want and need. The enclosed brochure outlines the complete Enclosure
program. We are excited about it because you will have total control over your benefits.

Please call Sally Martin in the Human Resources Contact Information
Department if you have any questions or concerns.

We hope that you will be pleased with this new benefit Closing Statement
package.

Sincerely,

Signature

Susanna M. Graham
President

SMG:eer

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Goodwill Letters


Adjustment
This letter requests an adjustment, either business or social, and asks for the understanding of the person for whom the
adjustment is being asked.

Australian Outfitters
P.O. Box 212 Los Angeles, CA 99045-0212 6
October 3, 20XX

Corinne Reynolds
3510 Aroya Canyon Road
Hollywood Hills, CA 95234

Dear Ms. Reynolds:

I regret to inform you that your order of boomerangs will be Apology
delayed by four weeks because of a recent fire at Outback Reason
Boomerangs in Sydney, Australia.
I hope this delay is acceptable. As soon as we found out Explanation
about the fire, we contacted Woolabang Boomerangs in
Alice Springs and were able to fill your order. Unfortunately,
its boomerangs take longer to make because they are
handmade. This is to your advantage: Though they are more Benefit
expensive, we will absorb the difference in cost.
Thank you for your understanding and cooperation in this Thanks
unfortunate matter. If you have any questions, please call me at 800-OUTBACK.

Sincerely yours,

Signature
Tanner Dundee
TJD:mal

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Checklist
Did you use a pleasant tone in the letter?
Did you state the purpose of the letter in the first part?
Did you give background and details in the second part to
further explain the first part?
Did you summarize the letter in the last part?
Is the letter sincere?
Did you personalize the letter so that it doesnt sound
institutional?
Does the letter express goodwill?
If you received the letter, would you feel good about it?
















HAPTER 7


Community Activities Letters


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This chapter has sample letters dealing with community activities. The broad categories are as follows:
Solicitation of Funds
Acknowledgment and Request for Funds
Appreciation and Fund-Raising Event
Acknowledgment of Contribution
Acknowledgment of Accomplishment
Thank You
Grant Request
Invitation to Serve
Membership Invitation
Refusal of a Request
Expression of Appreciation
Appointment to Office
Appointment to a Committee
Compliment
Invitation to Speak
Complimenting a Speaker
Letter to Legislator Showing Support
Letter to Legislator Showing Concern
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At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of
each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section of the
letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the basic format.
Step-by-Step Guide
These letters address community activities that involve both individuals and corporations.
Step 1: The first part of the letter states your purpose. It may
7 vary from asking a company to take part in a charity
fund-raising drive to expressing appreciation for an employees involvement in the community.
Step 2: The second part of the letter gives the details or
background information for the first part. This may
include giving a reason for declining a public office to
indicating your companys policy about an employees
achievement.
Step 3: The last part of the letter acts as a summary,
reminding the recipient of the general nature of the
letter. It may include deadlines, a thank you, or a
re-request.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write a community activities letter.


















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Community Activities Letters


Solicitation of Funds
This letter requests that a company contribute to a charity.
JJT: Heavy Equipment

1288 E. U.S. 63 Sioux City, IA 50585
April 9, 20XX
William J. Buchheit
President
Sanders and Thoms
348 Lincolnway Dr.
South Sioux City, IA 50585
Dear Mr. Buchheit:
The United Benefit for Community Improvement is starting its annual drive this Monday. We hope you will contribute to this worthy cause.
In the past, Sanders and Thoms has been one of the leaders in the UBCI drive, with its employees giving an average of 2.5 percent of their income to the fund. Naturally, they recognize that the fund improves their lives as well as the lives of others in the area. May we count on your corporate support again? This year we are asking each corporation to match its employees contributions.

Your contributions provide recreation scholarships to summer and after-school programs for youth, home maintenance assistance for the elderly, AIDS education, a community pantry and kitchen, and other programs for community improvement.

Please continue your leadership in community development
through your support of UBCI. We are asking that all
contributions, employee and corporate, be in the UBCI office, 3001 Carrington Way, Sioux City, Iowa 56884, by May 15. Thank you for your continued support.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Lannie Miller
Campaign Chairperson
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Letterhead

Date
Inside Address



Salutation

Request


Support or Background
Information

Recognition

Benefit




Re-request,
Deadline and Thanks

Complimentary Close
Signature
Typed Name

Additional Information




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An initial information letter is necessary to introduce the nonprofit organization to the reader. The information should appeal to both the emotion and intellect for the greatest impact.


Haven Home
P.O. Box 124 Memphis, TN 38124
March 12, 20XX
Dear Friend,
7 Jenny Louise is 12 years old. Her parents argued last month. The Story
shotgun blast ignited the heater, and her father died in the explosion. Her
mother is still hospitalized with severe burns. Jenny Louise was lucky
at least physically. She was placed at Haven Home because no foster
parents are available to care for her now. Our community resources are
stretched to capacity.
Thousands of children face the consequences of domestic violence each Statistics
day. Families suffer, children cry and people die. Unresolved,
unrestrained anger is at epidemic proportions in most urban communities today. Memphis is included. Within the past 12 months, Haven Home has received 3,122 crisis calls, tered 738 individuals and educated 20,493 concerned people.
Individuals like Jenny Louise who seek our help need your help. Please Appeal for Volunteers and
consider a donation of time or money or both. No matter how much Funds
of either you have, you have more of each than those at Haven Home.
Time: Apply to be a foster parent through the state human resources agencies. Call us for information or an appointment to contribute your time as a volunteer at Haven Home.
Money: $20 pays one persons meals for a day; $50 pays a weeks
utilities; $100 trains an adult in anger control or prepares a person for the
G.E.D.
Send as much as you can now. Together we can make a difference!
Sincerely,
Signature
Anna Phelps
Executive Director
AP:sfg
P.S. Make your tax-deductible check payable to Haven Home. Postscript
Thank you!


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Acknowledgment and Request for Funds
Follow-up letters provide a nonprofit organization the opportunity to thank a contributor and to suggest future contributions.

Haven Home

P.O. Box 124 Memphis, TN 38124
March 25, 20XX
Dan Pearson
278 Briarwell St.
Memphis, TN 38121
Dear Dan:
Thank you for your generous donation. Your contribution of Thank You
$50 will enable us to continue helping our community fight
against domestic violence. Acknowledgment
Would you consider giving Haven Home a monthly donation Continuing Need
of $50? Our needs continue throughout the year, and we and Appeal
count on the generosity of people such as you, Dan. Other
ways you might consider to help us secure our programs for
the future include memorials, trusts, scholarships and
bequests. With your financial support and our dedicated
volunteers, Haven Home can continue to serve victims of
domestic violence with high-quality intervention programs.
Again, thank you for your support. Second Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
Anna Phelps
Executive Director
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Appreciation and Fund-Raising Event
Contributors want to know how their dollars are used.
Updating a previous story is one way to show value. Another way is through an appreciation event that may or may not be connected to additional fund raising.
Haven Home
P.O. Box 124 Memphis, TN 38124
May 5, 20XX
7 Dan Pearson
278 Briarwell St.
Memphis, TN 38121
Dear Dan:
Thank you! Your pledge for $25 each month for a year is greatly Thanks
appreciated. Appreciation
You asked about an update regarding Jenny Louise: She and her Specific
mother are now living with her maternal grandmother, and the Response
investigation around the explosion continues. Thank you for your
concern.
Many people have expressed their concern and commitment to stop Suggestions
domestic violence through their pledges and gifts. Some have
volunteered as a result. The board, staff, volunteers and residents at Appreciation
Haven Home want to thank you in person. Please join us for an appreciation dinner supported by:
Georgios Fine Italian Restaurant Event Details
at 39th Street and Knoll
on Thursday, May 23, 20XX, at 7:30 p.m.
A silent auction will follow dinner. Retail stores at the Galla Center Fund-Raising
are donating items for our event. We would be delighted to have you Event
attend.
As always, thank you for your help. Thanks
Sincerely,
Signature
Anna Phelps
Executive Director
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RSVP by May 20 at 555-3883. See you there!

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Acknowledgment of Contribution
This letter acknowledges that a company has contributed to a charity.
JJT: Heavy Equipment
1288 E. U.S. 63 Sioux City, IA 50585
April 25, 20XX
William J. Buchheit
President 7
Sanders and Thoms
348 Lincolnway Drive
South Sioux City, IA 50585
Dear Mr. Buchheit:
The United Benefit for Community Improvement would like First Acknowledgment
to thank you and your employees for your generous of the Contribution
contribution to this years fund drive. Your contribution of
$99,751 is the largest corporate/employee contribution so
far.
General Statement
Donna Truemper, your UBCI chairperson, will let the About the
employees of Sanders and Thoms know of their Contribution
accomplishment. This year they gave an average of 2.75
percent of their income to the fund. Their contribution and Specific Details
yours will definitely help us meet our goal of $2 million.
All of you at Sanders and Thoms are to be commended for Second
your generosity. Thank you again for your contribution. Acknowledgment
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Lannie Miller
Campaign Chairperson
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Acknowledgment of Accomplishment
This letter expresses goodwill and acknowledges an
accomplishment by someone who has a relationship to the
company (employee, relative of an employee, friend of the
company).
KJZ, Inc.
45 Western Hills Rd. St. Paul, MN 55445
7 July 28, 20XX

Jake Tillis
R.R. 1
Lake Woebegone, MN 56151

Dear Mr. Tillis:

KJZ is proud to have the new Twin Cities Corporate 10K Accomplishment
Marathon winner on its staff. Your performance in First Acknowledgment
Saturdays run was impressive.

It was most thrilling to see you cross the finish line wearing General Statement
your KJZ T-shirt and then watch the performance again on About the
the evening news. Your hard work and training have paid Accomplishment
off. The corporate trophy was the result of your
accomplishment.

The trophy will be prominently displayed in the front lobby Second
at KJZ. Thank you for representing us so ably. Acknowledgment
Thank You
Sincerely,

Signature

Kevin J. Zimmerman
President

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Thank You
Similar to the letter expressing appreciation, this letter thanks
an employee or business associate for something he has done.

Kings Court Auto
1500 Wright Way Kitty Hawk, NC 27831

November 17, 20XX
7
Lee Kim Park
23 Timberline Dr.
Tarryton, NC 27789

Dear Mr. Park:

On behalf of the management at Kings Court Auto, I would First Thank You
like to thank you for your recent participation in the United Way Campaign as Region 7s Unit Leader.

Your leadership in the United Way not only helps the General Comments
community but also reflects well on Kings Court Auto.
Civic participation is important, and we are proud of our Encouragement
employees when they take part in the community.

Thank you once again for all your hard work. Hats off Second Thank You
to you!

Sincerely yours,

Signature

Donald King
Chairman of the Board

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Grant Request
Although most grant requests require a specific application
form, you still need to send a cover letter with the form. This letter is a sample cover letter.
Salina Community College
45 Cottonwood Dr. Salina, KS 67401
October 14, 20XX
7 Carl L. Meyerhoff
Director of Grants
Salina Area Grant Office
350 First Street
Salina, KS 67401
Dear Mr. Meyerhoff:
We would like to request a $15,000 grant for Salina Request for Grant
Community College to improve access for the handicapped. I have enclosed our grant application.
The majority of the buildings on the Salina Community Requirements
College campus were built prior to 1953. Those built after
1945 are accessible to the handicapped. Unfortunately,
Atkinson Auditorium, where we hold graduation, monthly Background
convocations and other major events, was built in 1932 and is Information and
not accessible to the handicapped. The $15,000 grant would Summary of Need
allow us to install ramps at each entrance and remove a row of seats for wheelchairs, making the entire campus accessible to the handicapped.
Thank you for your prompt action on this grant. We shall Thank You
look forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Mary Ellen Feldman
Director of Physical Facilities
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Invitation to Serve
This letter invites someone with the company to serve on a
committee or in a position governmental or charitable.
Greater Pittsburgh Family Fund
760 Allegheny Dr. Mt. Lebanon, PA 16301
July 1, 20XX
Larry M. Grimschaw
993 White Water Way
Mt. Lebanon, PA 16301 7
Dear Mr. Grimschaw:
We of the Greater Pittsburgh Family Fund would like to invite Invitation
you to chair the Health Committee for 20XX.
The Health Committee disburses funds to help families that Explanation
have exhausted all other medical resources. We are asking you to chair this committee of eight people for one year.
Your leadership and organizational skills are essential for our Persuasion
continuing success. As a committee member last year, your
dedication to health was apparent. Here is your chance to make a difference in the lives of families in desperate need. We need your combination of compassion and competence in directing the Health Committee.
Presently, the committee meets weekly to review requests and Requirements and
act on them. Additionally, you would need to prepare a monthly Duties
disbursement report to be presented to the Greater Pittsburgh
Family Funds monthly Steering Committee. You would report
directly to me.
Thank you for considering this offer. Please let me know by Thank You
July 15, 20XX, if you are able to take this position. I look Set Deadline
forward to working with you.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Coretta Marshall
General Chairperson
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Membership Invitation
Membership drives are common in volunteer organizations.
Here is how you can hook your reader and catch a member.
Community Valors
642 Rocky Mountain Road Denver, CO 80023
September 14, 20XX
Mary E. Marius

7

866 Aspen Place
Denver, CO 80025
Dear Ms. Marius:
As a new resident of Denver, wouldnt you like to get to know the city and its people better? Then consider the service and networking opportunities Community Valors could provide you.
We meet monthly to plan service projects that improve life in Denver.
You have already seen our trademark red vests on the job at the blood
bank where you so generously gave of yourself last Friday. We are
always looking for enthusiastic and empathetic people to participate in our organization. We think you meet the qualifications!
Some of our projects this past year have included establishing a food
and toiletry pantry for people with AIDS, tutoring for people whose
second or third language is English, and emergency aid to people
suffering from disaster, disease or distress. Each project is funded by membership dues of $90 per year and special contributions from area businesses.
Our annual membership drive began this week and runs through the end of September. We invite you to become part of the largest
volunteer service organization in the state. May we call upon you to ask any questions you may have about Community Valors and to
encourage you to join our efforts? Please send the enclosed postcard to us now. We promise to serve your interests and find outlets for your talents in Community Valors.
Sincerely,
Signature
Mac Williams and Beth Tomasic
Membership Drive Co-chairs

P.S. Save some time so you can begin sharing your time: Send your membership dues in with the postcard, and well get you into a project right away. We have a red vest waiting for you!





Benefit


Background





Projects

Dues


Invitation
Ask for Permission to Contact







Postscript
Invitation


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Refusal of a Request
This letter refuses a request made by another company or individual.
Marion Medical Supply
883 Union N.W. Marion, KY 41503

November 16, 20XX
M.D. Easton 7
Cranston County Democratic Chairman
995 Rapid Run Rd.
Marion, KY 41503

Dear Mr. Easton:

I regret that I will be unable to run for County Commissioner Refusal
as we discussed last Friday. It is flattering to be asked, but
circumstances do not allow me to run for office at this time.
I am declining because of prior commitments to my family Reason
and my business. I would not have the time to campaign or
to devote to the position because of the prolonged illness of
my mother and the amount of travel required by my
business. I shall continue to actively support the Democratic
Party, through both volunteer efforts and monetary support.

Thank you for considering me. I appreciate your Thank You for
understanding. Understanding

Sincerely yours,

Signature
Duke Snow
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Expression of Appreciation
This letter expresses appreciation for an act by an employee or a business associate.
Democratic Committee
995 Rapid Run Road Marion, KY 41503
October 30, 20XX
7 Duke Snow
Marion Medical Supply
883 Union N.W.
Marion, KY 41503
Dear Mr. Snow:
Thank you for your support in our recent election. Your hard Express Appreciation
work is greatly appreciated along with your monetary
contributions.
When you indicated last November that you would not be General Statement
able to run for commissioner, I was disappointed. But I knew About the Situation
that you would support us in any way possible. Once again,
you came through. It was because of your untiring, behindthe-scenes work that we were able to sweep the election. You are essential to Cranston County Democrats.
Thank you once again for all your hard work. Without you, Reiterate Appreciation
we couldnt have done it.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
M.D. Doc Easton
Cranston County Democratic Chairman
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Appointment to Office
This letter congratulates the recipient on his appointment to an office in government or a charitable organization.

Clothiers International
793 W. Washington Tanville, RI 02878

September 30, 20XX
7
Samuel R. Grant
1515 Sycamore Lane
Tanville, RI 02878

Dear Sam:

Congratulations on your recent appointment to the Tanville Congratulations
City Council. You should be proud of your accomplishment.

Our policy of civic leave encourages our employees to General Statement
participate in government. Your longstanding commitment to About Company
the community and this recent appointment make us proud to
have you on our staff. Specific Recognition

Keep up the good work. We need more people like you Encouragement
looking out for Tanvilles interests. (optional)

Sincerely,

Signature

Lisa M. Mannerheim
Assistant Vice President

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Appointment to a Committee
This letter congratulates an employee or business associate on an appointment to a committee.

Keystone Educational Agency
562 Rolling Hills Birdsdale, PA 19508
January 10, 20XX
7 Karen Gorman
Box 67, R.R. 4
New Jerusalem, PA 18825
Dear Karen:
Congratulations on your appointment to the Excellence in First Congratulations
Education Committee for Lucas County. We are pleased that
one of our staff will be representing us and know that your
experience and education will serve you well.
Striving for excellence in education in the tri-state area is of General Statement
utmost importance. You have worked hard in the past (optional)
supporting educational issues, and Im sure you will
continue your strong leadership role in the Excellence in
Education Committee for Lucas County.
If you need any help or resources, be sure to let us know. We Second
are proud of your success and know that this appointment Congratulations
will bring you much personal satisfaction. (optional)
Sincerely,
Signature

Benjamin K. Douglas
Superintendent
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Compliment
Similar to letters that congratulate and acknowledge
accomplishments, this letter compliments someone (employee,
relative of an employee, friend of the company) on something he
has done.
Kids World
2255 Wilson Blvd. Galentine, IL 61036
January 20, 20XX 7

C.K. Leister
R.R. 5
Galentine, IL 61036

Dear C.K.:

Your fine performance in the Galentine Community Theatre First Compliment
last Friday was noteworthy. You brought Stanley to life in
A Streetcar Named Desire.

It is exciting for me to see fellow employees involved in the Relate to the Company
fine arts. Im sure you are aware that Kids World has been a (optional)
corporate supporter of the Galentine Community Theatre
since its inception.

You are to be commended for your fine interpretation. Keep Second Compliment
up the good work. (optional)

Sincerely,

Signature

Lorraine J. Black
President

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Invitation to Speak
This letter invites someone from the community to speak at a company-related function.
Enterprises, Ltd.
345 Waconia Rd. Denver, CO 80023
June 5, 20XX
7 Leonard Takamoto
5699 Mission Highway
Bismarck, ND 58578
Dear Mr. Takamoto:
We at Enterprises, Ltd. would like to ask you to speak at our Invitation
Annual Stockholders Meeting on August 10, 20XX, in Meeting Details
Denver.
Your reputation as an entrepreneur in the field of small Explanation
businesses interests us. As you may know, Enterprises, Ltd.
acts as a clearing house for small businesses and supplies
ideas and seed money for new small businesses. Your recent
article in Success speaks to the topic that we would like our Specific Topic
stockholders to hear: The Future of America Lies in Its
Small Businesses. We hope you will consider this offer.
Thank you for your time. Attached is a sheet outlining all of Thank You
the particulars: remuneration, schedules, hotel and airline Attachment
arrangements. Please let me know by June 15 if you will Deadline for Reply
accept this speaking engagement. You can reach me at Contact Information
208-555-7793.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Hal J. Martinson
Executive Administrative Assistant
HJM:lld

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Complimenting a Speaker
This letter compliments a speaker who has spoken at a company-related function.
Enterprises, Ltd.
345 Waconia Rd. Denver, CO 80023
August 11, 20XX

Leonard Takamoto
5699 Mission Highway
Bismarck, ND 58578
Dear Mr. Takamoto:
On behalf of the stockholders at Enterprises, Ltd., I would First Compliment
like to thank you for your speech yesterday. Several
stockholders have called me this morning to say how much
they agreed with what you were talking about.
I was particularly pleased to hear that Enterprises, Ltd. is Elaboration
right on target with our mission statement concerning small (optional)
businesses. The renewal of a solid economic base in the rural
areas of the Midwest is the result of forward-looking people
such as yourself and our board of directors. Dr. Michael
Pearson, one of our largest stockholders, spoke to me this
morning and put it succinctly: Mr. Takamoto hit the nail on Testimony
the head when he pointed out that the future is in small
businesses.
Please send me your expense report for immediate
reimbursement. Include copies of receipts and an invoice
number to facilitate this transaction.
Thank you for your inspiring speech. It was our privilege to Thank You
hear you. Second Compliment
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Calvin R. Stiers
President
CRS:est

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Letter to Legislator Showing Support
This letter shows support of a bill being considered. The
elaboration paragraph builds the writers credibility and increases the power of the support.
Marios Pasta Inns, Inc.
803 King Ave. Odessa, TX 76514
September 8, 20XX
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The Honorable Sarah Williams
Representative
Government Offices
9900 Ralston Way
Austin, TX 78603
Dear Ms. Williams:
Your continued concern for both restaurant owners and Statement of Support
customers is admirable, and H.R. 305 demonstrates that
concern. I support H.R. 305, which you recently introduced.
I own Marios Pasta Inns, Inc., a chain of 15 Italian Elaboration (optional)
restaurants throughout Texas. Additionally, I am the past
spokesperson for Restaurateurs International and am an
active member of its governing board. We wholeheartedly
support your bill that limits the sales tax on meals eaten out.
We can see that raising the tax will hurt the owners and our
customers.
Thank you for your concern and your untiring pursuit of Thank You
keeping taxes in line. You have our support.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Mario Napoli
President
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Letter to Legislator Showing Concern
This letter shows concern over a bill being considered.
Although elaboration is still optional in the second paragraph, it
builds credibility for the writers opinion and offers a persuasive
comparison. This paragraph cannot be discounted easily.
Marios Pasta Inns, Inc.
803 King Ave. Odessa, TX 76514

September 8, 20XX
The Honorable Hank Schlesselman
Representative
Government Offices
9900 Ralston Way
Austin, TX 78603
Dear Mr. Schlesselman:
I am most concerned about your support for H.R. 376. Its stringent Statement of Concern
restaurant sanitation requirements will double our costs, which
will, of course, be passed on to the customer. This may put many
restaurants out of business.
I own Marios Pasta Inns, Inc., a chain of 15 Italian restaurants Elaboration (optional)
throughout Texas. Additionally, I am the past spokesperson for
Restaurateurs International and am an active member of its
governing board. Our organization has thoroughly researched
sanitation laws for restaurants throughout the world. Texas
currently has the most stringent laws and is recognized as a leader
in the area of sanitation for restaurants. H.R. 376 in all cases has
standards that even our medical labs would have trouble meeting.
I hope you will seriously consider the impact H.R. 376 would have
on our economy. Such a bill can only cause the loss of jobs and Restate Concern
income and create disgruntled customers. Please withdraw your
support of H.R. 376.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Mario Napoli
President
MDN:klu

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Checklist
Did you state the purpose of the letter in the first part?
Did you explain the purpose with details and background
information in the second part of the letter?
Did you summarize the purpose of the letter in the
last part?
Did you use a clear, informative tone?
If the letter is one of appreciation or thanks, did you use a
sincere tone?
Did you personalize the letter to avoid a form-letter style?
















HAPTER 8


Personal Business Letters




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There are times when you write on behalf of yourself
rather than for the entire company. This chapter includes
samples to help you write personal business letters. The broad categories are as follows:
Congratulations
Birthday Wishes
Holiday Greetings
Birth of a Child
Marriage
Illness Hospital
Thank You
Apology
Inquiry
Request
Refusal
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation
of each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section
of the letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the
basic format.



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Step-by-Step Guide
These letters are similar to goodwill letters. They are letters in which you promote goodwill toward your employees, their
relatives and business associates.
Step 1: The first part of the letter states your purpose.
Depending on the reason for writing the letter, this may vary from congratulating a business associate or
employee to extending a holiday greeting.
Step 2: The second part of the letter gives the details or

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background information for the first part. This may
include details about an employees accomplishments
or personal comments concerning the first part.
Step 3: The last part of the letter acts as a summary, reminding
the recipient of the general nature of the letter. It may
include deadlines, a thank-you note or a re-request. It is
not necessary in many of the personal business letters
to have a third part.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when you
write a personal business letter.
Points to Remember Regarding Personal Business Letters
Social-oriented business letters are an excellent way to
establish or reinforce relationships in business. The use of personal notes to express thanks, recognition or condolence is considered by many to be a dying art. While fewer and fewer people write these types of notes, almost everyone enjoys receiving them, and these kinds of letters leave a lasting impression.
It is preferable to handwrite personal business notes, although typewritten notes are acceptable. Unless your penmanship is
illegible, always try to send a handwritten note in social situations. Keep personal business correspondence short and to the point.
Write with sincerity. Do not use business paper for personal notes without company permission. Short notes tend to get lost on a
large sheet of paper, so consider notecards or personal stationery for this occasion. Many professionals keep personalized stationery on hand for just such correspondence.



Personal Business Letters


Congratulations
Congratulate an employee, relative of an employee or business associate on an accomplishment.
W & C Letterhead



August 13, 20XX Date

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Dear Tim: Salutation

Congratulations on your win in the Junior Division at the Congratulations
Tulsa Rodeo.

To be able to win at such a young age is quite an Personal Comments
accomplishment. I understand that not only did you win the (optional)
Junior Division hands-down, but you also came within
points of the Senior Division winner.

Your mom is so proud of you. Congratulations once again! Second Congratulations
(optional)
Sincerely, Complimentary Close

Signature Signature

Karen Typed Name

Karen R. Detweiler Additional Information
President, Wilson and Company
1515 W. 23rd Avenue
Tulsa, OK 74103






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Congratulations Social
This letter congratulates an employee, relative of an employee or friend of the company.
Linder Airplanes
August 6, 20XX
Dear Tommy:
8 Congratulations on winning the soap box derby during My First Congratulations
Waterloo Days. Your father couldnt stop talking about how
proud he was of your victory.

I was interested in your win because I, too, was a soap box Personal Comments
derby winner 21 years ago in Akron, Ohio. Theres nothing (optional)
quite like the thrill of knowing that something youve made
is capable of winning.

Congratulations once again and good luck at the Nationals! Second
Congratulations
Sincerely, (optional)

Signature

Charles

Charles M. Norris
President

CMN:cro









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Personal Business Letters


Birthday Wishes
This brief letter wishes someone (employee, relative of an
employee, friend of the company, business associate) a happy
birthday.
May 25, 20XX

Gerri Montgomery
774 Rising Hill Rd.
Lakeland, FL 32340
Dear Gerri: 8

Its your birthday again! Where has the time gone? We hope Birthday Wishes
your birthday is a happy one. We appreciate your work here at Oglethorpes and Osman and hope that we enjoy many more birthdays together.

Sincerely,

Signature

Larry

Lawrence Oglethorpe
President, Oglethorpes and Osman















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Holiday Greetings
This short letter wishes an employee or business associate
holiday greetings. This is particularly useful for those employees or business associates whose religion is not covered by the
standard business greeting cards.

December 15, 20XX

Jenny Schwartz
38 Fairview Ct.
8 Teasdale, WV 26656

Dear Jenny:

The warmest of holiday greetings to you and your family. Goodwill
We at Gibralter Gems hope this holiday season brings you Greeting
the best of everything. Our regards to all of you.

Sincerely,

Signature

Tip

Thomas Tip Gibralter
Gibralter Gems















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Personal Business Letters


Birth of a Child
This letter congratulates the recipient on the birth of a child.

June 4, 20XX


Dear Lorraine:

There is nothing more exciting than a new baby. You and First Congratulations
T.K. must be proud. We were all thrilled to hear about
Travis birth. 8
All of us are looking forward to seeing you, T.K. and Travis General Statement
when you come to visit us next week. Thats the time for our
traditional Shower of Gifts.

Congratulations, Lorraine! Were all envious of your new Second
little one. Take care of all three of you. Congratulations
(optional)
Sincerely, Goodwill

Signature

li

li McAdam
Office Manager
China Dolls for You












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Marriage
This letter extends congratulations or best wishes when an employee or business associate gets married.

February 22, 20XX

Dear Linda:
On behalf of Smith, Jones and Yanacek, I would like to First Congratulations
extend our best wishes on your marriage to Terry Gleason.
8 We all wish you the happiest of times.

It is always a pleasure to share in the happiness of one of our
employees. In your case, it was even more so because you
have been such an important part of our firm. I know I speak
for all of us when I say that it couldnt have happened to a Personal Comment
nicer person. We all look forward to your return after your
honeymoon and hope that we will meet Terry soon.

Best wishes once again. Well see you in a couple of weeks. Second
Congratulations
Sincerely, (optional)

Signature

Monty

Montgomery Smith
Senior Partner
Smith, Jones and Yanacek
Counselors at Law
231 1st St. S.E.
Remington, MO 63302





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Personal Business Letters


Illness Hospital
This letter offers sympathy for an employee who is hospitalized.
January 10, 20XX
Dear Carrie:
I am sorry to hear that you have been hospitalized. Im sure Sympathy
that the staff at Trinity General will take good care of you Goodwill
and get you on your way. Please call us if you have any Assistance
questions regarding the companys health insurance. 8

Ft. Dodge Furnaces relies heavily on its employees and will Additional Comments
feel your absence. I hope that you will recover quickly. We
look forward to your return.

Sincerely,

Signature

Ole

Ole Munson
President
Ft. Dodge Furnaces
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Thank You
This letter thanks someone (employee, relative of an
employee, business associate) for something that was done.

Wobbly Horse Gift Shop
4866 Kilimanjaro Dr. Ann Arbor, MI 48897

April 3, 20XX

Dear Mr. Wu:
8
I want to thank you for sending me the address and phone First Thank You
number of the gift shop in Hong Kong.

I called them this evening to ask about the tablecloths you Explanation
told me about. You were right. They were most cordial and (optional)
reasonable in their prices. I was able to order 10 tablecloths
at a fraction of what they would have cost here in the
States.

Thank you once again for your kind gesture. Second Thank You

Sincerely,

Signature

Jan Robinson














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Personal Business Letters


Apology
This is a formal apology. Such letters usually deal with social events.

Trundle, Trundle and Smith
P.O. Box 2290 Frost, AZ 85603

December 1, 20XX

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Lambertson:


Please accept my apologies for missing your Thanksgiving First Apology
brunch on November 23. I hope my last-minute change of
plans did not inconvenience you too much.

As you know, I had planned on attending and was looking Explanation and
forward to it. However, my brother who lives in Boston, Personal Comments
Georgia, had emergency bypass surgery, and his wife asked (optional)
me to be with her. Had that not happened, naturally I would
have been with you.

Once again, I ask for your understanding in this matter and Second Apology
hope that my frantic, last-minute call to bow out was (optional)
acceptable.

Sincerely,

Signature

Thomas J. Trundle, Sr.

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Inquiry
This letter asks for information to be used by the company.

Cat Man Dew Pet Suppliers
853 Regal Ave. Oklahoma City, OK 73009

February 14, 20XX

Pekka H. Huovienin
34 Raamintinuu
8 58 Helsinki 00580
Finland

Dear Mr. Huovienin:

We are trying to locate information on a breed of cat called Inquiry
the Suomi shorthair and understand that you are the leading Compliment
expert on cats in Finland.

We have a client who is interested in buying a Suomi Explanation
shorthair. She had seen one once at the New York Feline
Show but has been unable to locate one since. She came to
our shop and requested that we help her. Since the breed
originated in Finland, we thought you might be able to give
us some more information. We are most interested in the
names of breeders that may have kittens for sale.

We will call you within the next month to follow up on this Contact Information
inquiry. Thank you for all your trouble. We look forward to Thank You
talking to you.

Sincerely,

Signature
Kathleen Cat Pence
KMP:nip

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Personal Business Letters


Request
This letter asks an individual or company to act on a request.
PDQ Truckers
P.O. Box 2068 Denver, CO 80393-2068

August 21, 20XX

Cameron Mrstik
Mrstiks Mobile Station
582 Robinwood
Minihaha, MN 55437 8

Dear Mr. Mrstik:

Would you please return the black leather jacket that was Request
left in your gas station last Saturday?

One of our truckers, Sam MacIntyre, left his leather jacket Explanation
when he was on a run for us. Another of our truckers
mentioned to Sam that he thought he saw a jacket just like
Sams hanging on your wall. He said it had to be Sams;
there are few leather jackets that say, Ivydale, West
Virginia on them. Sam asked us to call you as hes on Specific
vacation in the Bahamas. We have tried repeatedly to reach Information
you by phone, but your phone is always busy.

Please send the jacket as soon as possible, C.O.D. Thank Thank You
you for your prompt response.

Sincerely,

Signature

Patrick D. Quentin
President

PDQ:msq


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Refusal
This letter is an answer to the request letter and gives the
reasons why the recipient wont act on the writers request.
Mrstiks Mobile Station
582 Robinwood Minihaha, MN 55437

August 25, 20XX

Patrick D. Quentin, President

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PDQ Truckers
P.O. Box 2068
Denver, CO 80393-2068

Dear Mr. Quentin:

I would like to return Mr. MacIntyres jacket to him, but I Refusal
dont have it.

The jacket your trucker saw says, I love Dale, Wes and Explanation
Virginia. I had that jacket made specially for my wife.
Those are our three childrens names. I checked our register
of truckers, and there was no Sam MacIntyre at our station
on the Saturday you mentioned. Perhaps he was at Mrs.
Ricks Mobile Station on the interstate. The phone number Added Service
there is 612-555-3827. People get us mixed up all the time.

Im sorry I couldnt help you. I hope Mr. MacIntyre finds his Regret
jacket soon. Goodwill

Sincerely,

Signature

Cameron Mrstik

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Checklist
Is the tone of the letter sincere?
Did you state the purpose of the letter in the first part?
Did you give background information or details in the
second part?
If you used a third part, did you recongratulate, thank or
set deadlines for your request?







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HAPTER 9


Letters of Condolence






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Here are samples to help you write the most difficult of all letters to compose: condolence letters. The broad
categories are as follows:
On the Death of a Business Associate
On the Death of a Mother
On the Death of a Father
On the Death of a Wife
On the Death of a Husband
On the Death of a Child
On the Death of a Brother
On the Death of a Sister
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation
of each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section
of the letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the
basic format.









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Step-by-Step Guide
Although sympathy cards are available, a letter of condolence
is more personal. Letters of condolence should be written with a
sincere tone. If at all possible, reflect on the person who has died.
Step 1: The first part of the letter offers your condolences.
Step 2: The second part of the letter, if possible, should reflect
on the person who has died. If you knew the person
well, personal recollections are appropriate. If you did
not know the person well or at all, this part is optional;
although, if you can relate this persons life to your
own in some way, you should include this part.

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Step 3: The last part of the letter offers further condolences or
support.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write a condolence letter.
Remember
Condolence letters should always be handwritten. It is in very poor taste to type a letter of condolence.



Letters of Condolence


On the Death of a Business Associate


Grahams Letterhead
573 Westdale Road Santa Fe, NM 87505

October 6, 20XX Date

Dear Lou: Salutation

I was shocked to hear of the death of your partner, Max Condolences
Wassermann. Although I knew he was ill, I was still taken by
surprise by his sudden passing.
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Max and I worked together at the old Cramers Store in Personal Recollection
downtown Santa Fe when we first arrived here in 1954. I of Deceased
will never forget his immense capacity for helping other
people. I share your sorrow at this time.

If there is any way that I can help, please let me know. Rest Further Condolences
assured that your loss is all of Santa Fes loss. or Offers of Support

Sincerely, Complimentary Close


Geo. Pinky Graham Signature















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On the Death of a Mother


Trains Unlimited
December 11, 20XX
Dear Marilyn:




9

Please let me extend my deepest sympathy on behalf of all Condolences
the staff here at Trains Unlimited on the passing of your
mother.

I know that you spoke many times of how difficult your Personal Recollection
mothers battle with cancer was. Though we are saddened by of Deceased (optional)
her death, Im sure that we share your relief that she is now
at peace. She was a brave woman.

Please accept our sympathy. We have taken up a collection Further Condolences
for a memorial contribution and have sent it to the American or Offers of Support
Cancer Society in your mothers name.

Sincerely,


Gloria Williams
Vice President, Sales















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Letters of Condolence


On the Death of a Father


Lindlemeiers Tree Farms
R.R. 2 Marlboro, VT 00192


November 1, 20XX

Dear Truk:

We were saddened to hear that your father died last Friday Condolences
and wish to extend our sympathy.
9
Although we did not know your father well, we did have a Personal Recollection
chance to meet him on a couple of occasions. He was proud of Deceased (optional)
of his new country and of being able to help his children
become established here in the United States. Though this
loss is painful,there are many reasons to be proud of your
father.

If there is some way that Tilly and I can help you and your Further Condolences
family, let us know. Please take as much time from work as or Offers of Support
you need to get your fathers affairs in order.

Sincerely,


Jake and Tilly Lindlemeier












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On the Death of a Wife


March 1, 20XX


Dear Charles:

Please accept our condolences on the untimely passing of Condolences
your wife, Lydia. It is difficult to understand why such
tragedies happen, and I do not understand why Lydia was
taken from you so early in your life together.
9 I hope you will now surround yourself with good friends and Personal Recollection
the pleasant memories you have of Lydia. I remember her of Deceased (optional)
beaming smile at the company picnics. She seemed to have a zest for life that few of us do and was willing to share that zest with others. I shall never forget her enthusiastic win of the sack race last year.

Please accept what little comfort these words can give you. Further Condolences
If we can help you in any way, please call. Offers of Support

Sincerely,


N.K. Berryhill














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Letters of Condolence


On the Death of a Husband


July 17, 20XX


Dear Mrs. Trotter:

Our deepest sympathy to you and your family on the death Condolences
of your husband, Ned. He was a dear friend to so many of us
here at Thompsons.

When Ned first came to Thompsons, he told us that he was Personal Recollection
here to stay, and stay he did 35 years. I am happy that he of Deceased (optional) 9
enjoyed a few years of his retirement before he became ill.

We at Thompsons are here when you need us. Please accept Further Condolences
this token as a memorial for Ned. Offers of Support

Sincerely,


George Ray Thompson


















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Business Letters for Busy People


On the Death of a Child


February 23, 20XX


Dear Mr. and Mrs. Nelson:





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I was shocked to hear of the death of your son, Bobby. Such Condolences
losses defy understanding.

Bobby used to come in on Saturday with Ike to the station Personal Recollection
and listen to me do my show. He was forever wanting me to of Deceased
play John Denvers Rocky Mountain High. He said it (optional)
made him feel good. Ill dedicate it to him this Saturday.

If I can do anything to help, call. Ike, Ill cover for you as Further Condolences
long as you need. God bless. Offers of Support

Sincerely,


Rocky Hopkins



















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Letters of Condolence


On the Death of a Brother


May 12, 20XX


Dear Ken:

I would like to offer my sympathy to you and your family on Condolences
the passing of your brother.

Although I never met him, I feel as if I knew him from all Personal Recollection
youve said about him at work. Im sure his wife and of Deceased
children are pleased to know that you spoke so highly of him (optional) 9
and his work with special-needs children. It is a shame that
one so gifted must succumb so early in life.

If you need someone to talk to when you come back, Ill Further Condolences
be here. Offers of Support

Sincerely,


Wanda Ferguson
Divisional Manager, TeleMarketing
















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On the Death of a Sister


January 4, 20XX


Dear Ron:

I am most sorry to hear that your sister passed away from Condolences
kidney failure last week.

Linda Jean was a joy to work with the two years she was Personal Recollection
9 here at Modern Health. She always had such outrageous of Deceased
stories to tell. You can be thankful that she enjoyed life while (optional)
she was with us.

Please offer my sympathy to your family, especially your Further Condolences
mother. Ill take care of your mail while you are gone. Offers of Support

Sincerely,


Terry Glandon
Vice President, Claims

















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Letters of Condolence



Checklist
Is the letter sincere?
Does the first part of the letter offer condolences?
Does the second part of the letter include personal
recollections if you knew the deceased?
Does the third part of the letter offer further condolences
and support?
Does the letter comfort the bereaved?








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HAPTER 10


Letters About Employment Changes







One of the most demanding writing tasks is searching for

a new position or hiring a new employee. Those are the two
main categories of this chapter. Topics include the following:
Reference Request
Waiver of Confidentiality
Request for Meeting
Job Hunter Seeking an Interview
Interview Confirmation
Thanks for Interview
Unsolicited Application
Cover Letters for Resums
Requesting Appointment
Reply to Unsolicited Application
Job Application
Job Hunter Seeking Job With Contact
Solicited Application
Job Acceptance
Job Rejection
Not Accepting Possible Job Offer

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Positive Resignation
Negative Resignation
Response to Job Offer: Covers Terms
Topics also include the following employer responses:
Request for Employment Reference
Reference for Former Employee
Letters of Introduction
Letter of Recommendation
Character Reference
Progress Report
Rejection of Application
Response to Rejected Job Application
10 Follow-Up After Not Getting the Job
Rejection of an In-House Job Applicant
Rejection of an Unsolicited Application
Rejection of a Solicited Application
Invitation for an Interview
Job Offers
New Employee
Promotions
Acceptance of Resignation
Recommending a Raise
General business letters:
Rejection of Unsolicited Business
Request for Material
Request for Information
Confirmation to Speaker
Giving Information
Discontinuing a Business Relationship
Rejecting a Request
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Letters About Employment Changes



Introducing a New Employee
At the side of the page you will find a brief explanation of
each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section of the
letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the basic format.
Step-by-Step Guide
Letters hiring employees are used by many companies in lieu
of a contract drawn up by an attorney and are recognized as legal
s in many courts of law. It is therefore extremely
important that you specify each aspect of employment for the
prospective employee. Letters in this section also include samples
of rejection letters and letters requesting confidential information.
Step 1: The first part of the letter states your purpose. This
may be anything from offering a position to

requesting information.
Step 2: The second part of the letter gives the details or
background information for the first part. If you are
offering a position, it is appropriate in this section to
give all of the details concerning the position. If you
are requesting information, you should explain why
you need the information. If you are rejecting an
application, you should provide a reason for the
rejection. If you are recommending or providing a
reference for someone, state specific knowledge, skills
and abilities the person has that will benefit the reader.
Step 3: The last part of the letter acts as a summary reminding
the recipient of the general nature of the letter. This
part clarifies the action that must be taken, if any.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write letters to hire employees.

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Reference Request
Asking a person to be a reference is awkward for most people. This letter will help with that task.










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December 2, 20XX
Jason Tompkins, Jr.
JJT: Heavy Equipment
1288 E. U.S. 63
Sioux City, IA 50585

Dear Jason:

May I use your name as a reference for a job I hope to get? I am applying for risk manager openings at Johns Oil Company, Fast Food Inc., and Ploish Publishing. Our experience together at JJT helped give me the confidence to try for these jobs.

Since I graduated with an associate degree in risk management last spring, I have taken several courses in industrial engineering. I am experienced with OSHA regulations and a variety of plant
operational systems.

Being both co-workers and friends for many years, I naturally
thought of you as a reference. If you are comfortable with that
idea, please return the enclosed self-addressed, stamped postcard to
me stating your approval. Id appreciate your help, of course, but
also understand not wanting strangers calling and wanting inside
information about someone who out-fishes you on every camping
trip. Yet, I know I could have a great career with any of these
companies and could then afford to treat you to a fish dinner at a
fine restaurant!

Thanks either way for being a friend and the son of a heavy
equipment company owner who hired a poor fisherman years
back!

Sincerely,
Signature
Cody


Date
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Letters About Employment Changes


Waiver of Confidentiality
This letter is a form signed by an employee giving the
employer permission to provide information to parties such as welfare agencies or spouses who request it. This protects the employer from a lawsuit for invasion of privacy.

Wholesome Eggs, Inc.
R.R. 3
Bandville, AL 35542

I, the undersigned, acknowledge that my employer has Acknowledgment
received a request from Crystal Denney for information
concerning my employment.

I grant my employer full permission to provide the Permission Given
information described as salary history, benefit history and 10
sick leave accrued.

Signature Signature

Lisa Ziesser Typed Name
Employee
Date
Sept. 5, 20XX

















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Business Letters for Busy People


Request for Meeting
Asking for a meeting or an interview is an essential job skill. Here is how to do it.

456 El Camino Senders Address
Santa Fe, NM 87501

April 25, 20XX

Maggie Montoya
Escrow Department
Valley National Bank
P.O. Box 99
Espanola, NM 87532
10 Dear Ms. Montoya:

Thank you for your response to my April 19, 20XX, inquiry Thank You
concerning the position of escrow representative at Valley Reference Position
National Bank.

If you have any time available on either May 7 or 8, I would Request
appreciate 10 minutes of your day to review a five-step plan
for developing an escrow division in one month. This plan
could benefit the entire bank. If the plan interests you, we Benefit
could then schedule additional time to discuss how I might assist VNB in achieving its escrow goals.

I will call on May 2 to arrange an appointment. I look Contact Information
forward to meeting you in person.

Sincerely,

Signature

Carrie Gonzales



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Letters About Employment Changes


Job Hunter Seeking an Interview
This letter uses a request as a hook to get into the company. At the same time, the writer is clear in stating her qualifications and desire to be considered in the future for a position.
March 15, 20XX

Mr. Phillip Crenshaw, Personnel Director
ABC Manufacturing
4909 Gen. Bradley NE
Albuquerque, NM 87111

Dear Mr. Crenshaw:
May I have an interview with you to discuss your work in Request
personnel as well as any new directions you see developing
in the personnel field? 10
I am gathering information for an article I am writing on Reason
students, graduation, job prospects and future developments
in personnel. The article will appear in the local section of
The Kansas City Star. I would very much like your input for
my article.
I am especially interested in what is taking place in Background
manufacturing companies such as ABC. As a college senior,
I will graduate from Kansas University at the end of May
with a degree in human resources and business
communication. I feel that my education and summer
activities, writing news releases for the regional YMCA and
developing skill programs for YMCA employees will qualify
me in the future for a trainee position in personnel.
I will call your office next Wednesday morning for an Contact Information
appointment time that is convenient. My interview should not take more than 30 minutes.
Sincerely,
Signature
Marion L. Thomas


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Business Letters for Busy People


Interview Confirmation
Keeping your name in front of a potential employer is an
effective way of persuading someone to hire you. Confirming an interview achieves that purpose while reducing confusion
regarding appointment details.
456 El Camino
Santa Fe, NM 87501

May 1, 20XX

Maggie Montoya
Escrow Department
Valley National Bank
P.O. Box 99
10 Espanola, NM 87532

Dear Ms. Montoya:

Thank you for making time in your schedule to see me on Thank You
Monday, May 7, at 9 a.m.

Although I will be brief in my presentation of the five steps Confirmation
to develop an escrow division, I will also be available to
address any concerns you may have regarding the Agenda and Intent
achievement of this goal within a month by your escrow
staff.

Sincerely,

Signature

Carrie Gonzales







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Thanks for Interview
Again, keep your name on a potential employers desk and in her mind. Demonstrating manners is a persuasive tool for
obtaining a job, too.
456 El Camino
Santa Fe, NM 87501

May 7, 20XX

Maggie Montoya
Escrow Department
Valley National Bank
P.O. Box 99
Espanola, NM 87532
10
Dear Ms. Montoya:

Thank you for the interview today. Your joke about the Thank You
lonesome lawyer still makes me laugh. Reminder

I appreciate your consideration of my qualifications and
application for the job of escrow representative. I will check
in with you next Monday to see if you have made a decision
about the position. If I can answer any questions or concerns, Contact Information
please call me at 555-6678, mornings, if possible.

Thank you again for your interest. Second Thank You


Sincerely,

Signature

Carrie Gonzales





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Business Letters for Busy People


Unsolicited Application
This letter may double as a cover letter for a resum. The key descriptors are linked directly to the resum material.
67 No. Hampshire Road
Redmond, WA 98052
October 12, 20XX
Carver, Barrington & Stephens Imports
2345 Brown Ave.
Seattle, WA 98104
Dear Mr. Carver:



10

I am responding to the in-house posting for the position of Purpose
associate project manager with your organization. A former
colleague, Terry Barrington, alerted me to the opening and Position
suggested that I contact you directly.
I have four years of experience with Michaels & Wade in Reference
Redmond, where I specialized in management information
systems. As you update your computer network and applications, Background
you will need expertise in every department of your import
business. The key descriptors below highlight areas of my Benefit
experience and education that you will find most pertinent.
Computer skills: DOS, WordPerfect, Lotus, Harvard Graphics; Specific Skills
associates degree in computer science, 1993.

Communication skills: Excellent grammar and usage in writing,
good oral presentation and training skills, wrote and delivered
annual department report for board of directors.
Sales experience: Retail sales associate as high school and college student for three years at Pier Trading Post.
Supervisory experience: Assistant to the associate warehouse
supervisor at Michaels & Wade for four years.
May I arrange a time to meet with you or your agent early next Request
week? I will call your office on Thursday, October 16. I would be
available immediately, just in time for the holiday rush at Carver, Contact Information
Barrington & Stephens Imports. My daytime phone number is Availability
555-7889. Please call collect if you have questions.
Sincerely,
Signature
Charlie Lamble


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Cover Letters for Resums
When faxing a copy of your resum to a potential employer,
also mail or hand deliver a quality copy for the employers files.

7260 Vista Drive
Denver, CO 80030
March 3, 20XX
Thomas Randolph, Senior Geologist
Gigantic Resources
One Mountain Plaza
Phoenix, Arizona 99065
Dear Tom:
I enjoyed our telephone conversation this morning and was Goodwill
interested to hear about the opening for an exploration 10
geologist at Gigantic Resources. As you requested, I am Request
faxing you a copy of my resum. I will also be mailing you a Answer
copy for your permanent files.
As I mentioned during our conversation, I am a petroleum Background
geologist with seven years of experience in the Rocky (General)
Mountain region. Currently, I am working for Weaver Oil
and Gas as their manager of geology. My duties include both prospect generation and sales. I have strong technical
abilities and sound written and oral communication skills. Due to family considerations, I am very interested in
relocating to the Phoenix area.
I look forward to meeting with you on April 1. If you wish to Contact Information
contact me before our interview, you may reach me at 303-
555-5792.
Thank you again for the information you offered me on the Thank You
telephone this morning.
Sincerely,
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This is an example of a short cover letter for a resum when there is no knowledge of an available position.


March 14, 20XX

Jane Smith, Personnel
American Academy of Family Physicians 8880 Ward Parkway
Kansas City, Missouri 64114

Dear Ms. Smith:

I am interested in a part-time position with American Reason
Academy of Family Physicians as an editor.
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My writing and editing experience include newspaper copy, Background
manuscripts, advertising copy, books, brochures and training (General)
manuals.

My resum is enclosed. If you have questions or need more Enclosure
information, please call me at 555-4866. Contact Information

Sincerely,

Signature
Charles Brenner
Enc.










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Letters About Employment Changes


Requesting Appointment
This letter asks for an appointment to discuss future
employment. It offers enough information to interest the reader but does not give the detail of a resum.
604 E. Division Rd.
Terre Haute, IN 47815
March 23, 20XX
Alan Justin, President
Justin and Cramer Publishing
67 West Marcus Street
New York, New York 10032


Dear Mr. Justin:
I am a professional business editor who will be relocating to Information
your area within the next six months. I plan on being in New Request
York City April 22 through April 25. May I have an (General)
appointment with you to discuss employment opportunities
in the New York City area and specifically with Justin and
Cramer Publishing?
My expertise is both as an editor and as a business writer. I Background
have six years of experience in business editing: four years
as an assistant editor at Smart Company Books and, most
recently, two years as a business writing consultant for
professional groups. I have also published newsletters for
two not-for-profit organizations on a volunteer basis.
If it is convenient, may I schedule time to talk with you Request
between April 22 and 25? I will call your office the week of (Specific)
April 1 to determine if there is a time you will be available.
In the meantime, if you have any questions or need Contact Information
additional information, please contact me at 219-555-9846.
Sincerely,
Signature
Alice Moses


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Business Letters for Busy People


Reply to Unsolicited Application
This letter answers a job inquiry when there is no opening.

David Smith Advertising
P.O. Box 983
St. Louis, MO 63117


January 5, 20XX

Michael Korslund
7320 Pershing
St. Louis, MO 63130
10
Dear Mr. Korslund:

Your letter inquiring about employment opportunities in our Thank You
company was forwarded to me from Personnel because of your interest in advertising and copywriting. I am pleased you thought of David Smith Advertising.

At this time, however, all our writing slots are filled, and I Reasons
do not anticipate there being any openings this year. I will
ask Personnel to keep your letter on file for three months. Negative News
In April, let them know if you still want to be considered for Option
an opening.

Sincerely,

Signature

Robert S. Wood
Creative Director




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Letters About Employment Changes


Job Application
This letter responds to a job advertisement; it includes the background of the writer and asks for an interview.
5314 Delaware
Kansas City, MO 64133
April 19, 20XX

Janet Armstrong
Taggerty and Sons Publishing
673 South Michigan Ave.
Chicago, IL 60603
Dear Ms. Armstrong:

I am writing in response to your advertisement in the December issue Purpose
of Publishers Monthly Journal, in which you announced an opening Position
for a sales representative with Taggerty and Sons Publishing.
I have five years of retail experience in the book industry. For the past Reference
three years, I have managed Books for Us, an independent bookstore
located in Rolling Hills. I am familiar with the products that you Background
publish and believe my experience as a retailer and with the buying
public would benefit your company. As the manager of an
independent bookstore, I have demonstrated my ability to set goals
and complete projects in a timely and thorough manner.
In my current job, I am responsible for buying both new publications Specific Skills
and backlist inventory as well as analyzing sales trends using a
computerized inventory system. I have a B.A. in English literature, Enclosure
and I am an active participant in local writers workshops. I have
enclosed a copy of my resum for your review.
I would like to meet with you and will contact your office the week of Request
April 27 to determine if an interview may be arranged. If you wish to Contact Information
contact me before that date, please call
555-2434.
Sincerely,
Signature
Frances Hatcher
Enc.


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Business Letters for Busy People


Job Hunter Seeking Job With Contact
This letter asks for a job interview and mentions a contact.
November 10, 20XX


Mr. Robert J. Hunter
Director, Internal Communications
United Telephone, Inc.
P.O. Box 3245
Winston Salem, NC 27106


Dear Mr. Hunter:
10 John Stewart, your director of public relations, told me that Contact
you were looking for a communications specialist. I am a
recent graduate of Richmond University and would like the Reason
opportunity to talk with you about the position.

My degree is in journalism, and my intern work during my Background
senior year was on the community desk at The Kansas City Star. The summer of 20XX, I assisted the editor of the St. Joseph Hospital newsletter and was responsible for writing the articles and taking pictures.

May I have an appointment to discuss my qualifications and Request
my interest in working with you as a communications
specialist? I will call your office Wednesday morning for a Contact Information
time that is convenient for you.

Sincerely,

Signature

Joan Eldon Williams




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Letters About Employment Changes


Solicited Application
Although the employer initiates contact in this situation, the
job seeker must respond with a personal sales pitch, such as this
sample letter.
77 Longmeadow Ave.
Tulsa, OK 74135
August 3, 20XX
David Fronte, Vice President
Professional Chemical Institute
864 Manhattan
Pittsburg, KS 66762
Dear Mr. Fronte:
10
Thank you for your telephone call this morning requesting Reminder
my application for product developer. I am pleased that our Position
friend, Kelly Greene, spoke so highly of me. Reference
Your call came at an opportune time in my career. I am Benefit
encouraged that your companys direction may be the very avenue I have sought for several new product ideas. Your goal of a 10 percent increase in products during the next two years is a challenge I am ready to accept.
I am eager to discuss this potential growth with you next Confirmation
Wednesday in your office at 2:15 p.m., as you suggested in
our conversation today. In the meantime, please call me at Contact Information
316-555-9975 should you need additional information prior
to our meeting.
Thank you again for your interest. Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
Brad Reed



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Business Letters for Busy People


Job Acceptance
Put this in writing! Confirm the specifications as you understand them.
One Tailgate Dr.
Sioux City, IA 50584

December 15, 20XX

Mr. Kevin Johns
Johns Oil Company
R.R. Box 45
Sioux City, IA 50523

Dear Mr. Johns:
10
It is a pleasure to accept the position of risk manager, Acceptance
effective January 3, 20XX. I am eager to begin my new Date
assignment.

Thank you for your confidence in me. I will do my best to Thank You
surpass the challenge presented by Johns Oil Companys Intent
phenomenal growth.

Sincerely,

Signature

Cody Helm












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Letters About Employment Changes


Job Rejection
This situation is difficult. If you know the job is a mismatch
for your skills, be honest and then act to remedy the situation.
Your integrity and credibility will expand with this letter.
174 Bittersweet St.
Broken Arrow, OK 74012
January 18, 20XX
Carol Connell, Director
Intercomp, Inc.
P. O. Box 23659
Tulsa, OK 74133
Dear Ms. Connell:

The position of executive drafting assistant sounds exciting. Position
Thank you for considering me. However, I cannot accept this Thank You
offer in good conscience at this time. Rejection
The computer expertise this position requires for success Reason
demands more experience than I currently have. I want to do
an excellent job; therefore, I am enrolling in a CAD course
at Tulsa University. In four months I will have the training to Decision
pursue a similar position with determination.
Perhaps TU instructors can suggest names of recent students Suggestion for
who are prepared now to accept the responsibilities of the Alternative
job. Someonebetter trained than I am is waiting to discover
Intercomp.
Thank you again for thinking of me. It has been the incentive Second Thank You
I needed to get the extra training I must have to continue in
the drafting field. I intend to be prepared for the next Intent
executive drafting assistant opening as your company
continues to expand its operation.
Sincerely,
Signature
Chris Jensen

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Business Letters for Busy People


Not Accepting Possible Job Offer
This letter is positive and suggests a continuing business relationship in the future.
June 23, 20XX

Veronica Black
President
Quinta Exploration
P.O. Box 1312
Phoenix, AZ 85029
Dear Veronica:


10


Thank you for your letter notifying me that I am one of your
final candidates for the position of corporate vice president. I
certainly enjoyed meeting with you Tuesday, touring the
company, and learning more about the goals of your board.
However, as we discussed at our meeting, my priority has
been to settle on the East Coast, and I have continued to
pursue opportunities. Recently, I received an offer in my
field of hydrogeology, located within a days drive of the coast and in proximity to family members. With the responsibilities that are inherent in the position and the future that it promises, I have accepted the offer.
I hope that we meet again, perhaps at the national conference next summer. Since it is scheduled for Atlanta, I can promise you a tour of the city.
Thank you again for the fine day at Quinta Exploration. Sincerely,
Signature
Janet T. Lundquist


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Letters About Employment Changes


Positive Resignation
When you must move on to accept new opportunities, use this sample to guide the draft of your resignation. It can be very brief, basically providing a formal notice for ation
purposes. Or, it may provide an explanation. Employers appreciate understanding the situation.

34458 Seminole Lane
Tampa, FL 33640
February 2, 20XX
Jerry Sanderstein
Sanderstein Aviation
8865 Hidden River Parkway

Tampa, FL 33637
Dear Jerry:
With deep regret and with some excitement, I must resign as Feelings
night shift supervisor, effective March 1, 20XX. My family Resignation
will be relocating to Georgia this spring so my wife can Date
pursue a lucrative offer in a law firm. This is an opportunity Reason
we cannot overlook.
I will be glad to assist in the training of my replacement. Our Assistance Offer
night shift has a couple of competent workers who would
make excellent shift supervisors.
Your encouragement during the past nine years has allowed Thank You
me to grow in my responsibilities and capabilities. Thank Personal Note
you for these successful years. I will miss you, Jerry, as well
as all my other friends at Sanderstein Aviation. Your
leadership provides me with many fond memories. I wish
you continued success.
Sincerely,

Tom

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Business Letters for Busy People


Negative Resignation
When you must leave a position under duress or stress, keep your explanation short, honest and positive. Never write a
resignation letter when youre angry. Remember the adage: Dont burn bridges. The goal is to state any serious conflict calmly, rationally and gracefully. Despite your differences, you may need a reference from this employer in the future.

345 Cedar Lake Road
Minneapolis, MN 55426

July 14, 20XX

Leslie Young, Marketing Director

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Marketing Towers
60 S. Ninth St.
Minneapolis, MN 55402

Dear Ms. Young:

I am resigning my position as special accounts representative, effective July 30, 20XX.
Recent circumstances incompatible with my personal values require that I change my employment.

Thank you for the chance to work and learn at Marketing Towers.

Sincerely,

Signature

Julie Mast







Resignation
Date

Reason


Thank You







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Letters About Employment Changes


Response to Job Offer: Covers Terms
This letter responds to a job offer. The writer covers the terms of employment in this reply.
1231 Holly Drive
Carrollton, Texas 75007
July 16, 20XX
Edward Harris
Jenkins, Louis & Albright
505 Santa Fe Ave.
Coppell, TX 75019



Dear Mr. Harris:
I am looking forward to beginning my position as office manager Acceptance
at Jenkins, Louis & Albright effective August 1. Thank you for Date
the confidence you have shown in my abilities. Thank You
In reviewing our conversation regarding my compensation, it is
my understanding that the position pays $26,000 per year and Terms
that my salary will be reviewed on an annual basis beginning one
year after I start with the company. I will receive both medical
and dental insurance as stipulated in the health-care enrollment
package I was given during my second interview on July 11. In
addition, I am entitled to two weeks of paid vacation per year
after I have been with the company 12 months. I recognize that I
must schedule my vacation at least four weeks in advance and
arrange for a temporary replacement to fulfill my duties while I
am away.
I am pleased to be associated with Jenkins, Louis & Albright. Compliment
Sincerely,
Signature
Melissa Waters



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157



Business Letters for Busy People


Request for Employment Reference
This letter is from a company requesting a reference from a job applicants previous employer.
TicToc Clocks, Inc.
8071 Speedway Indianapolis, IN 46107

February 28, 20XX

J. Carson Jamison, President
Weatherman Time
33 Little House Road
Columbus, OH 43230

Dear Mr. Jamison:
10
We recently received an application from Carl Olson for the Statement of
position of master carpenter with our firm. We understand he Candidate
was previously employed by you.

We would appreciate any information you could give us Explanation of
concerning Mr. Olsons work habits, expertise as master Request
carpenter and attitude. We would also appreciate you sharing with us the reason he no longer works for your firm.

We look forward to hearing from you in early March. Please Deadline
advise us if the information you provide is confidential.
Thank you for your time in answering this request. Thank You

Sincerely,

Signature
James Vries
President

JBV:llo



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Letters About Employment Changes


Reference for Former Employee
This letter is a reference for a former employee who is seeking employment elsewhere.
Grant Middle School
901 Third St. Columbia, OH 43230

March 12, 20XX
Wendell R. Rathbourne, Principal
Jasper Heights Middle School
444 Calbryne Road
Shaker Heights, OH 44139

Dear Mr. Rathbourne:
10
Pauline OMalley was employed as a teacher associate at Statement of Previous
Grant Middle School from April 1988 to June 1988. She was Employment
terminated because of a decrease in funding for special
education.

During Ms. OMalleys brief tenure, she performed her Explanation of
duties very well. She was a teacher associate for eighth- Performance
grade behavioral-disorders classes and was well-liked by
both students and staff. The teachers she worked with speak
highly of her abilities and willingness to cooperate.

I recommend Ms. OMalley for any teacher associate Recommendation
position. Please feel free to call me or Marian Thompson, Contact Information
her past supervisor, for further information.

Sincerely,

Signature
Lillian M. Detterding
Principal

LMD:gan
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Business Letters for Busy People


Letters of Recommendation
This letter recommends a former employee who has requested the reference.
Hirsch & Hirsch
Attorneys at Law
1005 Grand Avenue, Suite 300
Kansas City, Missouri 64106
March 13, 20XX
Mr. Kevin Doerter, City Manager
City of Burlington
P.O. Box 490
Burlington, KS 66839
Dear Mr. Doerter:
10 Elizabeth Kidder, who has applied for the position of city Reason
clerk/finance director for the city of Burlington, has asked
me to provide you with a letter of recommendation. I am
pleased to comply with her request.
Ms. Kidder was the personnel clerk at the City of Olathe, Previous Employment
Olathe, Kansas, when I began as personnel director in
September 20XX. I found her to be very capable.
During the two years that she reported to me, Ms. Kidder Explanation of
was extremely skilled in handling the administration of all Performance
office functions, which included supervising the part-time
clerk.
Ms. Kidder is a self-starter, a capable and efficient Recommendation
supervisor, and an exceptional worker. I give Ms. Kidder my
highest recommendation. She would be a valuable member
of your team.
Sincerely,
Signature
James W. Davis
Partner
JWD:the

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Letters of recommendation emphasize how a person worked
on a previous job and her expertise. They should also include the
relationship between the one seeking the job and the person
writing the recommendation, and the length of the acquaintance.
Dont hesitate to be enthusiastic, but be sure the candidate can live
up to your comments.


GRANT WOOD HIGH SCHOOL
319 30th St. S.E. Cedar Rapids, IA 52403
January 16, 20XX
Linda A. Hagerman, Principal
Thomas Jefferson High School
788 Muscatine Ave.

Iowa City, IA 52240
Dear Ms. Hagerman:
It is with great pleasure that I recommend Mary Alice Westerly Introduction
for the physics position at Thomas Jefferson.
Mrs. Westerly taught at Grant Wood High School from 1978 to Relationship to the
1986, during which time I was principal. Her primary teaching Writer
responsibilities were physics, chemistry and ninth-grade
general science. She was one of the best teachers we have ever Background
had in the area of science, and we were deeply saddened when Information
she and her family moved to Augusta, Maine. I can assure you
that if I had a teaching position open in science, I would hire Attributes of Person
her. She is creative, deeply conscientious, professional and Recommended
hard-working.
I strongly recommend her and am sure you will be more than Recommendation
satisfied with her performance in the classroom.
Sincerely,
Signature
Tom Maxwell
Principal
TJM:mer

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Business Letters for Busy People


Character Reference
Similar to the letter of recommendation, the character
reference refers only to the character of the person. You should
include your relationship with the person and how long you have
known her.
St. Johns-by-the-Lake Episcopal Church
298 Lakeshore Drive Brandenburg, MN 56315

May 29, 20XX
Klosterman Employment Agency
22 Linden Blvd.
Brandenburg, MN 56315

10 Dear Sir or Madam:
I am most pleased to write a character reference for JoAnn
Osterson.
I have known JoAnn since I first moved to Brandenburg,
when she was 3 years old. As rector of St. Johns-by-the-
Lake Episcopal Church, I have been able to watch JoAnn
mature into the fine young lady she is today. She is a tireless
worker, having given the most volunteer hours of any of our
young adults in the parish. She is always cheerful and
dependable.
I am sure that whoever hires her will find her to be a good
worker as well as a pleasant person. She is truly a gem.
Sincerely,
Signature
Louis R. Stanley
Rector
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Relationship to the Writer
Background Information

Attributes of Person Recommended


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Letter of Introduction
This letter introduces a person to a company or individual.
Letters of introduction are similar to references, quite often
describing the qualifications of the person to be introduced.

Campbell, Wilson and Sons
472 Captains Drive Boston, MA 02031
October 7, 20XX
R. H. Wing
333 B. Ave., E.
Lincoln, NE 68530
Dear R.H.:
I would like to introduce James N. Glandorf, who will be Introduction
moving to Lincoln in November. As a fellow Pi Kappa Request 10
Kappa, would you consider him for a position with your
firm?
Mr. Glandorf worked in our law office during this last year. Background of Person
He was given the assignment of divorce cases, which he Introduced and
handled extremely well, and was well on his way to Relationship to the
establishing himself as one of the best divorce lawyers I Writer
have ever seen. James was in line for a partnership here also but wanted to return to his native Nebraska, which I
understand, being a Midwesterner myself. I have enclosed a reference from each of our partners. Im sure youll find that all of us held James in the highest regard.
Please take time to read the references, and extend our Request
greetings to James when he arrives. I have promised him
nothing but am sure that you will help him in any way that Clarification
you would any other fellow Pi Kappa Kappa.
Sincerely,
Signature
George R. Campbell
Senior Partner
GRC:lpw
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Business Letters for Busy People


Progress Report
An evaluation or progress report is an essential
communication for anyones career. Keep an honest, positive tone that focuses on specifics.
August 30, 20XX
Chairperson
Academic Professional Development Committee
St. Paul School of Theology
5123 Truman Road
Kansas City, MO 64127
Dear Chairperson:



10

Recently, the Reverend Kendall Campbell, the registrar and financial Purpose
aid director at St. Paul, asked Mr. Lee Yoon Park to obtain a summary
of progress for his language studies this summer. I am delighted to Evaluation
report to you that he is an exceptional student who would have earned
an A in English had he opted for a grade and credit. I was fortunate to Relationship
be his instructor.
Mr. Park spent approximately 25 hours of intense conversation and Duration of Relationship
study of written English with me in June and July. This time was
significantly dwarfed by the vast hours of self-directed study he Character
completed between each of our meetings. This self-direction shows his
determination to overcome any language obstacles he may still Observations
experience.
During our meetings, I was amazed at Mr. Parks insight and humor.
His wit is a joy to experience and to learn from. He asks profound
questions, such as, What is your parenting philosophy? He shares his Korean heritage and history with those of us who ask. He reads
sophisticated literature including some I have not read yet! He
travels with his family and friends as often as he has the opportunity,
especially making trips to national parks throughout the United States. All of these activities testify to Mr. Parks value of learning. His ability to communicate increases regularly.
Mr. Parks ability to communicate goes far beyond his knowledge of
either American English or Korean his ability touches the center of Insight
our mutual humanity. Thank you for recognizing my friends promise
and for supporting his efforts. Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
Bree Biesner, M.A.



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Letters About Employment Changes


Rejection of Application
The only thing worse than writing a rejection letter is
receiving one. Everyone who applies for a position deserves
common courtesy. Be clear, yet gentle, in your approach. Give the bad news in the opening sentence and then go on to explain the cause. You may want to compliment the applicant.

WEST TELECOMMUNICATIONS
103 Randolph St.
Chicago, IL 60601

July 26, 20XX

Janna Hazelden, Senior Actuary
Waldron Hotels

278 Main Blvd.
El Paso, TX 79902

Dear Ms. Hazelden:

Thank you for giving us the opportunity to review your Thank You
qualifications for actuary.

Although we do not currently have an opening in our Rejection/Reason
accounting department, we are always looking for competent
people. May we keep your file active during the next 90 days Compliment
should any possibilities open up? We will notify you
immediately if a position becomes available. Request

In the meantime, good luck in your job search. I am sure that Goodwill
with your background you will find a suitable position soon. Personal Note

Sincerely,

Signature

Rod Finney
Personnel Director

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Business Letters for Busy People


Responses to Rejected Job Application
This letter is a follow-up to not being hired. It leaves the door open for a call if another opening occurs. The tone of the letter is friendly and professional.
2343 South 10th
Eugene, OR 97405
July 21, 20XX
Marcus Edwards, Personnel Director
Tachert & Hood Manufacturing
P.O. Box 8452
Eugene, OR 97405
10 Dear Mr. Edwards:

Thank you for considering me for the position of account Thank You
supervisor at Tachert & Hood. I understand that my
qualifications are not in line with your companys needs at the present time.
I am very impressed with your company. I believe that Goodwill
Tachert & Hood continues to be successful because of the
skill of your management in analyzing the direction of Request
market trends. I hope you will consider me again should
another employment opportunity compatible with my
experience become available.
If you wish to contact me, please call 555-3416. Contact
Thank you again for the opportunity to interview with Second Thank You
Tachert & Hood. (optional)
Sincerely,
Signature
Joyce Andrews


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Follow-Up After Not Getting the Job
This letter is a response to a previous one informing the reader a job has been filled. It is positive and leaves the door open for future contact with the company.
Janet E. Thompkins
2244 West Nassau Street
Aurora, CO 80013


October 21, 20XX


James Smith
Smith Engineering

P.O. Box 2955
Denver, CO 80206


Dear Mr. Smith:

I appreciate your promptness in writing that the director of Appreciation
human resources has been selected. The opportunity to
discuss the position and find out about your company was a
pleasure, as was meeting the staff. Thank you. Thank You

If, in the future, a position is open at Smith Engineering that Goodwill
would fit my goals, background and experience, please call
me. I am committed to this area and the human resource
field and, of course, am very interested in Smith
Engineering.

Sincerely,

Signature

Janet E. Thompkins

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Business Letters for Busy People


Rejection of an In-House Job Applicant
This letter turns down an employees request for a new job within the company.
Powell Glove Company
4709 South 110th Street
Omaha, Nebraska 68127
October 10, 20XX
John Holiday
304 Spruce St.
Omaha, NE 68128
Dear John:

10

Thank you for your interest in becoming part of Powells Goodwill
training and development department as an instructor. I agree Agreement
that everyone needs a change once in a while. However, though you have good production experience, this position requires in-depth knowledge of the training process.
Although you have been with Powell for five years, your Rejection
background and experience have not prepared you for this
particular position. Several applications have been received Reason
from people with training experience and even some with training experience in the manufacturing industry. The
company will fill the position from these applicants.
Unfortunately, you are not being selected for this position, Encouragement
but I am aware that you wish to continue to upgrade your
position with the company. I encourage you to do this, and
Im sure that we the company and you will find the
position that best matches your experience and background.
Again, I appreciate your interest and hard work in the Goodwill
company and wish you luck in all your future promotions.
Sincerely,
Signature
John Williams
President
JW:gd

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Letters About Employment Changes


Rejection of an Unsolicited Application
This letter is used to inform an applicant that there are no
positions available at the present time for which she is qualified.

First National Bank
223 Ames Casper, WY 82676


August 30, 20XX

Kelly Flanders
1795 Whisper Lane, #3
Casper, WY 82676


Dear Ms. Flanders:

Your qualifications are impressive. Unfortunately, we are not Compliment
presently hiring bank tellers. Rejection

As you may know, we recently went through a major Reason for Rejection
expansion. However, we have filled all of our bank teller
positions and do not foresee any change in staff in the near Added Service
future. We will, however, keep your application on file for
one year should something arise.

Thank you for your interest in First National. If you should Thank You
have any questions, please call me.

Sincerely,

Signature

Hiram Scott
Vice President, Human Resources

HMS:ald

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Business Letters for Busy People


Rejection of a Solicited Application
This letter is used to inform an applicant that the position for which she applied has been offered to someone else.
Morton Engineering
3457 Randall St. N.E. Armond, AR 72310


January 25, 20XX

K.J. Land
356 Denver
University of Nebraska
Lincoln, NE 68308
10 Dear Ms. Land:
Thank you for applying at Morton Engineering. I am sorry Thank You
that we are unable to offer you the position of electrical
engineer for which you recently interviewed. Rejection

We have selected another person who has the type of Reason for Rejection
experience we feel is necessary for the position. I enjoyed Goodwill
interviewing you and hope that you are successful in your employment search in the near future.

If you should have any questions, please call me. Contact Information

Sincerely,

Signature

Hanna Westcott
Personnel Director

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Invitation for an Interview
Arrange appointment specifications for easy, quick visual
access. This letter can set the tone for the actual interview.
HILL MULTI-MEDIA CORPORATION
301 E. Armour Blvd. Kansas City, MO 64111
March 5, 20XX
Kay E. Anders
7923 Noland Road
Lenexa, KS 66215-2528
Dear Ms. Anders:
Thank you for your application for the position of Acknowledgment
communications director. We are pleased to invite you to be
interviewed for the position. Your interview has been Request 10
scheduled as follows:
Date: March 17, 20XX Details
Time: 11:15 a.m.
Location: Conference Room A
Second Floor (Northeast)
Gillham Plaza Building
301 E. Armour Blvd.
Kansas City, MO 64111
Parking: Underground area off Gillham Road
You can expect to meet with the committee for 30 to 45 Expectations
minutes. If you have any questions, please contact me at
816-555-6889. Contact Information
Again, thank you for your interest in the position. Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
Carol J. Kennedy
Interim Director of Programs
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Job Offers
These letters are used to offer a position to a potential
employee and should be treated as a legal contract. Be clear that the
offer is formal and official. It should outline all of the essential
information the potential employee needs to make a decision. It is
fine to make the informal offer by telephone and then follow up at
once with a formal letter. Be sure to make the potential employee
feel welcome.
Morton Engineering
3457 Randall St. N.E. Armond, AR 72310
January 25, 20XX
J. Wallace Mercer
7898 Talleyho Lane

10

Lexington, KY 40329
Dear Mr. Mercer:
It is with great pleasure that I am able to offer you a position at Morton Engineering as an electrical engineer.
The position pays $35,000 annually, in equal increments every other Friday. Additionally, you will receive two weeks of paid vacation every 12 months, a bonus equaling two weeks salary payable the payday before Christmas, health benefits and $25,000 of life insurance. This position is a two-year agreement, after which it may be renegotiated. Either party may terminate with a two-week notice.
We are very pleased to offer you the position and are sure that you will make a superb addition to our firm. If you have any questions, please call me at any time.
Sincerely,
Signature
Hanna Westcott
Personnel Director
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Job Offer

Outline the Position






Welcome


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The specifics of the job offer are enclosed; the letter is upbeat and friendly.
Omega Corporation
P.O. Box 666 Phoenix, AZ 99065
March 2, 20XX
Jessica Carswell
3498 Grant
Overland Park, KS 66214
Dear Jessica:
I am pleased to offer you the position of public relations Job Offer
director at Omega Corporation. We all appreciate your fine
background and experience in the public relations field as Compliment
well as your interest in building up the public relations
department at Omega. Your selection by the committee and 10
board will enhance the fine professional team that sets the Details
direction for Omega Corporation.
I am enclosing in this letter the items we discussed in our Enclosures
last meeting, on February 23: the terms of employment and
your benefits as a member of our team. I have also added
specific information, brochures, etc., from each of our
medical insurance carriers so that you may consider your
insurance options.
John, I am personally very pleased that our discussions Goodwill
ended on such a positive note for both of us. Ill meet you Contact Information
in my office at 8:30 Tuesday morning, March 21, to make
sure that you get around to meet everyone.
Sincerely,
Signature
Robert C. Hanks
President

RCH:gk
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This letter affirms the readers employment and the writers choice of applicants.
Haven Home
P.O. Box 124 Memphis, TN 38124
September 15, 20XX
Kory Chandler
45 Main Drive
Memphis, TN 38118
Dear Kory:
We are pleased that your experience and education match Job Offer
our needs for a fund-raiser and program coordinator. Your Compliment
enthusiasm convinced the interview committee that you are the appropriate match for Haven Home.
10
Your vision for adding follow-up questionnaires to our first- Contribution
time clients is a dynamic idea. That effort will initiate many improvements in our service to family members
experiencing domestic violence. At the same time, the
questions will increase awareness of personal choices in our clients living with violence.
The transition and training schedule for your first week at Attachment
Haven Home is attached. Please review it for Monday
morning at 7:30.
If there is anything I can do to help make your transition Contact Information
more comfortable, please let me know. My voice-mail
number is 64. Ill check in with you later to see how your first day is going.
Welcome to our team! Welcome
Sincerely,
Signature
Anna Phelps
Executive Director
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Letters About Employment Changes


New Employee
This letter welcomes a new employee to a business.

Pinks Shears, Inc.
763 Kekke Dr. Hibbing, MN 21111

May 6, 20XX

Linda Jean Tremel
1205 Mickey Mouse Dr.
Orlando, FL 32078

Dear Ms. Tremel:

It is my distinct pleasure to welcome you to Pinks Shears, First Welcome
Inc. We are looking forward to your arrival on May 21. 10

We at Pinks are very proud of our complete line of pinking General
shears and know that you will take the same pride in your Comments
work as we do in ours. Your role as sales director will be an
important one. We know that your education and experience Specific Position
will bring to Pinks a much-needed momentum.

Once again, welcome to Pinks. If there is any way I can Second Welcome
help you make the transition, let me know.

Sincerely,

Signature

Harold Pinky Pinkham
President

HJP:cpa





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Business Letters for Busy People


Promotion Congratulations
This letter congratulates an employee or business associate on her promotion.
Cadrells
290 26th Ave. Winston, GA 30067


August 8, 20XX

T. Molly Rathburn
8944 Tripp
Winston, GA 30067

Dear Molly:
10
I would like to congratulate you on your recent promotion to First Congratulations
assistant plant supervisor. You must be proud of your
accomplishments.

Because of your hard work and dedication, you deserve this General Statement
promotion. Employees like you help Cadrells keep ahead of (optional)
the competition and lead the way in the field of dental
equipment. Your efforts are appreciated.

Congratulations again. Welcome to the management team Second
at Cadrells. Congratulations

Sincerely yours,

Signature

J.K. Cadrell, Jr.
President

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Letters About Employment Changes


Announcing a Promotion Personal
This letter announces the promotion of an employee.
Nacogdoches Notebooks
277 Linden Nacogdoches, TX 75963

August 1, 20XX

Truc Phan
3009 Clipclop Lane
Nacogdoches, TX 75963

Dear Mr. Phan:

We are pleased to offer you the promotion to vice president Announcement
in charge of sales. 10
Nacogdoches Notebooks is promoting you because of your Reason
outstanding and untiring commitment to your work.
Nacogdoches Notebooks has grown substantially because of
your efforts.

Please see Ray Norton on Monday. He will show you your Instructions
new office and begin your orientation.

Congratulations. We are proud to have you associated with Congratulations
our company.

Sincerely,

Signature

Susanna M. Graham
President

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Announcing a Promotion Internal
This memo announces the promotion of an employee to other
members of the firm. In certain circumstances a letter may be
used, also.

MEMORANDUM

Date: August 5, 20XX
To: All Employees
From: Susanna Graham, President
Re: Promotion to Vice President/Sales

We are pleased to announce the promotion of Truc Phan to Announcement
vice president in charge of sales.
10 In the past 12 months, Mr. Phan has consistently provided Reason
outstanding service to his clients, brought in several new
accounts and demonstrated outstanding sales leadership.
Nacogdoches Notebooks has grown substantially because of Mr. Phans work. He will assume his new position on
August 10 and will be located in Suite 25.

Please join me in congratulating Mr. Phan on his new Congratulations
position.

















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Letters About Employment Changes


Acceptance of Resignation
Always accept a resignation with dignity. Allow the letter to reflect your personal investment in the relationship. This letter
shows that a friendship exists. If that is not your situation, omit the personal comments.
Merl Garrett, Supervisor of Nurses
University Medical Center
5000 University Parkway
Laguna Heights, CA 92677
May 12, 20XX
Sherri Lu, Senior Floor Nurse
University Medical Center
5020 University Parkway

Laguna Heights, CA 92677
Dear Sherri:
We regret you must leave and reluctantly accept your Regret
resignation as senior floor nurse beginning June 1, 20XX. Acceptance
We do, however, understand that personal medical concerns Reason
demand your attention now.
Your contributions to University Medical Center will remain Contributions
after your departure: better ation, better patient
service and improved staff morale. Thank you for your hard Thank You
work in every aspect of your job. Your dedication to us
shows in your willingness to help train your replacement. We
have always been able to count on you.
We wish you the best of health. I will miss you immensely. Goodwill
Please stay in touch. Personal Note
Sincerely,
Signature
Merl

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Business Letters for Busy People


Recommending a Raise
This letter recommends giving a raise before the first years
anniversary. It includes the reasons supporting the request.
Aaron Computer Mapping
1472 Marquette Avenue
Montgomery, AL 36044
October 5, 20XX
William Aaron, President
Aaron Computer Mapping
1472 Marquette Avenue
Montgomery, AL 36044


10


Dear Bill:

I recommend that we offer Matthew Martin, a draftsman in our city planning section, a raise of $l,500 per year effective November 1. This would bring his annual salary up to
$19,500.

I am highly satisfied with the quality of work he produces and his commitment to Aaron Computer Mapping. He is a very conscientious employee, finishing tasks in an accurate and timely manner. He is aware of our reputation of
excellence in the computer mapping field and maintains that degree of excellence in his work.
Although Matthew has been with our company only six
months, I am recommending that his salary be increased and
that his annual salary review take place one year from this
month. He has been a great asset to Aaron Computer
Mapping and should be rewarded for his outstanding work.

Sincerely,

Signature

Pat Norris




Recommendation




Reasons
(specific)


Recommendation Reason


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Rejection of Unsolicited Business
This letter withdraws quotes that have already been given.
MERION INSURANCE
7542 Warner Place
Chicago, IL 60603

May 10, 20XX

Lisa Reiters
Managed Care Insurance Marketing Corporation
P.O. Box 1051
Los Angeles, CA 90052

RE: 1933 Sterling Silverware
10
Dear Lisa:

As we discussed today, Merion is withdrawing the quotes Statement of Reason
that I sent you on this case. In reviewing the information that
was supplied, we dont feel this would be a good risk for
Merion.

Im sorry this couldnt be a more favorable response, but I Goodwill
look forward to working with you at another time.

Sincerely,

Signature
Joyce Cole
Supervisor

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Request for Material
In giving instructions, this letter states clearly what is needed as well as what is not needed.
James Insurance
P.O. Box 245 Eugene, OR 97405
March 16, 20XX
Robert James
P.O. Box 9822
Des Moines, IA 50306-9822
Dear Robert:



10

This is to confirm our telephone conversation regarding claims
reporting and updating. As I indicated on Wednesday, I am
receiving too much paper from you. I do not want hospital records,
doctors handwritten notes or copies of pleadings other than the
complaint.
I do need the following:
1. A completed first report
2. Your report of claim
3. Defense counsels initial analysis of liability
and quantum
4. The most current narrative medical report that best
describes the claimants history, diagnosis and prognosis
Also, if the defense counsels assessment of the case changes, I must have notification of that as well.
If I need other information, the burden will be on me to request it. I hope this letter will serve to clarify exactly what I need regarding insurance reporting.
Thank you for your cooperation.
Sincerely,
Signature
George L. Sherman, J.D.
Assistant Secretary
GLS:db

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Instructions









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Request for Information
This letter requests information.

Rinehart Consulting Engineers
San Jose, CA 95117
May 10, 20XX
Mr. Richard Webly
Lodge of the Good Seasons
611 South Michigan
Chicago, IL 60603
Dear Mr. Webly:
Rinehart Consulting is interested in holding its annual team- Reason
building staff meeting in Chicago the weekend of October 10
10, 20XX.
We are planning on attendance of 12 staff members who Details
would arrive in time for dinner on Friday, October 9. We
need a breakfast buffet for Saturday and Sunday, October 10 and 11, and a buffet lunch and sit-down dinner on Saturday. Twenty-five people will be at each meal. The meeting room for Saturday should accommodate 12-15 people.
Please send price information for 12 double rooms, meals Request
and meeting room with overhead, screen and flip chart to my
attention at the above address. I would also appreciate any
information you have on tourist attractions in Chicago.
Sincerely,
Signature
Thomas A. Wood
President
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Confirmation to Speaker
This letter confirms speaking arrangements that have been discussed earlier.
Clerks Unlimited
P.O. Box 245 Eugene, OR 97405
May 9, 20XX
Thomas A. Smith
P.O. Box 1234
Valparaiso, IN 46383

Dear Mr. Smith:

Thank you for agreeing to speak at our Professional Details
10 Proofreaders April meeting. As we discussed Tuesday (specific)
morning, the group meets the third Thursday of each month
at 6:30 p.m. at the Westport Grill. I hope you will be able to
join the group for dinner before you speak at 7:30 p.m.

We are looking forward to you sharing some of the tips and Information
techniques you use as well as answering some grammar (general)
questions for us.

There will be an overhead projector and screen as you Details
requested. Please plan on speaking about 30 minutes, and (specific)
then allow 15 to 20 minutes more to answer questions from the group.

Mr. Smith, if you have any questions or need more Contact Information
information, please contact me at 555-3498.

Sincerely,

Signature

Ida Johns
Program Coordinator


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Giving Information
This memo informs employees of a change in the company
medical insurance plan and gives information and a contact for
information.

MEMORANDUM

Date: September 18, 20XX
To: All Employees
From: Martha Landers, Office Manager
Re: Change in Health Insurance Provider

Beginning October 1, First Coverage will be the health
insurance provider for our employees. Information
Although few changes will occur as a result of our switching 10
health insurance coverage, you should note that First Details
Coverage designates certain medical professionals as
preferred providers. These individuals have agreed to
accept predetermined fees for certain services. While our
employees are free to choose their health-care provider, fees
will generally be lower when using preferred providers. This
will result in lower costs to you on services not covered in
our policy or performed before individual deductions are
met.

Detailed insurance information will be distributed to all Contact Information
employees when our new policy becomes effective
October l. In the meantime, if you have any questions
regarding this change, please contact me at ext. 432.










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Business Letters for Busy People


Discontinuing Business Relationships
This letter expresses appreciation for good work, but at the same time informs the reader that the job is ending.


Valley View Shops
P.O. Box 5310
Aurora, CO 80013
June 1, 20XX
Sharon Young
Right On! Writing
P.O. Box 6864
Boulder, CO 80322
10 Dear Sharon:
Enclosed is a summary of the team-building workshop Thank You
evaluations. We are very pleased with the results and feel
you met our expectations extremely well. Thank you for
tailoring the course with our materials in order to meet our
objectives.
Even with all the good feedback, however, the money we Negative News
need in order to schedule additional workshops with you is
not available. Hopefully next year will be another story, and Future Option
the two of us can plan more skill-development workshops for the secretaries.
Again, it was a pleasure working with you. I am enclosing a Goodwill
to whom it may concern reference that states how highly we regard your work.
Sincerely,
Signature
Bernice Kendrick
Supervisor, Purchasing Services
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Managing Your Time for Yourself! Workshops
Plaza Parkway Building
P.O. Box 5130
Salem, OR 97304
May 31, 20XX
Joyce Roland
Training and Development
Perry Stores
P.O. Box 312
Salem, OR 97304
10
Dear Joyce:
Thank you for letting me know this far in advance that you Thank You
will not be scheduling additional workshops in Managing Goodwill
Your Time for Yourself!
I have enjoyed my work with the groups from Perry Stores General Comments
and feel the workshops were productive for your staff.
Perhaps there will be an opportunity in the future to plan a Specific Follow-Up
workshop with you on another aspect of skill development:
telephone techniques, getting organized or presentational
speaking. Ill call you next quarter.
In the meantime, all the best to you and Susan. Thank you Personal Note
again! Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
Barbara Dennis





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Business Letters for Busy People


Rejecting a Request
This letter turns down a request, but it begins and ends on a positive note.
General Corporation
253 West 12th Street
Somerset, NJ 08873

February 25, 20XX

Robert P. Thomas
General Corporation District IV
P.O. Box 6425
Raleigh, NC 27628
10 Robert:

Thank you for the good work you did in preparing your Thank You
districts 20XX budget. You supplied all the information I
needed to make decisions regarding which equipment will be
replaced this year.

I agree with you that three-fourths of all your road Agreement
equipment should be replaced. However, we are not able to Negative News
do it this year; the best I can promise is a new mixer and
spreader.

Hopefully next year the company will be able to replace Option
more of your equipment. The budget dollars should be Goodwill
similar. Let me know if I can do anything to help keep your equipment operating efficiently for one more year.


Harry King






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Letters About Employment Changes


Introducing a New Employee
This introduces a new staff member to the department.

MEMORANDUM


TO: Department Staff
FROM: Janice

Please welcome Susan James to ABCs marketing Purpose
department. Susan will begin working with us on April 14 as Details
staff assistant to Bill Baker replacing Marge Williams.

Susan has been with ABC for three years, greeting everyone Request
from behind the front reception desk. Please help Susan by 10
answering any questions she may have about the work in our
department.


Janice T.





















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Checklist
Did you use a positive tone?
Does the letter specify the terms of employment?
Does the letter request specific information?
Did you summarize, thank or restate in the last part of
the letter?
If you received the letter, would you know what to do?
Does your letter show respect for confidentiality?
Is your letter personal and courteous?
















HAPTER 11


Customer Relations Letters








Letters that improve or maintain good customer relations
sell a companys image. The broad categories are as follows:
General Appreciation
Acknowledging a Complaint 11
Following Up on a Complaint
Regaining a Customers Confidence
Acknowledging a Complaint Disclaiming
Responsibility
Acknowledging a Complaint Explaining
a Misunderstanding
Correcting an Error
General Apology
Acknowledging an Order Back Order
Acknowledging an Order Explaining
Shipment Procedures
Apologizing for an Employees Action
Notifying Customers of a Move
Holiday Greetings
Notification of Complaints


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At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of
each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section of the
letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the basic format.
Step-by-Step Guide
These letters are designed to improve or maintain customer
relations. The maxim that the customer is always right should be
kept in mind while writing these letters. At times, however, you
may have to let the customer think he is right while you are
proving him wrong!
Step 1: The first part of the letter states your purpose. This
may be anything from acknowledging a complaint to
notifying a customer of a move.
Step 2: The second part of the letter explains the purpose. If
the first part acknowledges a complaint, then the
second part explains what you are going to do about
11 it. If the first part announces a new address to valued
customers, then the second part gives the details about the new locations conveniences.
Step 3: The last part is the sugar to leave a good taste in the
customers mouth. It summarizes the letter, thanks the
customer and reiterates the customers value to your
organization.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
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Customer Relations Letters


General Appreciation
This letter is used to show appreciation for your customers. It may be used as a sales and promotional letter or a thank you for continued patronage.

Zebra Prints Letterhead
224 Bever Ave. Madrid, MS 39378
January 12, 20XX Date
Lillian R. Wilkinson Inside Address
4500 Ramble Road Lane
Madrid, MS 39379
Dear Ms. Wilkinson: Salutation
On behalf of Zebra Prints, we wish to express our sincerest Statement of Purpose
appreciation for your continued patronage. It is because of
valued customers like you that we are able to continue to Compliment 11
offer you the finest in fabrics.
Zebra Prints has been in business for 75 years. We are Elaboration
dedicated to bringing you the finest in fabrics, particularly
those of all-natural materials. Mr. Case, our founding father,
loved to say, The customer wants the best at the lowest
price, and that is the motto we use as our guiding principle.
Please stop in and see us soon. Our new spring fabrics will Summary
be in the showroom on March 15. If you bring this letter
with you, we will give you a 15 percent discount on any Benefit
fabric you purchase in March.
Sincerely yours, Complimentary Close
Signature Signature
Terrance Sullivan Case, Jr. Typed Name
President
Additional
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Acknowledging a Complaint
This letter is used to acknowledge a complaint and offer a solution to the problem.

Tiny Toes Dance Studio
33 Barbara Dr. Butte, MT 59777
September 2, 20XX
Mickey Wu
790 7th St.
Butte, MT 59777
Dear Mr. Wu:
Thank you for your letter of August 30 discussing our policy Acknowledgment
concerning payment for missed classes. of Complaint
11 I have checked with our owner, Ms. Timberlane, for a Solution
clarification. In the past, our policy was that missed classes would still need to be paid for. Under the circumstances, however, she said that you will not have to pay for the
classes your daughter missed because of her unfortunate accident on the way to class.
We hope this is a satisfactory solution for you and wish your Summary
daughter, Jasmine, a speedy recovery. We shall put a hold on
your account until she is ready to return to her tap lessons.
Thank you once again for your concern. Thank You
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Mary Manson
Business Manager
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Following Up on a Complaint
Once a complaint is logged and your company has resolved it, send a follow-up letter as an extra effort toward redeeming your reputation for good service. Here is an example.
McGiven Publishing Company
29 New York Ave.
New York, NY 10022

May 21, 20XX

Steve Laing
444 Madison St.
Livingston, NJ 07039

Dear Mr. Laing:


Our service goal is to fill your orders accurately 100 percent Goal
of the time. However, when we fall short and errors occur, Acknowledgment
its frustrating for everyone. of Error

Im sorry you had a problem with your recent order, and I Apology
hope the situation has been resolved to your satisfaction. If Goodwill
there is anything else we can do for you, please call us Assistance Offer
toll-free at 800-555-5225 Monday through Friday between Contact Information
7 a.m. and 4 p.m. Eastern time.

Thanks for your patience and understanding. Thanks

Sincerely,

Signature

Peg Mahr
Customer Service Manager

PM:hs

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Regaining a Customers Confidence
The key to regaining a customers confidence is to respond
promptly to a customers complaint, whether the problem has been
corrected yet or not. Always maintain professionalism when
referring to the responsibility for the problem never assign
individual blame. Instead, report a positive action being taken to
avoid future problems.
Begin by acknowledging the problem specifically. Report
what will be or is being done to correct the problem. Then, assure the customer or client that his business is appreciated and you are still interested in continuing the relationship.
Modern Medical Supplies
302 Main Portland, OR 97272
November 23, 20XX
Dr. Laura Schmitt

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1520 Barston Blvd.
Sacramento, CA 95808
Dear Dr. Schmitt:
Please accept our sincerest apologies for the recent mix-up with the Statement of
shipment of tongue depressors. I can assure you that action has been Purpose
taken to remedy the problem in our warehouse.
As a token of good faith, we have deducted 15 percent from your bill. Regaining of
We hope this will help compensate for any inconvenience this problem Confidence
caused. Because of this unfortunate situation, we have discovered a
number of errors with our shipping department. Consequently, we have
brought in a new person to head this department. We are confident that Result
our new shipping clerk will keep things running smoothly for you and
all of our customers. Thank you for bringing the error to our attention. Thank You
We hope this will be a satisfactory solution. Your corrected order of Summary of Order
tongue depressors should be arriving shortly, as they were sent Information
November 22.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Graham Johnson
Customer Relations
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Acknowledging a Complaint Disclaiming Responsibility
This letter acknowledges a customers complaint in order to
maintain good relations; however, it refers the customer to another source that is responsible for the problem.
Peoria Pet Foods
3005 Lincolnway Peoria, IL 61635
March 30, 20XX
Mary Louise Jones
Paws R Us
8900 Waconia
Joliet, IL 60434
Dear Ms. Jones:
Thank you for bringing the problem of late deliveries to our Acknowledgment
attention. Im sure they must be most aggravating. of Complaint 11
As much as we would like to help you, the problem lies with Disclaimer of
the trucking firm. We have contacted them concerning the Responsibility
late deliveries and are reviewing our use of Nelson Trucking
as our carrier. At present, we have no contract with them but Action Taken
shall be demanding a contract so that we have leverage in Result
such matters. I suggest that you contact them, also, to
emphasize the seriousness of the situation. Suggestion
Im sorry I cant help you any more than this, but I can Apology
assure you that we are trying to remedy the situation as
quickly as we can. Unfortunately, an immediate solution is
dependent upon Nelson Trucking. Thank you once again for Thank You
your understanding.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Lucy McAlister
Customer Relations
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Acknowledging a Complaint
Explaining a Misunderstanding
Acknowledge a customers complaint in order to maintain good relations by explaining a misunderstanding between the customer and the business.
RTM, Inc.
P.O. Box 2089 Milwaukee, WI 53219
January 16, 20XX
Thomas R. Linder
Bottlers Distributors
7035 Wacker
Milwaukee, WI 53227
Dear Mr. Linder:
11 I appreciate you bringing to my attention the problem of our Acknowledgment
Colden Beer and its introductory flyer. I understand your of Complaint
confusion perfectly.
When we sent you the letter introducing our new beer, our Explain
marketing department mistakenly sent a mock-up of an ad Misunderstanding
for Eagles Wings Ale. Naturally, you would be confused
because we were referring to the blue eagle on Colden Beer
while giving you the bald eagle label of Eagles Wings Ale.
We are most sorry for this error and have enclosed a Apology
corrected flyer.
I hope this letter and the enclosed corrected flyer clear up Thank You
this unfortunate misunderstanding. Thank you once again for bringing this to my attention.
Sincerely,
Signature
R. Edwards Rands
Public Relations Director
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Customer Relations Letters


Correcting an Error
Correct an error that either the customer or the business
caught.
Capital Credit Union
890 Minnesota Ave. Washington, D.C. 20041

April 24, 20XX

Mr. and Mrs. John Gallup
3256 Mozart Dr.
Silver Spring, MD 20743

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Gallup:

After our recent auditing, we discovered an underpayment Statement of Error
to your account of $53.23 in interest.
11
The error occurred in the transferring of funds in March Explanation
from your High-Fi account to your regular savings account.
We have corrected your savings account and credited you Correction
with $53.23.

I hope this is satisfactory, and I apologize for any confusion Apology
this error caused. Thank you for your continued patronage. Thank You

Sincerely,

Signature

Molly Butters
Vice President, Accounting

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General Apology
This letter is used to apologize to customers.

Merkers Department Store
1115 Brandon New Ulm, MN 56053

July 22, 20XX

Kim Langworth
R.R. 1
Red Earth, MN 56670

Dear Ms. Langworth:

We at Merkers would like to extend our sincerest apologies Apology
and ask for your understanding.
11 Our recent sales brochure made claims that we could not Explanation
follow through on. Not all merchandise in the Summer Saver
Sale was on sale at 50 percent off. The printer inadvertently
left out the important word selected. Because of this Decision
glaring error, we have decided to postpone our sale and
reschedule it for another time. By postponing the sale, we Benefit
will be able to offer you even better bargains than we had originally planned.

Thank you for your understanding in this embarrassing Thank You
situation.

Sincerely,

Signature

R. Merker
Chairman of the Board

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Acknowledging an Order Back Order
This letter is used to acknowledge that a customers order has
been received but that it is back-ordered, thus causing a delay.
Todmann Nuts and Bolts
P.O. Box 3445 Idaho Falls, ID 83406
June 3, 20XX
Timothy R. Johnson, Purchasing
Sheppard Hardware Distributors
P.O. Box 1078
Kansas City, MO 64109-1078
Dear Mr. Johnson:
We were pleased to receive your order for 10,000 quarter- Acknowledgment
inch nuts, part number XK22345JM. However, we are of Order
unable at this time to fulfill the order. 11
Our present inventory has been depleted, and that nut is now Explanation
on back order until mid-July. Our supplier of raw materials is
unable to supply the materials until July 1, thus pushing us
back to mid-July for possible delivery. We have tried without
success to find an alternate source of raw materials. If you
like, we could substitute part number XK22346JM. It is a Alternative
penny higher in price per unit. Otherwise, we will keep your (optional)
order and rush it to you as soon as we can start production on
these nuts again. Please let us know your preference this
week.
Thank you for your understanding in this matter. We Thank You
apologize for your inconvenience. Apology
Sincerely,
Signature
Cass Walker
Production Head
CBWst
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Acknowledging an Order
Explaining Shipment Procedures
Explain a shipping procedure to a customer while acknowledging that an order has been received.
Raging Bull Farms
R.R. 2 Kingman, OK 73439
August 13, 20XX
Natalie Gorman
Cherokee Crafts
900 E. Main
Tulsa, OK 74102
Dear Ms. Gorman:
11 Thank you for your order of 25 authentic Cherokee head- Acknowledgment
dresses on August 11, 20XX. We will be sending those of Order
immediately.
Because of the fragile nature of our headdresses, we hand Explanation
deliver to our customers within Oklahoma. Our delivery day
for Tulsa is Friday, which means that your headdresses will Action Plan
arrive this coming Friday, August 17. If this is unsatisfactory,
please call us so that we can arrange an alternative delivery Alternative Plan
date.
Thank you for your business. Im sure you will be most Thank You
pleased with our headdresses, and we look forward to working with you in the future.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Tamara Whitewater
TJW:zmd

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Apologizing for an Employees Action
Apologize for the action of one of your employees who has damaged customer relations.
Refrain from naming the employee and, if possible, explain the alternative plan you have chosen for the employee. Unless there are chronic problems, it is in the companys best interest to illustrate compassion for its clients and employees.

Belles Phone Store
Windale Mall
8855 Outer Dr. Waukegan, IL 60079
November 3, 20XX
Travis C. Schultz
5554 Rocky Shore Dr.
North Waukegan, IL 60079

Dear Mr. Schultz:
I wish to personally apologize for your unfortunate treatment Apology
by one of our employees last Friday. His actions toward you
were totally inappropriate.
Because of this situation, the employee has been placed in a Action Taken
position working directly with our inventory, having less (optional)
contact with customers. We would also like to offer you a
$50 gift certificate for merchandise at our store. We value Goal of Customer
our customers and hope this token will help compensate for Satisfaction
the embarrassment you felt. We are increasing our training in
customer relations for all of our employees to avoid just such Result
a problem occurring again.
Thank you for your business and your understanding. We Thank You
hope this is a satisfactory solution to the problem.
Sincerely yours,
Signature
Belle June Maples
BJM:kio

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Notifying Customers of a Move
Notify customers of a move and assure them that the move
either will not affect them or will be advantageous to them.
Marco Paper Clips
P.O. Box 22 Marquette, MI 49855
May 4, 20XX
K.J. Wasserman
City Business Supply
763 C. St. S.W.
Columbia, MO 65205
Dear Mr. Wasserman:



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On July 1, 20XX, Marco Paper Clips will be moving to
Des Moines, Iowa. This move should greatly benefit your company.
We are excited about the move to Des Moines. Our move will help you receive shipments more quickly. It will also reduce the cost of shipping to Marco, and we can pass those savings on to you. Des Moines larger labor market also allows us to expand our facilities and product line. We feel this will definitely benefit our customers.
Please feel free to contact us if you have any concerns. Our new address in Des Moines will be: Marco Paper Clips, 3567 Grandview, Des Moines, IA 54421. Our toll-free number will be 800-BUY-CLIP.
Sincerely,
Signature
G. Antonio Marco
President
GAM:etv

Announcement


Elaboration

Benefits


Summary
Contact Information





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Holiday Greetings
This letter is used to send holiday greetings to your customers. It is preferable to use personal stationery or a notecard especially designed for the situation.
Flatt Tire Co.
223 Nueva Matica Santa Cruz, CA 95066

December 5, 20XX

Dear Mr. Brown:

Flatt Tire Co. would like to wish you and your employees Greetings
the very best this holiday season. We hope that your
establishment has been blessed with exceptional customers,
as we have.

We are most fortunate to have customers like Glendale Elaboration 11
Amoco and hope that, during this coming new year, we can (optional)
continue our relationship. We know our prosperity depends
on our customers.

Thank you for helping make Flatt Tire Co. one of the leaders Thank You
in Southern California. Our fondest regards for all of you at Goodwill
Glendale Amoco.

Happy Holidays,

Signature
Rhonda J. Flatt
President








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Notification of Complaints
This letter asks for a solution to a complaint of faulty
merchandise but ends on a business-as-usual note to maintain the professional contact.
PAMS PARTY GIFTS
P.O. Box 8473
Torrance, CA 90502
April 18, 20XX
Delta Novelty Company
3217 SW 31st St.
Topeka, KS 66614
SUBJECT: REQUEST FOR CREDIT IN ACCOUNT
The case of Hippity Holiday Bunnies that I purchased from Reason
11 your company do not hop. I am, therefore, returning them to Request
you and requesting that you credit my account for the (specific)
amount charged plus shipping.
The Hippity Holiday Bunnies that arrived at my store had Details
faulty mechanisms which caused them to fall over instead of
hop as promised in your sales brochure. Because I plan
on selling off my line of seasonal items within the next three
weeks, I wish my account to be issued a credit instead of you
replacing the faulty merchandise. Please find enclosed the Enclosure
copies of your invoice, #1342, in the amount of $36 and my invoice for shipping charges of $2.95.
Your quality products have always sold well in my store, and Agreement
I look forward to seeing your new line of fall items as soon
as they are available. In the meantime, your prompt attention Request
to this matter is appreciated. (general)
Martha Sacks
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In this letter, the writer assumes part of the responsibility, but states clearly what is expected in the future.

7136 Dartmouth Ave. (2E)
St. Louis, MO 63130-3008
May 28, 20XX
Brad Smith
Ralphs Restaurant
22nd & Market
St. Louis, MO 63103
Dear Mr. Smith:
I am writing because of my disappointment with the choice Purpose
of dessert served to the League of Successful Professionals
at our dinner meeting May 23. I do not believe that popsicles
are an appropriate dessert at a business gathering such as
ours. 11
The quality of the food and service at our meetings is Agreement
generally very good. This is the reason we continue to use
your facilities, and why I was surprised by the dessert. I may
not have been specific enough when we reviewed the menu.
Though we discussed in detail the items to be included on Responsibility
the dinner buffet, dessert was simply defined in our contract (shared)
as a frozen ice cream item to be served individually. I should have been more detailed in my request.

Please see that I am given a specific menu for our July Request
meeting by June 25 so that I may review it before signing the service contract. This will help avoid any future
misunderstandings.
Sincerely,
Signature
Katherine Taylor


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This letter requests a solution to the complaint. The letter backs up the request with ation of the problem and a specific date for it to be resolved.
A-1 Merchandise Supply Company
P.O. Box 1276
Grandview, MO 64030
May 11, 20XX
Taylor Jackson
Jackson Roofing Contractors
P.O. Box 5692
Grandview, MO 64031
RE: Roof repair, invoice #1724, March 11, 20XX Dear Mr. Jackson:


11

The roof, which you repaired in March, continues to leak Reason
along the south wall of our overstock merchandise storage Request
area. Please repair the roof by June 1, 20XX, without charge, as stated in your two-year guarantee.
Bill Wagstone, a repairman with your company, has Details
examined the roof and informed me that the new seals
placed between the roof and the surrounding brick walls
were not properly installed. Mr. Wagstone has advised me
that the roof will continue to leak until this problem is
corrected.
Fortunately, before the last storm, we were able to move the Details
merchandise out of the area before any damage was done.
My company cannot afford the loss of this storage space,
however, so all additional repairs must be completed by
June l.
Please contact me the week of May 25 so that I will know Request
when to expect your roofers.
Sincerely,
Signature
Anne Smith
President


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This letter asks a shopkeeper to act on the request of neighbors.

The Itty Bitty Shoppe
1934 Longan Bartlesville, OK 74006

February 15, 20XX

Patricia Wolfe
1936 Longan
Bartlesville, OK 74006

Dear Ms. Wolfe:

The cold weather season approaches, and I would like to Introduction
inform you that all shopkeepers are expected to keep the
walk in front of their stores free of snow. Five other
merchants, myself included, have had a problem with your
lack of responsibility in this matter. It inconveniences 11
customers and merchants alike.

Please help us keep the walk free of snow during the winter Request
months by clearing off the area in front of your store.

Until now, we have taken care of our own space and Background
when a neighbor needed help, we all pitched in. This year we
are reminding you before the shovels are all sold and the Reason
salt is all used that everyone is expected to keep the
sidewalk in front of his or her store free of snow and ice.
This is not only for ease of walking, but also for safety.

Thanks from your neighbors and the customers who come Goodwill
by on snow days!

Signature

Janice Smith/The Itty Bitty Shoppe



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This letter notifies a business of a complaint.
JRD, Inc.
P.O. Box 6864
Mission, Kansas 66202
December 12, 20XX
Mr. Anton Drissler, General Manager
Scripps
4732 Pennslyvania
Kansas City, MO 64112
Dear Mr. Drissler:
I am writing about the facilities, food and service at the holiday dinner Reason
that JRD Corporation gave for its employees on Tuesday evening, December 11, at Scripps.
First, Ballroom B was much too cold for comfortable dining, with Negatives
several very strong drafts along the west wall. Audio systems at
parties in Ballrooms A and C were loud and distracting for our
11 entertainers as well as our guests.
Second, the food service was extremely poor we had contracted for Specific
dinner at 6:30 p.m., and the first guests were not served until 8 p.m. Details
The main course was cold; our ice cream dessert was melted.
Third, there was no one available from Sales and Catering to offer
help, and those we talked to at the front desk were not responsible.
In order to repair the situation, please reduce our room rent and food Solution
bill by one-half; I have enclosed our agreement with the original total.
And please, always have a representative from Sales and Catering in
attendance at any future function hosted by JRD at Scripps.
For over 10 years, JRD has hosted many occasions in your hotel. In Appreciation of
light of our long professional association, I appreciate your resolution Resolution
of this matter.
Sincerely,
Signature
Janet Coen
for Thomas W. Smith, President




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This letter gives notification of a claim for damages made during an office move.
TIMBER Manufacturing
P.O. Box 5557
Atlanta, GA 30329
April 29, 20XX
Mr. Richard Lyons, President
Great Movers
P.O. Box 5748
Atlanta, GA 30327
Dear Mr. Lyons:

This is to notify you of our claim for damaged goods against Great Purpose
Movers. On April 27, Timber Manufacturing moved its office from Details
12224 Grand to 22455 McGee. The order number with Great
Movers was #89648.
As the furniture was unloaded and placed in the new office, I Reasons
discovered a 12-inch scratch along the front of an enameled
cabinet (picture enclosed). I plan on having the damage to this Decision
expensive piece repaired immediately and have enclosed five cost
estimates for the work. All are rather close in price, but I prefer
using Addisons as they have done repairs for me in the past and
guarantee their work. Addisons estimate to repair the enameled
cabinet is $750.
My contract with you covers loss or damage to $1,000. Please send Solution
your check for repairing the damage ($750) to:
Donald J. Bilyeu
President
Timber Manufacturing
P.O. Box 5557
Atlanta, GA 30329
Sincerely,
Signature
Donald J. Bilyeu
DJB:efk
Enc.





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Checklist
Did you use a positive tone?
Does the letter make the customer feel like he is valuable?
Did you introduce the topic of the letter in the first part?
Did you include all of the necessary details for the
customer?
Did you include a telephone number, if appropriate, so the
client can reach you?
Did you offer a solution to the problem?
Did you take the initiative in the letter for the action
you desire?
Did you include all background information or details
necessary in the second part of the letter so the client
understands the letter?
Did you summarize, thank or apologize again in the last
part of the letter?
If you received the letter, how would you feel?
















HAPTER 12


Media Letters








Here are samples to help you write letters to the media (newspapers, television stations, magazines). The broad categories are as follows:
Media Event Letter Sales Campaign Kickoff
Media Event Letter Recently Published Book
Media Event Letter Anniversary 12
Press Release Anniversary
Press Release Speaking Engagement
Press Release Promotion
Press Release New Employee
Response to Editorial Positive
Response to Editorial Negative
Letter Asking to Make a Speech
Letter Asking for a Correction
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation
of each part of the letter. The first letter identifies each section
of the letter. Subsequent letters identify only changes to the
basic format.




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Step-by-Step Guide
Media letters are used in business as a way to get the publics attention. Media exposure is free advertising, and the smart
businessperson uses it to sell her business and its services or
products. The letter in and of itself is a sales tool.
Step 1: The first part of the letter or press release states your
purpose. This may be anything from announcing a
new employee to responding to an editorial.
Step 2: The second part of the letter or press release explains
the first part by giving details and examples about the
first part. This part should include all pertinent
information concerning the event or situation. If, for
example, you are announcing a new employee, you
would give the details about the employee in the
second part. Always answer who, what, when, where,
why and, if appropriate, how, in this section.
Step 3: The last part of the letter acts as a summary,
reminding the recipient of the general nature of the

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letter. It may also be used as a thank you.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write a media letter.



Media Letters


Media Event Letter Sales Campaign Kickoff
Alert the media to a sales campaign kickoff and invite the media to cover the event.
Capital Crystal Letterhead
449 Worthington Charleston, WV 25009
March 2, 20XX Date
Todd Phillips, Station Manager Inside Address
KOAL
2525 Kanawah
Charleston, WV 25009
Dear Mr. Phillips: Salutation
On March 25, Capital Crystal will announce the winner of Announcement
our How Many Goblets in a Dump Truck contest. We will
do so at noon in front of our business at 449 Worthington.
Our How Many Goblets in a Dump Truck contest has been Explanation
going on now for approximately three months, and one of 12
the more than 4,000 entrants will be the lucky winner of Specific Details
$1,000. We will also donate $1,000 to Charlestons
Homeless ter at that time. During the announcement, we will dump the goblets out of the truck and onto the ground. Wade Wilson and His Debonaires will play during the
reception that follows.
We are sure that this event will be of interest to your viewers Summary
of Eye on Charleston at noon because of the huge response
we have had to the contest. Thank you for your interest. Thank You
Sincerely yours,
Complimentary Close
Signature
Signature
Candice Trotter
President Typed Name
Additional
CJT:lsj Information


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Media Event Letter Recently Published Book
Notify the media of a recently published book.
Donaldsons
223 Niagara Dr. Buffalo, NY 14290
September 12, 20XX
Mary Beth Parkinson
WWJ
874 7th St.
Buffalo, NY 14292
Dear Ms. Parkinson:





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I recently published a book called Entrepreneur at Risk. I am
sending you a copy to review.

The topic is worthy of your morning show, Good Morning Buffalo, and I would be interested in discussing the book as a guest on your show. The premise is that entrepreneurs are at risk in the U.S. and will soon be an endangered species. This is a very timely topic, as there is an upcoming forum on entrepreneurs at the Carmine Colosseum.

I have enclosed my biographical sketch, a synopsis of the book and a press release from my publishing house. I hope that you will take the time to look at these. Thank you for your attention.
Sincerely,
Signature
Larry J. Beiers
President
LJB:wuy

Announcement

Explanation


Persuasion

Summary
Thank You




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Media Event Letter Anniversary
Use this letter to alert the media of your companys anniversary.
Evanson Buick
7793 Sahara Way Reno, NV 89585
May 19, 20XX
Wayne Wilson
KBET
444 Plaza Dr.
Reno, NV 89588
Dear Mr. Wilson:
Evanson Buick will be turning 50 years old on May 29, Announcement
making us the oldest car dealership in Nevada. We will be staging a three-day celebration.
On May 29, we will kick off our anniversary with free hot- Explanation
air balloon rides and an ascension at 6 p.m. On May 30, we
will have the oldest race car driver, Judd MacElroy, signing
autographs from 2 to 4 p.m. On May 31, we will have our Specific Details 12
drawing for a Buick Reatta at 5:30 p.m., followed by a
picnic open to the public. During all three days, there will be
displays of antique autos and carnival rides for the children.
We think that our anniversary event would make a fine spot
on your Neighbors segment on the 6 oclock news.
I have enclosed a flyer describing the complete festivities. Summary
Thank you for helping us celebrate our anniversary. Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
M. Art Evanson
President
MAE:fsw
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Press Release Anniversary
Use this press release to alert the media of a companys anniversary.

Darlings s
309 Watertown Road Tacoma, WA 98438

January 19, 20XX
FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE









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On February 5, 20XX, Darlings s will celebrate its Announcement
50th anniversary, making us the oldest bakery in Tacoma.
Darlings s was established on February 5, 195X, by
Darrel Darling. At first, Darlings employed only three Explanation
people and was located on Front Street in downtown
Tacoma. After the war, Darlings moved to its present Specific Details
location on Watertown Road and now employs 25 people
full-time. Darlings specialties are cinnamon rolls, chocolate chip s and its patented double chocolate fudge bar.
Darlings will host an open house on February 5 at its plant. We are expecting children from several local schools,
residents from several nursing homes and group houses, as
well as our regular patrons. Please stop by for free
ments.

FOR MORE INFORMATION, CONTACT:
Darrel Darling, Jr. Contact Information
President
555-2211











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Media Letters


Press Release Speaking Engagement
Use this press release to alert the media of an upcoming
speech.

Los Gatos Community College
2312 College Dr. Los Gatos, NM 87531
505-555-6636


April 2, 20XX
FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE


Dr. Larry Thompson, noted historian, will speak April 20, Announcement
20XX, at Los Gatos Community College. He will speak on
History in the Making: How Current Events Redefine Topic
Our Lives.
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Dr. Thompson is a leading authority on trends in history. He Explanation
is professor of history from Cornell University in Ithaca,
New York. He is presently on leave from the university so he
can lecture around the world on this topic. His speech has Specific Details
been well-received throughout the United States. He will
explain how the fall of the Berlin Wall has affected all of us. After the speech, Dr. Thompson will hold a symposium on American business trends. He will autograph copies of his best seller, Wake Up, America, in the lobby of the Emerson Auditorium prior to his speech at 7 p.m.


FOR MORE INFORMATION, CONTACT: Contact Information
Sara Thompson
Public Relations Department
Los Gatos Community College



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Press Release Promotion
Use this press release to notify the media of a promotion within your business.

Ogden Manufacturing
58 Brigham Young Dr. Ogden, UT 84404
801-555-9889


August 30, 20XX
FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE


Ogden Manufacturing announces the promotion of Paul K. Announcement
Van Daan to Vice President, Accounting. He will replace Terrance Reilly, who is retiring.

Paul Van Daan joined Ogden Manufacturing in March 19XX Explanation
as an accountant and was promoted in 19XX to Department
12 Head, Accounts Receivable. In 20XX, he was promoted to
Division Head, Customer Relations. He is a graduate of Specific Details
Brigham Young University and is a Certified Public
Accountant. Previously, he worked for Dowling Box, Ltd.


FOR MORE INFORMATION, CONTACT: Contact Information
Dana Conrad
Human Resources Office
Ogden Manufacturing


A black-and-white photo is enclosed.








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Press Release New Employee
Use this press release to announce to the media that a new employee will be joining your firm.

KLINGER BLINDS
2221 Washington Flagstaff, AZ 86093


October 17, 20XX
FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE


Klinger Blinds announces that Karen M. Bark has been hired Announcement
as our director of sales. She will start in her new position on
November 1.


Karen M. Bark is a native of Southern California and was Explanation
previously employed by Tremore Window Treatments in Los
Angeles as sales coordinator. She has a degree in interior 12
design from the Design Institute in San Francisco. Ms. Specific Details
Barks design for Home Lovelys Home Beautification
Project won first place last year in the prestigious
competition.


FOR MORE INFORMATION, CONTACT: Contact Information
Trish Klinger
Klinger Blinds


A black-and-white photo is enclosed.







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Response to Editorial Positive
Use this letter to respond to an editorial when your firm agrees.

Greater Augusta Merchants
651 Main Augusta, ME 04326

September 22, 20XX

Bonnie Ervin, Station Director
WKLT Radio
1500 Walker
Augusta, ME 04325

Dear Ms. Ervin:





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We, the Greater Augusta Merchants, wish to commend you
for the stand you have taken against parking meters in
downtown Augusta. Your editorial of September 20 was well thought out.

We feel that placing parking meters in downtown Augusta
will discourage our customers from coming downtown to
shop. Your report of other nearby cities who have recently
installed parking meters and have seen a drop in customers
demonstrates that parking meters could create the same
problem if the city government passes this ordinance. We
strongly urge you to continue to speak out against this issue.

Thank you for your support of our position.

Sincerely,

Signature

Marvin Quackenbush
Executive Secretary

MJQmr


Announcement




Explanation


Specific Details




Thank You


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Response to Editorial Negative
Use this letter to respond to an editorial when your firm disagrees.
Greater Augusta Merchants
651 Main Augusta, ME 04326
October 20, 20XX
Bonnie Ervin, Station Director
WKLT Radio
1500 Walker
Augusta, ME 04325
Dear Ms. Ervin:
Although we agree with your previous editorials opposing Announcement
parking meters in downtown Augusta, we are not in
agreement with your editorial of October 18. We can see no
value in turning the downtown business district into a mall-
like area.
To resurface our streets and make them into malls will Explanation 12
irreversibly damage businesses downtown. The city
engineers estimate the mall project will disrupt business for a
minimum of a full year. Many downtown businesses are now Specific Details
struggling to stay alive, and the mall project would be their
death knell. Additionally, when completed, we would have Concession
50 percent fewer parking places for our customers. Perhaps
the downtown area does need cosmetic surgery, but not when Persuasion
it devastates the areas economy.
Thank you for your understanding of our opposition. We Thank You
hope that you will reconsider your position.
Sincerely,
Signature
Marvin Quackenbush
Executive Secretary
MJQmr

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Letter Asking to Make a Speech
Use this letter when you want to make a speech or presentation.
J.P. Gaslight and Co.
790 Eastern Ave. Ithaca, NY 14743
May 7, 20XX
Calvin S. Snyder, Program Chairman
Environmental Institute
445 J. Ave., East
Lincoln, NE 68302
Dear Mr. Snyder:
I would like to be put on the program of the upcoming Request
Environmental Institute Workshop in October 20XX, in
Chicago. My presentation on acid rain and its effect on the northeastern United States fits in with your theme,
Environmental Consequences.
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I have enclosed an outline of my proposed presentation. As Explanation
you can see, my recent research for our firm shows the
irreversible damage done to the northeastern United States
by acid rain. The presentation I have outlined was well-
received at the Global Earth Conference in Boston and last Specific Details
week at the Toronto Conference for Environmental
Concerns. I have also enclosed a list of other presentations I Enclosures
have given on environmental issues.
Thank you for your prompt consideration. Thank You
Sincerely,
Signature
Tracy Whiteman
TKW:cap
Enc.

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Letter Asking for a Correction
Use this letter to request that a correction be made from a published or broadcast report.
Williams and Sons
1002 Elm St. Topeka, KS 66404

August 11, 20XX

Anne Church, Managing Editor
Topeka Times
333 Main
Topeka, KS 66402

Dear Ms. Church:

Your article about Williams and Sons in last Sundays Times was Correction
most appreciated. However, there is one correction that needs to
be made.

In the article you stated that Williams and Sons has grown 15 Explanation 12
percent in the last year. In reality, we have grown 25 percent in
the last year 15 percent of that being in the last month. Specific Details
Perhaps this seems like a trivial matter, but the smaller number
is negative publicity for Williams. Would you please make a Request
correction in your upcoming business-news section this Sunday?

Thank you for your prompt consideration. We appreciate the Thank You
fine job you have been doing. Goodwill

Sincerely,

Signature

C. Blake Williams
President

CBW:nbc


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Checklist
Did you use a positive tone?
Does the letter sell itself?
Did you introduce the topic of the letter in the first part?
Did you include all of the necessary details for the media
such as date, time and place of event?
Did you include your name so you can be reached for
verification?
Did you include all background information or details
necessary in the second part of the letter?
Did you summarize or thank in the last part of the letter?
If you received the letter, would you do what you are
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HAPTER 13


Electronic Mail








Electronic mail, or e-mail, is a relatively new form of
written communication in the business world. The use of
e-mail meets the needs of the fast pace of business and
society. There are advantages and disadvantages to its use.
Speed and convenience are the primary advantages, while
lack of privacy and security are its disadvantages. There are
those in the business world who frown on the use of e-mail
because of its informality. The number of errant e-mails and

junk mail that have caused embarrassing situations for
employees can attest to the opinions that it is an inappropriate form of correspondence. Therefore, use e-mail cautiously and courteously. This chapter will provide the tips and techniques for smart e-mail practices.
Announcement of Meeting
Message Verification
Change in Client Status Announcement
When to Use E-mail
Request for Assistance
Request for Materials Ordered
Be Considerate
Project Offer
Follow-Up on Project

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Compliment to Employee for Work
Etceteras: Smileys, Acronyms, Caps and Flaming
Pros and Cons of E-mail Use
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of
each part of the e-mail. The first letter identifies each section of
the message. Subsequent messages identify only changes to the
basic format.
Step-by-Step Guide
Within a business, e-mail is primarily used to communicate
internally, providing the user with the convenience of reaching
many people quickly and simultaneously. It can be used to send
notices to departments, update team members on a project or
inform employees of benefits information or training
opportunities. The e-mail letter can be printed by the recipient to
be used for ation. While humor and informality can be
acceptable in this type of correspondence, the e-mail is strictly a
tool for quick communication.
Step 1: Most e-mail servers have boxes that look similar to
memo format. Complete the To and Subject boxes
13 first. The servers software records the date and time
the message was sent.
Step 2: Make a plan, then be brief and tell it like it is. A lot of
e-mails that are sent off the cuff are followed by
second and even third messages, trying to correct or
update the information sent in the first. Take time to
plan the message, and then be sure to carefully review
it before hitting the send button!
This is one form of communication where the
recipient expects you to get right to the point. Make
your request or share your purpose in the first
sentence.
Step 3: Keep it plain and simple. The message format that one
person sends can often get scrambled in transmission,
creating annoying effects for the recipient. Keep the
format and the text simple to reduce the occurrence of
garbled messages.
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Step 4: Sign off. Because e-mails come with a From box, the
recipient will know who has composed the message.
You may or may not want to add a complimentary
close and your name. Consider the recipient, the
context of the message and whether this courtesy is
applicable. Several options exist, including Regards,
Thanks, or simply your initials.
Note: Its business!
Remember to be businesslike at all times. Write with clarity and effectiveness, use standard English and always be courteous!
Be careful when sending material that may be
sensitive or confidential. Think of e-mail as a postcard
there is the potential for anyone to read it.
Messages can be intercepted or forwarded, whether
accidentally or intentionally, without your knowledge
or consent.
At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when you write an e-mail.

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Announcement of Meeting
This e-mail is used by a supervisor to set up a series of
meetings and to announce the first scheduled meeting.

To: Department Managers Send/Receive/Subject
From: C. Jarrett Information
Subject: Budget Meetings
We will be meeting to plan the capital budgets for the Announcement
coming year. I expect it will take three to four meetings for of Meeting
us to get the numbers on the table and then work them all out
to the final projections.
The first meeting will be held on November 2 at 10 a.m. in Confirmation of Date,
the conference room. We will set the remaining meeting Time and Place
dates/times during this first one. Bring your departments
budget projections and be prepared to explain how your Information Requested
department will contribute to the companys cost-cutting
drive.

Thanks, Complimentary Close
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Message Verification
Be sure to verify that your mail has been received,
especially those messages deemed a high priority. E-mail
networks, software and computers are not always reliable,
and messages sometimes go undelivered. In addition, you
are not likely to find out that the message was not delivered
unless you take the time to verify through the return
receipt box or another service that your e-mail software
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Change in Client Status
Announcement
This message announces the change in status of a client and explains an unusual situation and how it is to be handled.

To: All Supervisory Personnel
From: D. Broadwik
Subject: TriState Industrial Services Account Status

Effective immediately: DO NOT SERVICE TriState
Industrial Services.


TIS has dropped their contract with us, as of the end of last Description of
month. They are not entitled to any service. But evidently, Status Change
word has not gotten around to all of TISs personnel. We
continue to get calls from their people.

Please make sure all staff members are aware of this change. Additional
This may be awkward, since many staff members have built Information
relationships with people at TriState, but we cannot service a
company that is no longer a client.

If anyone from TriState needs to discuss this, forward them Contact Information
to me at ext. 920 or to Seta Alvarez at 923.

Thanks for your help with this situation.

Duane Broadwik








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When to Use E-mail

To reach a lot of people quickly at the same time

To send a short, personal message that doesnt require
official letterhead and signature
To send a message that does not need the security or
confidentiality of traditional mail

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Request for Assistance
This e-mail is used to direct all staff to help locate a missing file.

To: Human Resource Department Staff
From: T. Mattieson
Subject: Missing File on Capital Bank of Camden
We are not able to locate the project file for Capital Bank of Request
Camden. If you have borrowed it, have found it or have any
idea where it may be, please call me ASAP at ext. 1310.

Thanks!
Terry






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Request for Materials Ordered
A direct e-mail can be a very effective way of making a quick, informal request.

To: Roger Carlton
From: C. Celderon
Subject: Presentation Slides Not Delivered

Roger,

You were going to have the presentation slides for the Request
Cortland project to me by yesterday. They have not arrived.
Please get in touch with me ASAP! Well need those slides for tomorrow afternoons presentation!

I left a voice mail with you this morning, too. Additional
Information
Charlie


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Be Considerate
The more serious the message, the less appropriate the use
of e-mail for communication. Bad news of any kind should
never be sent via e-mail. Formal information can be
altered, forged or duplicated easily in an e-mail format.
Never send any communication that you would not be
willing to say to someones face. Always consider whether
the joke or witty memo is one you would share with your
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Project Offer
E-mail can be a quick way to informally offer a contract or
project to an employee or outside client. As with any job offer, be sure to consider the e-mail message like a contract. Outline all of the essential information the person will need to make the decision to accept or reject the project.
To: Patrick Murphy
From: R. Jordan
Subject: Book Revision Project

Pat,








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I have a book revision project if youre interested. The book
is Business Communication Made Easy. It was last revised in 1993.

Revision points would include:
Updating form sections
Updating samples and language in samples
Adding section on e-mail
Adding any communication strategies for new or
changed situations

This would be work for hire. Turn around time is about two months (text in by Nov. 29). Fee is $3,600.

If youre interested, Ill overnight the book to you so that you can take a look at it. We need to have a contract on this by midweek.

Thanks,

Rich


Offer
Background


Description of
Project Goals





Fee and Time Frame







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Follow-Up on Project
E-mail is a convenient form of communication when sharing
information is the primary purpose. A telephone call might take
more time than is really necessary to simply share the information,
and a formal letter would take more effort and resources than
necessary.
The following is a message that describes the employees plan of action and makes a request for input. The sender notes that an attachment will come with the message, making certain the
receiver will look for it.
To: Rich Jordan
From: P. Murphy
Subject: Revision Outline

Rich:

Im attaching the overall description of the plans I have for Notation of
revision of the BCME project. I will begin working directly Attachment
with the text that you sent me, but would like you to review State Purpose and
these plans for your input/direction. Make Request

I will be adding additional information about the use of Additional 13
postcards to Chapter 3. And, I will work up a new chapter on Information About
informal business meetings (i.e., the coffeehouse, Plans
bookstore, etc.).

Unless something unforeseen should arise, I will expect this Time Frame
project to be wrapping up by the end of next week. Hope that
will get it to your layout team with plenty of time to spare.
As always, your feedback is valuable and appreciated!
Murph





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Compliment to Employee for Work
An e-mail can be a personal way to say thank you to someone
for their great work on a project or proposal. The sender also has
the option of forwarding copies of this acknowledgment to other
members of the department as public recognition of the persons
work.
To: R. Littleton
From: J. Griener
Subject: Thank you!

Ron:

Thank you for all the great work on the Masterson project! Acknowledgment of
As you know, this was a really big one for our group, and it Work Well Done
was thanks to you that the project got out the door on time.

I and everyone at MetroCom truly appreciate and applaud Message of
your work! Appreciation

Best regards,
13 Jane


Etcetera ...
Smileys, or emoticons, are keyboard characters formed to create faces that express
emotions. While some of the computer savvy find these expressions to be fun additions to e-mail correspondence, many consider them to be just too cute for business. Limit their use to recipients youre sure wont mind.
The use of acronyms and online abbreviations should be limited to familiar recipients, as well. Not everyone will be aware that IOW means in other words, or that IMHO stands for in my humble opinion.
Using ALL CAPITAL LETTERS is inappropriate for e-mail communication.
Messages in all caps are much harder to read and indicate that you are shouting your message. Use capitals to STRESS certain words sparingly.
Flaming is an online term for messages that are highly emotional, angry or insulting. Be sure to check the tone of your message and keep your emotions in check.


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Checklist
Did you complete the to/from/subject information?
Did you make your request or share your purpose in the
first sentence or two?
Did you keep the format and text plain and simple to
avoid a garbled transmission?
Did you write with clarity, effectiveness and courtesy?
Did you check the content of your message for sensitivity,
confidentiality and privacy issues?
Did you include all the background information, project
details or request specifics so the recipient understands
your expectations?

E-Mail Pros and Cons
Pros Cons

Fast and easy delivery for official business
Tone can be very personal
Can reach many readers at one time Users can print a clear hard copy
Reader can save message in a file Easy for reader to reply
Inexpensive
Can be forwarded to another reader Eliminates unnecessary paper
Allows off-site workers to collaborate on
projects easily

Questionable appropriateness
Format often lost in recipients copy
Not completely secure and confidential
No real original hard copy with signature
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HAPTER 14


Postcard Correspondence








Postcards are cost-effective correspondence tools that
carry a lot of power. With the threat of mail-related terrorism,
people are apprehensive about opening mail. Postcards can
send a message, share information or promote an event easily,
and yet avoid creating anxiety about a threat for the recipient.
This chapter has sample postcards you might choose to compose. The types of postcards included are:
Seasonal Promotion
Acknowledging a Customer for a Special Occasion
Invitation 14
Reminder
At the side of the page, you will find a brief explanation of each part of the postcard. The first example identifies each section of the message. Subsequent messages identify only changes to the basic format.










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Step-by-Step Guide
Postcards are used as quick, informal forms of
communication. They grab the recipients attention, are easy to read and act on, and generally are more cost-effective than a formal letter with envelope. The ideal postcard is visually
appealing, with a direct, concise message.
Step 1: Plan the main purpose of your correspondence. Keep
it brief and to the point.
Step 2: Use catchy phrasing or specialized text to draw and
keep the readers attention. Write with clarity and
creativity.
Step 3: Remember that a postcard can be viewed by anyone at
any time. It is inappropriate to use this medium of
communication to announce or share sensitive or
confidential information.
Note: At the end of this chapter is a checklist to use when
you write a postcard.


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Seasonal Promotion
This postcard is used by a business to inform customers of a special promotion.

Capture the Spirit of Christmas! Announcement
of Event
Join us Saturday, December 2, for an afternoon of warmth Confirmation of Date,
and glad tidings as we welcome artist Gloria Patrick! Time and Place
Gloria will be showcasing the latest addition to her sculpture
series. Angels Bending Near the Earth is a breathtaking
piece! Be sure to see it and visit with the artist about her
work!

December 2 from 1:00 to 4:00 Business Location
The Marketplace Information
1445 Broadway, Minneapolis, MN 42535

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Acknowledging a Customer for a Special Occasion
This postcard acknowledges a customers birthday with a special discount.

Its Your Birthday! Occasion
Let us help you celebrate!
Present this card and we will give you 15% off Special Offer
your purchase as our special gift to you!
(Sale merchandise not included.)
Valid for 60 days.
Happy Birthday!
from
Gracies Gifts and Collectibles Business Logo

2891 Clairmont Jacksonville, Florida 35695
(904) 555-6301

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Invitation
This business is using a postcard to invite customers to an open house.
Youre Invited! Invitation

The Toulles House is having an Open House. Event Information
Please join us for caroling, cocoa and s
on Sunday, November 30,
anytime between 2:00 and 5:00 oclock in the afternoon.

Toulles House
1601 Lexington Drive
Nantucket Sound, Massachusetts 21807
508.555.0202






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Reminder
A postcard can be a very effective way of providing a quick, informal reminder.

Just a Reminder!

Your special order is ready for pickup! Reminder Information
Please call to make an appointment. Request

Harveys
Books and Papers

10 Lindlewood Lane Campaign, Washington 98940
509.555.0088





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Checklist
Did you make your message brief and to the point?
Did you use format and text that will catch the
recipients attention?
Did you write with clarity and creativity?
Did you check the content of your message for sensitivity,
confidentiality and privacy issues?
Did you include the background information, event
description, location and contact information so the
recipient understands the purpose of your message?










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Each example lists the following information in the format shown:
Addressee
Form of Address
Salutation
The eight broad categories of address are:
Professional Ranks and Titles
Federal, State and Local Government Officials
Military Ranks
Military Abbreviations
Diplomats
British Nobility
Clerical and Religious Orders
College and University Officials









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Professional Ranks and Titles
Attorney
Mr. R. Allan Whiteman, Attorney-at-Law or R. Allan Whiteman, Esq.
Dear Mr. Whiteman
or Dear R. Allan Whiteman, Esq.
Dentist
Jacqueline Lyster, D.D.S. (Office Address) or Dr. Jacqueline Lyster (Home Address)
Dear Dr. Lyster
Physician
Terry Thomlinson, M.D. (Office Address) or Dr. Terry Thomlinson (Home Address)
Dear Dr. Thomlinson
Veterinarian
Cathy Hines, D.V.M. (Office Address) or Dr. Cathy Hines
Dear Dr. Hines


















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Appendix


Federal, State and Local
Government Officials
Alderman
The Honorable Harriett Monson
Dear Ms. Monson
Assemblyman
See Representative, State
Associate Justice, Supreme Court
Mr. Justice Riley
The Supreme Court of the United States
Dear Mr. Justice
Cabinet Officers
Secretary of State
The Honorable Emily Williamson The Secretary of State
Dear Madam Secretary
Attorney General
The Honorable Martin Trymore
Attorney General of the United States
Dear Sir
Chief Justice, Supreme Court
The Chief Justice of the United States
Dear Mr. Chief Justice
Commissioner
The Honorable C. Thomas Black
Dear Mr. Black
Former U.S. President
The Honorable Wilson Edwards
Dear Mr. Edwards

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Governor
The Honorable Mary Simpson Governor of Utah
Dear Governor Simpson
Judge, Federal
The Honorable Tomas Gonzales
United States District Judge
Dear Judge Gonzales
Judge, State or Local
Chief Judge of the Court of Appeals The Honorable Larry Nelson
Dear Judge Nelson
Lieutenant Governor
The Honorable Aaron Gudenkauf
Lieutenant Governor of New Jersey
Dear Mr. Gudenkauf
Mayor
The Honorable W.M. Tied Mayor of Greenville
Dear Mayor Tied
President, U.S.
The President
Dear Mr. President
Representative, State (same format for assemblyman)
The Honorable Amanda Brown
House of Representatives State Capitol
Dear Ms. Brown



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Representative, U.S.
The Honorable Blake Grahame
The United States House of Representatives
Dear Mr. Grahame
Senator, State
The Honorable Matthew K. Billings The State Senate
State Capitol
Dear Senator Billings
Senator, U.S.
The Honorable Lillian Vries
United States Senate
Dear Senator Vries
Speaker, U.S. House of Representatives
The Honorable James B. Castle
Speaker of the House of Representatives
Dear Mr. Speaker
Vice President, U.S.
The Vice President
Executive Office Building
Dear Mr. Vice President














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Military Ranks
Admiral, Vice Admiral, Rear Admiral
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Admiral Rhodes
Airman
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Airman Smith
Cadet
Cadet Jack Roberts
United States Military Academy
Dear Cadet Roberts
Captain (Air Force, Army, Coast Guard, Marine Corps or Navy)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Captain Lane
Colonel, Lieutenant Colonel (Air Force, Army or Marine Corps)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Colonel Arnold
Commander (Coast Guard or Navy)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Commander Grove
Corporal
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Corporal Jones

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First Lieutenant, Second Lieutenant (Air Force, Army or Marine Corps)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Lieutenant OShannon
General, Lieutenant General, Major General, Brigadier General (Air Force, Army or Marine Corps)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear General Tubbs
Lieutenant Commander, Lieutenant, Lieutenant (JG), Ensign (Coast Guard, Navy)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Lieutenant Crites
Major (Air Force, Army or Marine Corps)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Major Giles
Master Sergeant (an example of other enlisted ranks having compound titles not shown here)
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Sergeant Kaye
Midshipman
Midshipman Sally Cole
United States Naval Academy
Dear Midshipman Cole







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Petty Officer and Chief Petty Officer
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Mr. Schmidt
Dear Mr. Trank or
Dear Chief Trank
Private
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Private Hesse
Seaman
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Seaman Waters
Specialist
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Dear Mr. Ledford
Dear Ms. Fetters
Other Ranks Not Listed
(Full Rank + Full Name + Comma + Abbreviation of Branch of Service)
Military Abbreviations
Army USA
Air Force USAF
Marine USM
Navy USN





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Diplomats
Ambassador to the U.S.
His Excellency Reginald Butters
The Ambassador of Bermuda
Excellency or
Dear Mr. Ambassador
American Ambassador
The Honorable J. Ellen Standford
Ambassador of the United States
Dear Ms. Ambassador or
Dear Madam Ambassador
American Charge dAffaires
Allen White, Esq.
American Charge dAffaires
Dear Sir
Minister to the U.S.
The Honorable Harry Lindermann
Minister of Liechtenstein
Dear Mr. Minister
Secretary-General, U.N.
Her Excellency Nbutu Montabi
Secretary-General of the United Nations
Dear Madam Secretary-General










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British Nobility
The correct form is to address a representative of the royal
person: The Private Secretary to Her Majesty, the Queen.
Baron
The Right Honorable Lord Swarthmore
Dear Lord Swarthmore or
My Lord Swarthmore
Baroness
The Right Honorable Lady Swarthmore
Dear Lady Swarthmore or
My Lady Swarthmore
Duke
His Grace, The Duke of Marlington
Dear Duke of Marlington or My Lord Duke
Duchess
Her Grace, The Duchess of Marlington
Dear Duchess or
My Lord Madam
Dukes Younger Son
The Lord William Wymore
Dear Lord William
Wife of Dukes Younger Son
The Lady William Wymore
Dear Lady William
Dukes Daughter
The Lady Regina Wymore
Dear Lady Regina



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Earl
The Right Honorable the Earl of Tropingham
Dear Lord Cresswell or
My Lord Cresswell
Earls Wife
The Right Honorable the Countess of Tropingham
Dear Lady Cresswell or
Madam Cresswell
Knight
Sir Reginald Williams
Dear Sir or
Dear Sir Reginald
Marquess
The Most Honorable the Marquess of Cullertshire
Dear Lord Ranson or
My Lord Ranson
Marchioness
The Most Honorable the Marchioness of Cullertshire
Dear Lady Ranson or
My Lady Ranson
Viscount
The Right Honorable the Viscount Lindsay
Dear Lord Lindsay or
My Lord Lindsay
Viscountess
The Right Honorable the Viscountess Lindsay
Dear Lady Lindsay or
My Lady Lindsay



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Clerical and Religious Orders
Abbot
The Right Reverend Walter Jones, O.S.B.
Right Reverend and Abbot of St. Benedicts
Dear Father
Archbishop
The Most Reverend Archbishop Terrance Smith Archbishop of Canada
Your Excellency or
Dear Archbishop
Archbishop, Anglican
To His Grace the Lord Archbishop of Canterbury
Your Grace or
My Dear Archbishop
Archdeacon
The Venerable the Archdeacon of New York
Venerable Sir
Bishop, Catholic
The Most Reverend Andrew Duncan Bishop of New York
Your Excellency or
Dear Bishop Duncan
Bishop, Episcopal
The Right Reverend Samuel Thomas Bishop of South Carolina
Dear Bishop Thomas
Bishop, Other Denominations
The Reverend Sandra Wright
Reverend Madam or
Dear Bishop Wright
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Brotherhood, Catholic, Member of
Brother Williams, S.J.
Dear Brother James
Brotherhood, Catholic, Superior of
Brother Edward, S.J., Superior
Dear Brother Edward
Canon
The Reverend Dwight Boyd
Dear Canon Boyd
Cardinal
His Eminence, Harold Cardinal Lyte
Your Eminence or
Dear Cardinal Lyte
Clergyman, Protestant
The Reverend Catherine Wilson
Dear Madam or
Dear Ms. Wilson
(or, if having a doctorate degree)
The Reverend Dr. John Wong
Dear Dr. Wong
Dean (of a Cathedral)
The Very Reverend Calvin Schmidt
Very Reverend Sir
Dean Calvin Schmidt
Dear Dean Schmidt
Monsignor
The Right Reverend Monsignor Ellis
Dear Monsignor Ellis or
Right Reverend Monsignor


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Patriarch (of an Eastern Church)
His Beatitude the Patriarch of New York
Most Reverend Lord
Pope
His Holiness, Pope John Paul II or His Holiness, the Pope
Your Holiness or
Most Holy Father
Priest, Roman Catholic
The Reverend Lynn Martin
Dear Father Martin or Reverend Father
Priest, Episcopal or Anglican
The Reverend Edward Arnold
Dear Mr. Arnold or
Dear Father Arnold
Priest, Denominational Protestant
The Reverend Cheryl Tims
Dear Ms. Tims
Rabbi
Rabbi Eli Gossman
Dear Rabbi Gossman
(if having a doctorate degree)
Rabbi David Weiss, D.D.
Dear Dr. Weiss
Sisterhood, Member of
Sister Mary Theresa, S
Dear Sister Mary Theresa or Dear Sister


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Sisterhood, Superior of
The Reverend Mother Superior, S
Reverend Mother
College and University Officials
Dean of a College or University
Dean Mary Carlson
Dear Dean Carlson
President of a College or University
President James Bagg
Dear President Bagg
Professor of a College or University
Professor Linda Tripp
Dear Professor Tripp

Note: The college officials educational degrees, if known,
may be added after the name.





















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NDEX














A
acceptance of resignation 179
acknowledging a complaint 194
disclaiming responsibility 197
explaining a misunderstanding 198
acknowledging a customer for a special occasion 242
acknowledging an accomplishment 75-78, 92
acknowledging an order
back order 201
explaining shipment procedures 202
acknowledgment and request for funds 89
acknowledgment of contribution 91
additional information 13
address, forms of 247-261
British nobility 256-257
clerical and religious orders 258-261
college and university officials 261
diplomats 255
federal, state and local government officials 249-251
military abbreviations 254
military ranks 252-254
professional ranks and titles 248
adjustment letter 83
announcement of meeting 230
announcing a price increase 53

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announcing a promotion
internal 178
personal 177
announcing a sales campaign
promotion or incentive program 50
to preferred customers 51
announcing new fringe benefits 82
announcing new products to a select group of customers 52
apologizing for an employees action 203
apology 117
appointment to a committee 100
appointment to office 99
appreciation and fund-raising event 90
appreciation 66
attention line 11
audience 2
B
birth of a child 113
birthday wishes 111
block format 17
body of the letter 12
British nobility 256-257
C
change in client status announcement 231
character reference 162
checklist 33, 61, 84, 106, 121, 133, 190, 212, 226, 237, 245
clarity 6
clerical and religious orders 258-261
collection letters 23-33
final notice/ultimatum 29
inquiry 27
insufficient funds 30
lost payment/apology 32
notification 25
reminder 26
thank you for payment 31
urgency 28


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Index



college and university officials 261
community activities letters 85-106
acknowledgment and request for funds 89
acknowledgment of accomplishment 92
acknowledgment of contribution 91
appointment to a committee 100
appointment to office 99
appreciation and fund-raising event 90
compliment 101
complimenting a speaker 103
expression of appreciation 98
grant request 94
invitation to serve 95
invitation to speak 102
letter to legislator showing concern 105
letter to legislator showing support 104
membership invitation 96
refusal of a request 97
solicitation of funds 87-88
thank you 93
completeness 6-7
compliment letter 101
compliment to employee for work 236
complimentary close 12
concise 6
concrete terms 7
condolence letters 123-133
brother 131
business associate 125
child 130
father 127
husband 129
mother 126
sister 132
wife 128
confidential 10
confirmation to speaker 184
confirming sales order 47-48
congratulations 71-73, 109, 110

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considerations of a business letter 2-3
audience 2
purpose 3
style/organization 3
subject 2
constructive writing 7
conversational style 6
correct writing 7
correcting an error 199
correction, asking for a 225
cover letter for resum 145-146
customer relations letters 191-212
acknowledging a complaint 194
disclaiming responsibility 197
explaining a misunderstanding 198
acknowledging an order
back order 201
explaining shipment procedures 202
apologizing for an employees action 203
correcting an error 199
following up on a complaint 195
general apology 200
general appreciation 193
holiday greetings 205
notifying customers of a move 204
notifying of a complaint 206-211
regaining a customers confidence 196
D
death of
brother 131
business associate 125
child 130
father 127
husband 129
mother 126
sister 132
wife 128
delinquent reply 43
diplomats 255
266 discontinuing a business relationship 186-187



Index



E
electronic mail 227-237
announcement of meeting 230
change in client status announcement 231
compliment to employee for work 236
follow-up on project 235
project offer 234
request for assistance 232
request for materials ordered 233
e-mail pros and cons 237
employment change letters 135-190
acceptance of resignation 179
announcing a promotion
internal 178
personal 177
character reference 162
confirmation to speaker 184
cover letter for resum 145-146
discontinuing a business relationship 186-187
follow-up after not getting the job 167
giving information 185
interview confirmation 142
introducing a new employee 189
invitation for an interview 171
job acceptance 152
job application 149
job hunter seeking an interview 141
job hunter seeking job with contact 150
job offer 172-174
job rejection 153
letter of introduction 163
letter of recommendation 160-161
negative resignation 156
new employee 175
not accepting possible job offer 154
positive resignation 155
progress report 164
promotion congratulations 176
recommending a raise 180
reference for former employee 159
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reference request 138
rejecting a request 188
rejection of a solicited application 170
rejection of an in-house job applicant 168
rejection of an unsolicited application 169
rejection of application 165
rejection of unsolicited business 181
request for employment reference 158
request for information 183
request for material 182
request for meeting 140
requesting appointment 147
response to job offer 157
responses to rejected job application 166
solicited application 151
thanks for interview 143
unsolicited application 144, 148
waiver of confidentiality 139
encouragement letter 81
explaining policy and position 80
expression of appreciation 98
extremely delinquent reply 44
F
federal, state and local government officials 249-251
file number 10
final notice/ultimatum 29
following up on a complaint 195
follow-up after a sale 79
follow-up after not getting the job 167
follow-up on letter sent 42
follow-up on project 235
format, business letter 15-22
block 17
hanging indented 21
memo 22
modified block 18
modified semi-block 19
simplified 20

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G
general apology 200
general appreciation 193
giving information 185
goodwill letters 63-84
acknowledging an accomplishment 75-78
adjustment 83
announcing new fringe benefits 82
appreciation 66
congratulations 71-73
encouragement 81
explaining policy and position 80
follow-up after a sale 79
invitation formal 69
invitation informal 70
official anniversary 67
recognizing a suggestion 65
speech 68
thanks for good work: outside vendor 74
grant request letter 94
H
hanging indented letter 21
holiday greetings 112, 205
I
illness hospital 115
inquiry 27, 118
inside address 10
insufficient funds 30
interview confirmation 142
introducing a new employee 189
introduction letter 41, 163
invitation 243
invitation for an interview 171
invitation to serve 95
invitation to speak 102
invitation formal 69
invitation informal 70


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J
job acceptance 152
job application 149
job hunter seeking an interview 141
job hunter seeking job with contact 150
job offer 172-174
job rejection 153
L
letter to legislator showing concern 105
letter to legislator showing support 104
letter, parts of 9-13
additional information 13
attention line 11
body 12
complimentary close 12
confidential 10
file number 10
inside address 10
letterhead 10
mailing instructions 13
postscript 13
salutation 11-12
signature 13
subject line 12
letterhead 10
lost payment/apology letter 32
M
mailing instructions 13
marriage 114
media letters 213-226
asking for a correction 225
asking to make a speech 224
media event letters
anniversary 217
recently published book 216
sales campaign kickoff 215



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press releases
anniversary 218
new employee 221
promotion 220
speaking engagement 219
response to editorial
negative 223
positive 222
membership invitation 96
memo 22
military abbreviations 254
military ranks 252-254
modified block 18
modified semi-block 19
N
negative resignation 156
new employee 175
not accepting possible job offer 154
notification letter 25
notifying customers of a move 204
notifying of a complaint 206-211
O
official anniversary letter 67
organization 3-6
part 1 of the body 4
part 2 of the body 4
part 3 of the body 4-5
P
personal business letters 107-121
apology 117
birth of a child 113
birthday wishes 111
congratulations 109
congratulations social 110
holiday greetings 112
illness hospital 115
inquiry 118
marriage 114
271



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refusal 120
thank you 116
positive resignation 155
postcard correspondence 239-245
acknowledging a customer for a special occasion 242
invitation 243
reminder 244
seasonal promotion 241
postscript 13
press releases
anniversary 218
new employee 221
promotion 220
speaking engagement 219
professional ranks and titles 248
progress report 164
project offer 234
promotion congratulations 176
prospective lead 38
purpose 3
R
recognizing a suggestion 65
recommendation letters 160-161
recommending a raise 180
reference for former employee 159
reference request 138
refusal 120
refusal of a request 97
regaining a customers confidence 196
rejecting a request 188
rejection of a solicited application 170
rejection of an in-house job applicant 168
rejection of an unsolicited application 169
rejection of application 165
rejection of unsolicited business 181
reminder
collection 26
postcard 244

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reminder that a sale is about to end 49
request action 119
request for
appointment 37
assistance 232
employment reference 158
information 183
material 182
materials ordered 233
meeting 140
requesting appointment 147
requesting customers assistance 45
response to editorial
negative 223
positive 222
response to job offer 157
responses to rejected job application 166
S
sales and promotional letters 35-61
announcing a price increase 53
announcing a sales campaign to preferred customers 51
announcing a sales campaign, promotion or incentive
program 50
announcing new products to a select group of customers
52
confirming sales order 47-48
delinquent reply 43
extremely delinquent reply 44
follow-up on letter sent 42
letter of introduction 41
prospective lead 38
reminder that a sale is about to end 49
request for appointment 37
requesting customers assistance 45
sales follow-up 46
sales letter to client 39
sales letter to current client 40
transmittal to current client 60
transmittal with information 57
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transmittal with instructions 54
transmittal with request 55
transmittal with sales information 58-59
transmittal with suggestion 56
sales follow-up 46
sales letter to client 39
sales letter to current client 40
salutation 11-12
seasonal promotion 241
seven Cs of style 6-7
signature 13
simplified letter 20
solicitation of funds 87-88
solicited application 151
speech, acknowledging 68
speech, asking to make a 224
style/organization 3
subject 2
subject line 12
T
thank you for payment 31
thank you 93, 116
thanks for good work: outside vendor 74
thanks for interview 143
transmittal
to current client 60
with information 57
with instructions 54
with request 55
with sales information 58-59
with suggestion 56
U
ultimatum 29
unsolicited application 144, 148
W
waiver of confidentiality 139



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